Hello guys!
This is a Super smash brothers fic!
It will be about what happens in Subspace emmisary mode.
Even though I don't know what will happen... But this is my version.
feel free to comment on this.
Enjoy! :)
SUPER SMASH BOTHERS, RISE OF THE EMISSARY
Prologue: This World....
In this world, trophies fight.
They know nothing but fighting. Fighting is the sole reason for their existence.
Being turned back into a trophy, being unable to fight, is much like death.
Those are the rules of this world.
But...
When someone...or something...breaks those rules, the world will pay a terrible price...
The world will soon meet this terrible price.....
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Chapter 1 The beginning of the end
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"GO!" Yelled the announcer, as two opponent's feet touched the ground.
One was wearing navy overalls, and a blood red shirt. The golden buttons on his overalls shone brightly, as he took his fighting stance. He also wore a hat that was the same colour of his shirt.
It had a large "M" stiched to the hat.
"Hmmmmm..... I wonder what i'm-a gonna do?" The man thought, as he scratched his finely brushed Mustache.
The other opponent, was a small round pink entity. His feet were light red. He was about three feet in hieght. his saphire eyes gleamed, as he also took his fighting stance.
The rules were simple.
Whoever was defeated, would be turned back into a trophy. Which was like being killed, only much
much worse.
In Ninten, those were the rules. No one ever broke these rules, for there would be
dire consequences that would soon follow.
As the crowd in the stadium roared in excitement, the man in red ran towards the pink puffball.
The man swiped at the other with his fist, but the pink one dodged swiftly, causing the man to lose his balance.
As the puffball saw his chance, he took out a large wooden hammer. It had a yellow star painted on it. as the man got back up, the puff swung the hammer with all his might.
It hit the man square in the stomach, and sent him flying.
As the man hit the ground, the puff then took out a curved blade.
he then, jumped into the air. He spun around, and then he came down.
Once he hit the ground, his sword turned into a wave of energy, and it was coming closer to the man.
The man got up once again, and jumped over the wave of energy, and dashed towards the puffball.
"This ends-a now!" Yelled the man, as he grabbed the pink ball.
The ball squeeled in pain, as the man threw him to the floor.
He then started to pummel on the defenceless ball.
He was one more hit away from having the ball turn back into a trophy.
The man raised his fist, and looked at the ball straight in the eyes.
The blue eyes had fear, and sadness in them, a small tear dropped down his pink cheek.
The man hesitated a little more, until he made up his mind.
The man got off the ball, and raised a hand towards the pink ball.
The ball looked at the man, and then grabbed his hand.
Once he pulled him up, he looked at him again.
" You don't-a deserve to be a trophy." The man said.
"No one-a does. This is something I should have-a thought about a long-a time ago."
The man raised his hand once more.
"Friends?" Asked the man.
The pink blob nodded, and smiled, as his small pink hand grabbed the white glove.
The crowd boo-ed with dissapointment.
As the two ignored all the negative cheering, they noticed that the blue sky above them, was turning crimson.
Then, out of the clouds, came the deafening roar of a floating battle ship.
The front of the ship had a white metal mask on it, while the back of the ship, had purple wings.
"This doesn't look-a good..." the man uttered to himself.
Well thats chapter 1.
I hope you all liked it.
Next chap will be up sometime tomorrow. :)
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I need to see if people like it.
I got an intresting plot for this.
But I need readers....
Also, if you read it, please post.
I love criticism.
i liked it ;D really good.the part where kirby gets beat up makes me sad :'( :'( though kirby didnt get beat up that bad in the movie.
well, i'm glad someone is posting......
here is chapter 2.
Enjoy! :)
CHAPTER 2: Primids and Pirhana's
The large battle ship covered the whole stadium in it's shadow.
Most of the crowd has fled already in fear.
The man in red, and the pink puffball kept staring at it. They had a worried look on thier faces.
Just then, a hatch on the ship opened, and purple blobs of ooze came pouring out of it.
