Super Smash bros. Rise of the Emissary

[Red]

It would be cool if Ike and Pit meet before meeting anyone else. 8)

how did you?!......

:D

You mean I was right?!? :O ?!?!?!?!?!?!?!

[Triforceman22]

It would be cool if Ike and Pit meet before meeting anyone else. 8)

how did you?!......

:D

You mean I was right?!? :O ?!?!?!?!?!?!?!

yeah!

next time, keep your foresights to yourself.... ;)

[Triforceman22]

Chapter 8!!!!!!

Enjoy. :)

Chapter 8, Prophecy

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"GWAAAAAAAA!!!!!" yelled a white figure, as it's inards exploded.
Two men landed on the ground, sheathing thier swords. The figure looked at the duo in disgust, "YOU! I'LL MAKE YOU PAY! SOMEDAY, I WILL MAKE YOU PAY!!!!!! I WILL HAVE MY REVENGE!!!!!!!" It screamed, as numerous explosions occured around it. The two men smiled, as the figure dissapeared in a roaring inferno.

"Well," said one of the men, "you going?" the other man looked at him. "Yeah... I need to get back to the Altea district...."

"I have to go back soon too.... My father will become even more ill if i'm not at his side..." said the other man. His Fire red hair blew in the wind. "Well, see ya around..." He said as he turned around, and walked off into the distance.

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In the main hall of the halbred, the Green figure sat upon his throne.
"Soon.... I will have my revenge....." he murmured to himself.
"I'll get you back for taking my hands...."
"If I can change the events that are told in the prophecy, I might have a chance....."


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There is an old prophecy told about in legends. Tales about the legendary orb of light. they say if one was to obtain it, his or her wishes would be granted. But, there is a seal around the orb. and the only thing that can break the seal, is to obtain the seven gems of chaos.

The prophecy also states that if the orb would fall into the wrong hands, three heroes would rise to stop it.

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Green fields

Ike has been traveling for days. He was running dangerously low on food and water.
"I should have brought more...." Ike grunted.
Then, he heard a noise.

"What was that?!" Ike asked, as he drew his golden blade.
A beam of light emmited from the sky, and came hurdling down to earth.
It hit the ground with a mighty force. Even Ike fell to the ground from the shock wave.

Ike stared at the small crater, that the beam made. Once the dust settled, Ike saw a glowing figure with wings, raise from the ground.
"Stay where you are!" ike yelled, as he pointed his blade towards it.

The figure's glow dimmed, and Ike saw his true appearance.
"Hello!" said the being.
"Wh..who are you?!" Asked a confused Ike.

"I am Pit, an elite angel, hand chosen from Palutena godess of light." He claimed.
"I can tell, your wings don't stand out at all..." Ike said sarcastically.

"Will you help me find a large ship?" Pit asked.
"why can't you fly?" Ike asked.
"Coming to ninten took alot out of me..." Pit told, "I won't be able to fly long distances for about a week..."

"Well, your in luck, I'm looking for a purple flying ship too!" Ike said.
"I guess you can tag along..."

"Alrighty then!" Pit said cheerfully, "let's go!"

and with that, the two set off for thier search for the Halbred.

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So, that is chapter 8.
I hope you liked it! :)

[DededeCloneChris]

More please? :(

[Triforceman22]

More please? :(

I make a chapter every 1-2 days.

Be patient. ;)

[Red]

It would be cool if Ike and Pit meet before meeting anyone else. 8)

how did you?!......

:D

You mean I was right?!? :O ?!?!?!?!?!?!?!

yeah!

next time, keep your foresights to yourself.... ;)

Sorry.

[Triforceman22]

It would be cool if Ike and Pit meet before meeting anyone else. 8)

how did you?!......

:D

You mean I was right?!? :O ?!?!?!?!?!?!?!

yeah!

next time, keep your foresights to yourself.... ;)

Sorry.

That's alrght.... :D

[Light]

Umm... anyone know why this is pinned?

[Flying Chickens]

It needs work.
More description, better spelling.
And just in general to be better than it is.
And don't try and pull a "Like you could do better" Out on me.
I have done better.
This isn't meant to be insulting your story completely.
All I am saying is work on it, make the reader feel like they're there watching it first-hand.

[DededeCloneChris]

It needs work.
More description, better spelling.
And just in general to be better than it is.
And don't try and pull a "Like you could do better" Out on me.
I have done better.
This isn't meant to be insulting your story completely.
All I am saying is work on it, make the reader feel like they're there watching it first-hand.

And eliminate the "It-a Toad, It's-a complicate" thing, is really annoying!

[Triforceman22]

It needs work.
More description, better spelling.
And just in general to be better than it is.
And don't try and pull a "Like you could do better" Out on me.
I have done better.
This isn't meant to be insulting your story completely.
All I am saying is work on it, make the reader feel like they're there watching it first-hand.

And eliminate the "It-a Toad, It's-a complicate" thing, is really annoying!

You mean the Mario speech?

Also, to the mod: Well can you give me tips on how to improve?
also since you have done "better" can I see a fiction of yours?

[Red]

It needs work.
More description, better spelling.
And just in general to be better than it is.
And don't try and pull a "Like you could do better" Out on me.
I have done better.
This isn't meant to be insulting your story completely.
All I am saying is work on it, make the reader feel like they're there watching it first-hand.

And eliminate the "It-a Toad, It's-a complicate" thing, is really annoying!

You mean the Mario speech?

Also, to the mod: Well can you give me tips on how to improve?
also since you have done "better" can I see a fiction of yours?

I think his fan fic is GREAT! ;D

[Triforceman22]

It needs work.
More description, better spelling.
And just in general to be better than it is.
And don't try and pull a "Like you could do better" Out on me.
I have done better.
This isn't meant to be insulting your story completely.
All I am saying is work on it, make the reader feel like they're there watching it first-hand.

And eliminate the "It-a Toad, It's-a complicate" thing, is really annoying!

You mean the Mario speech?

Also, to the mod: Well can you give me tips on how to improve?
also since you have done "better" can I see a fiction of yours?

I think his fan fic is GREAT! ;D

Can you give me a link to it?

[Flying Chickens]

It needs work.
More description, better spelling.
And just in general to be better than it is.
And don't try and pull a "Like you could do better" Out on me.
I have done better.
This isn't meant to be insulting your story completely.
All I am saying is work on it, make the reader feel like they're there watching it first-hand.

And eliminate the "It-a Toad, It's-a complicate" thing, is really annoying!

You mean the Mario speech?

Also, to the mod: Well can you give me tips on how to improve?
also since you have done "better" can I see a fiction of yours?

Not a fan-fiction, I don't write those.
But here's something  that I have on the Internet.
http://forums.projectfcd.com/index.php?topic=2049.0
There.

[Triforceman22]

It needs work.
More description, better spelling.
And just in general to be better than it is.
And don't try and pull a "Like you could do better" Out on me.
I have done better.
This isn't meant to be insulting your story completely.
All I am saying is work on it, make the reader feel like they're there watching it first-hand.

And eliminate the "It-a Toad, It's-a complicate" thing, is really annoying!

You mean the Mario speech?

Also, to the mod: Well can you give me tips on how to improve?
also since you have done "better" can I see a fiction of yours?

Not a fan-fiction, I don't write those.
But here's something  that I have on the Internet.
http://forums.projectfcd.com/index.php?topic=2049.0
There.

Wow....

my fic sucks compared to this....
can yopu give me any tips on how to improve?