The man and the ball took thier fighting stances.
As the blobs hit the ground, some of them moved towards eachother, until they made larger blobs.
Then, a figure rised out of each giant blob.
It had an olive green coloured body, while it's head was yellow, Purple, and black. It's red eyes glared at The man and the puff ball.
Just then, two women that were in th stadium ran towards them.
One woman jumped into the air. Then, long green straks of energy surrounded her, and she vanished.
She reappeared beside The man and puffball.
"Me, and Peach thought you two needed help." She said to the two.
"MARIOOOO....." Yelled the other woman.
The man looked up, and saw the woman, gliding with her white parasol.
"Peach, Zelda, It's-a good to see you again!" Mario said.
"This isn't the time for warm greetings," Zelda said, as she pointed to the creatures that were coming closer.
"All right. Let's-a go!" Yelled Mario.
"Stay where you are Primids!" Yelled an unknown voice.
Just then, the creatures stopped dead in thier tracks.
The four heroes looked around for the origin of the voice.
All of a sudden, a green creature, with yellow bulging eyes appeared.
He was on some floating device. The heroes wondered why it didn't have any hands.
It had a circular device under it. It had a red "X" painted on the metal ball.
Just then, the cable supporting the metal ball, let go, and the ball came crashing down to the stadium below.
The creature nodded it's head, as it flew towards the halted ship.
"That's what you get for breaking the rules!" It said, as he went back into the ship.
As the heroes took thier fighting stances once again, two robots appeared behind the ball.
They attached thier robotic hands to each side of the ball, and pulled.
Then, te ball split in two, and inside it, was a blue container holding a small black sphere inside of it. Blue electricity was sparking inside the container.
Then Mario noticed the timer below it.
"It's a bomb!" Mario yelled.
The moustachoed plumber ran towards it with all of his speed.
Just then, he heard an explosion behind them.
Mario turned around, only to have an onyx coloured cannon ball hit him in the face.
Mario screamed, as he flew out of sight.
A small star in the sky was all that remained of him.
The puffball looked around, and heared screaming.
The ball looked around and saw Peach, an zelda. Locked in elaborate iron cages.
Then thier captor lowered his big head.
He was an over-sized pirhana plant. He had orange petals around his large head.
As looked at the ball, he banged the two cages together, and roared loudly at the pink ball.
the ball took his fighting stance, and the battle begun.
I liked this chapter
I hoped you liked it. ;D
I need more readers, and if you do read this, please post.
I like it. Very detailed.
You didn't need to tell us the color of some things such as the cannon ball
Quote from: Ridley on October 04, 2007, 05:52:09 AM
You didn't need to tell us the color of some things such as the cannon ball
But I like detailing.... ;D
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 04, 2007, 11:59:28 AM
Quote from: Ridley on October 04, 2007, 05:52:09 AM
You didn't need to tell us the color of some things such as the cannon ball
But I like detailing.... ;D
it does make the story a bit better! still a good story.
Quote from: WaterGod on October 04, 2007, 12:48:06 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 04, 2007, 11:59:28 AM
Quote from: Ridley on October 04, 2007, 05:52:09 AM
You didn't need to tell us the color of some things such as the cannon ball
But I like detailing.... ;D
it does make the story a bit better! still a good story.
It seriously does!
I don't think you want a story like, "Once upon a time, there was two people. One was on one side, one was on the other. They did some stuff, decided not to do that stuff anymore, and a flying thing came."
NOBODY wants THAT!
But so far so good TFM!
i'm too busy today, so next chap. won't be up till tomorrow.
Hello again guys.
Here is hapter 3.
Enjoy. ;D
Chapter 3 Knight Vs. Plant
Petey Pirhana swung one of the iron cages at The puffball.
He barely dodged it. He lost his footing in the process, and fell back.
Petey roared in victory, as he stomped over to the fallen Pink puff.
The ball got back on his two feet, and took out his wooden hammer.
He charged at the plant with all his speed, and jumped towards the monster's green face.
with hammer in hand, he swung it in the air, and bashed Petey in the forehead.
The over-sized Pirhana plant screamed in agony, as he swung the cages around violentley.
The ball then leaped in the air, and started to float over the enemy.
Once he was on top of him, he curled his arms in, and shut his eyes.
Then suddenly, his soft pink texture turned to solid rock.
The now transformed puffball, came crashing down on Petey.
This time, Petey dodged.
the ball hit the ground with a loud thud.
Petey Jumped back, and fired a large cannonball out of his mouth.
as it came hurdeling towards the ball, he opened his mouth, and started to inhale.
The cannonball started to get pulled into the vortex, until it was in his mouth.
The Puff then swallowed it whole.
"It looks like he's pulling off his copy manoever!" zelda cried, as she hung onto the bars of the cage for dear life.
Then, the ball flashed, and a bright light emmited from him.
As the two princesses opened thier eyes, they saw the ball transformed into a giant cannon ball.
The ball flung himself towards the giant pirhana plant.
He hit Petey straight in the chest.
Petey was sent flying, as was the puff ball.
Petey convenientley dropped both cages onto the stadium.
Petey finally hit the colluseum's wall.
You see...
the arena was a floating platform, in the middle of a colluseum.
If the ball stopped, both would plumitt into a bottomless pit.
Then, the ball turned back to normal, and quickly floated to the safety of the arena.
While Petey fell into the abyss.
the ball unlocked the cages of both princesses.
"THE BOMB!" zelda yelled, to the almost detonated bomb.
The timer said only 10 second remained.
So Zelda quickly grabbed the ball, and Peach.
"FAROE'S WIND!!" she yelled, as the streaks of green flew around the trio, and in a second, they vanished.
Once the timer hit Zero, the Colluseum, and everything surrounding it, was engulfed in a black sphere of energy.
and in a flash, there was a giant hole replacing it.
The trio landed in a nearby tree, as they got down, they looked ito the distance where they once stood mere seconds ago.
"That was close...." Zelda said, as she let out a sigh of relief.
She turned towards the ball.
"Good job out there Kirby," she commented.
"I wonder where mario is?" Peach asked.
"Don't worry, he'll be fine...." zelda replied, "But we need to figure out whats going on...."
"Right..." Peach said, as the trio walked off.
Not knowing that Ninten would be in grave danger soon.
Well, thats chap. 3
I hope you liked it. :)
How are you going to make chapter 4?
Quote from: Ridley on October 07, 2007, 07:10:09 AM
How are you going to make chapter 4?
what do you mean?
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 07, 2007, 09:26:02 AM
Quote from: Ridley on October 07, 2007, 07:10:09 AM
How are you going to make chapter 4?
what do you mean?
I mean the only thing you could write about now is the part where Pit flies and that is not much.
Quote from: Ridley on October 07, 2007, 11:24:59 AM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 07, 2007, 09:26:02 AM
Quote from: Ridley on October 07, 2007, 07:10:09 AM
How are you going to make chapter 4?
what do you mean?
I mean the only thing you could write about now is the part where Pit flies and that is not much.
Do YOU know where Mario went? :P
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 07, 2007, 02:33:51 PM
Quote from: Ridley on October 07, 2007, 11:24:59 AM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 07, 2007, 09:26:02 AM
Quote from: Ridley on October 07, 2007, 07:10:09 AM
How are you going to make chapter 4?
what do you mean?
I mean the only thing you could write about now is the part where Pit flies and that is not much.
Do YOU know where Mario went? :P
I think I saw him fighting with Pit in the co-op update remember?
Here's chapter 4.
Enjoy! ;D
Chapter 4 Attack!
Pellet Town
"Oof... My heads-a aching..." Mario grumbled, as he stood up.
Mario was miles away from where he was fighting kirby.
He was hit quite hard, so his sight wasn't good at the time.
He stumbled around, as he tried to keep his footing.
He was in a wide open field. the grassy plains blew in the wind.
Just then, Mario saw a blurry yellow object infront of him.
"Huh?" he said, as he walked over to the thing.
He reached his hand out, and felt the smooth fur on it.
Just then, he felt a burning sensation crawl up his rght arm.
He had just been electrocuted.
"Pika!" the object yelled.
Mario looked up, and saw that the thing infront of him, it was none other than Pikachu.
"Oh, it's-a you," Mario said to the famous Poke'mon.
"Pika!" said the electricity type Poke'mon cheerfully.
"we should find your trainer, and see whats-a going on..." Mario told.
Pikachu nodded, turned around, and started to walk.
Mario was worrying about Zelda, Peach, and Kirby, as he followed the Poke'mon.
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Smash Fields: before the Subspace explosion
"SKRAAAAAA!!!!!" a man yelled, as his blue hilted sword swiped at a green coloured Dinosaur.
the dino dodged the attack, and took his tongue out.
His tongue stretched out, and aimed at the man.
The tongue hit the man's green tunic with not alot of force.
The man looked at the tongue, and then looked at his opponent.
the dino then swallowed the man whole.
As the man bashed around in the his stomach, the green dino then layed a green spotted egg.
seconds later, the man slashed his way out of the egg.
He jumped back, his chainmail covered in slobber.
"Heh...heh... youv'e gotten better since last time...." The man commented.
"But remember this. I, Link will never loose to a dinosaur!!!"
Link drew his sword, and dashed towards his opponent.
Just then, they heard a loud explosion.
The two stopped fighting, and looked around for the cause of the impact.
In the distance, they saw a large black orb of energy, emmit around a small stadium.
They then saw a large ship come near them.
The two kept thier guards up, as the ship hovered over them.
"What the?!" Link said.
Then, the hatch on the bottom opened up, and purple specks rained down.
Primids now surrounded the two contestants.
"Looks like were outnumbered...." Link told the dino.
The green lizard nodded.
A few Primid's arms began to glow red.
Link took out his hero's bow, and strung an arrow.
He fired it at a Primid.
The arrow hit the Primid between the eyes.
In a second, the Primid exploded into tiny purple specks.
"One down, thirty more to go...." Link said to himself.
meh, I didn't really like this one...
well I hope you liked it... :)
Quote from: Ridley on October 07, 2007, 02:45:07 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 07, 2007, 02:33:51 PM
Quote from: Ridley on October 07, 2007, 11:24:59 AM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 07, 2007, 09:26:02 AM
Quote from: Ridley on October 07, 2007, 07:10:09 AM
How are you going to make chapter 4?
what do you mean?
I mean the only thing you could write about now is the part where Pit flies and that is not much.
Do YOU know where Mario went? :P
I think I saw him fighting with Pit in the co-op update remember?
I'm not following that though....
The plot was made before that was updated....
still great. the added feeling of mystery before you introduce a character is great!! the one thing im kinda disappointed with in the plot is that pikachu isnt wild. i also hope pokemon trainer isnt his trainer
Quote from: WaterGod on October 07, 2007, 04:09:34 PM
still great. the added feeling of mystery before you introduce a character is great!! the one thing im kinda disappointed with in the plot is that pikachu isnt wild. i also hope pokemon trainer isnt his trainer
This is a "Trained" Pikachu. ;)
Also, I havn't played any Poke'mon games.
can anyone tell me what trainers are there?
It would help. :P
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 07, 2007, 06:53:15 PM
Quote from: WaterGod on October 07, 2007, 04:09:34 PM
still great. the added feeling of mystery before you introduce a character is great!! the one thing im kinda disappointed with in the plot is that pikachu isnt wild. i also hope pokemon trainer isnt his trainer
This is a "Trained" Pikachu. ;)
Also, I havn't played any Poke'mon games.
can anyone tell me what trainers are there?
It would help. :P
What if I called him Red.
would that dissapoint you? :P
lets find out ;)
Quote from: WaterGod on October 07, 2007, 06:58:45 PM
lets find out ;)
Okay then... :D
Since I got tomorrow off....
(In Canada, we have thanksgiving tomorrow,)
I'll be posting Chap. 5 up tomorrow.
bet you
can't wait... :D
wow Epic misplacement
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 07, 2007, 07:46:09 PM
Quote from: Linkfan71 on October 07, 2007, 07:45:18 PM
wow Epic misplacement
...What?
Well, im not saying its bad its just that it is a
Fan Fic so i thought it should go in the fan fic board.
But i have a halo thread in power on so :P
Awesome storyline! I laughed at Link anoucing that he would not be beaten and then getting swallowed whole.
Quote from: Linkfan71 on October 07, 2007, 07:53:30 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 07, 2007, 07:46:09 PM
Quote from: Linkfan71 on October 07, 2007, 07:45:18 PM
wow Epic misplacement
...What?
Well, im not saying its bad its just that it is a Fan Fic so i thought it should go in the fan fic board.
But i have a halo thread in power on so :P
I like to think of this as the fiction of the Smash boards....
Also, more people will reply to it here.... :P
Here is Chapter 5.
Enjoy! :)
Chapter 5: Getting Involved
The last Primid blew into tiny purple specks.
Their battle lastedfor quite a while, since the sun had already set.
Link sheathed the blue hilted sword, and looked back at the Dinosaur.
"Thanks for having my back Yoshi...." he said.
The Dinosaur smiled back at him.
They saw the ship fly off in the distance.
"I'm going after it..." Link spoke out.
"I need to know what's going on..."
Yoshi nodded.
Link then jumped off the small cliff they were on, and sprinted across the large field below it.
Yoshi turned around, and ran in the other direction.
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Pellet Town: Central Square, Poke' district
Mario and Pikachu finally entered Pellet town.
The houses were lined up around a small fountain located in the middle of the town.
Pikachu guided Mario to a particular house.
"Pika!" Pikachu yelled, as he knocked on the wooden door.
After a few seconds, the door quietly opened.
there stood a boy dresed in wearing jeans, a red shirt, and a red hat.
"Pikachu! I was wondering where you went..." He said softly, as he pet his poke'mon.
The boy then looked up at the famous plumber.
"And you are..?" he asked.
"I'm-a Mario, it's a pleasure to-a meet you!" Mario responded cheerfully.
The boy's eyes widened.
"Your the famous Mario?!" He asked anxiously.
"Yes, it's-a me..." He said.
"I..I can't believe it! I'm your biggest fan!" the boy yelled out happily.
"My name's Red, it's a pleasure to meet you!" he said.
"I was-a wondering, if you wanted to help-a me find-a my friends..." Mario asked.
"Sure, i'll go!" Red replied, "I just need to get some of my other Poke'balls..."
As Red rushed back inside, Pikachu looked at Mario.
"He will-a come in handy..." Mario said to him.
"Pika..." Pikachu sighed.
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Galactic federation building, conference room, Bryyo district
"Samus will go!" Yelled one of the officials.
"Why should we send her?" asked another official.
"She is the strongest of our army!" he replied back.
"ENOUGH!!!" yelled the general.
"This task is for the elite soilders only! Samus is not one of the elite...."
One of the officials stood up, "She is the strongest of us all! She even beat you in hand-to hand combat, maybe thats why you won't promote her..." He said angrily.
"Fine, fine..." the general yelled.
He pressed a button on te desk, which brought up a speaker.
"Samus Aran, please report to the conference room immediatley!"
He said into it.
Seconds later, the doors to the room swung open, and in came a blonde haired woman.
She wore a tight blue suit that covered he whole body except her head. There was a silver blaster
located on her belt.
"Whats the problem?" she asked.
"We have had reports that a mysterious looking ship has been roaming Ninten, leaving destrution wherever it went." the general said.
"So, you want me to check it out huh?" The woman asked.
"Yes. and if you suceed in this, I will personally promote you to the elite squadron."
he said.
A smile cracked on the woman's pale face, "it's about time..." she said with relief, "do I have permission to use my Varia suit?" She asked.
"Yes, I think you will need it..." the general replied.
"Now Go!"
The woman nodded, as she turned around, and headed towards the docking station.
Once she was there, she spotted her orange coloured ship. It's green visor gleamed in the light, as the door to it automatically opened.
"Here we go again....." she said to herself, as she entered the ship.
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I liked this chapter for some reason...
:D
well, I hope you liked it. :)
is anyone still reading this?
if so, please post.
Dude....
I read all your chapters, and I must personally say that I am hooked.
I swear if your story line ISN'T the way the game IS, I'll be so surprised!
But wouldn't it be awesome if everything you said would be Exactly how the game really was?!
That'd be Crazy!
Anyway, your stories/Chapters are very good, and addicting.
Please, keep up the good work and continue it!
AND ADD SONIC!!! :P
Quote from: StarWindWizard7 on October 09, 2007, 08:27:47 AM
Dude....
I read all your chapters, and I must personally say that I am hooked.
I swear if your story line ISN'T the way the game IS, I'll be so surprised!
But wouldn't it be awesome if everything you said would be Exactly how the game really was?!
That'd be Crazy!
Anyway, your stories/Chapters are very good, and addicting.
Please, keep up the good work and continue it!
AND ADD SONIC!!! :P
ohhhh....
don't you worry...
Our Blue hero will make his way into this... ;)
Here's chapter 6.
Enjoy. :)
Chapter 6, Descent
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Angel land Kingdom,Sky world,
The kingdom of Angel land was not a part of Ninten, it was a floating island that circled the planet daily. The residents who lived there were angels. They watched over the planet, to keep the world from falling apart. It's main city, Sky world was where all the heroes lived.
It has been 20 years since Pit, an elite angel, destroyed the evil Medusa, the godess of darkness.
Pit felt like he wasn't needed anymore.
The angel usually travled to the hall of heroes, where there was a magic cauldron which showed any current threat, that would endanger Ninten.
Pit went there everyday, to see if the world needed his help, but unfortunatley all the problems were already solved.
Until one day....
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Pit sighed, as he looked down at the endless clouds that were under him.
"It's been too long..." He said to himself.
Just then, he heard a noise coming from the hall of heroes. The sound of an explosion.
Pit's wings widened, as he flew towards the holy building.
Once he got to the entrance, he dashed towards the cauldron, to see if everything was alright.
He finally reached the large room containing the cauldron.
He looked into it, and prepared for the worst.
He saw a small colluseum in the sky.
"What's so bad about that?" Pit asked himself.
Then he looked again.....
A dark orb surrounded the colluseum, and in seconds, it was gone.
Pit had a worried look on his face.
Then, he heard the sound of someone entering the room.
"Who's there?" Pit asked, not bothering to look.
"It's me.." said a femenin voice.
Pit's wings opened, and turned around.
It was Palutena, godess of light.
"My lady...." Pit said softly, as he came to her and knelt before her.
"I have a task for you Pit..." Palutena told him.
"what do you need?" Pit asked.
"I need you to find out whats going on, I have a feeling that ninten is in grave danger."
She said worringly.
"I will leave at once!" Pit said happily.
"Here," Palutena said, as she held out her hand.
a small orb of light appeared in her palm.
And then, the light turned into the shape of a bow.
"You will need this..." Palutena said, as she used her power to make the bow float over to the elite angel.
Pit grabbed the bow. It was gold and blue in colour.
two rings appeared on Pit's right arm.
"Now go!" she said, as she pointed to the portal that lead angels to Ninten.
Pit smiled, as he ran towards the floating stairs.
Once he got to the top, he turned around, and held his arms out.
Then, the wall behind him opened like a door.
Pit closed his eyes, and fell backwards.
as he fell in the clouds, he turned, and soared downwards.
"I will not fail you!" Pit said as he flew towards Ninten.
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I hope you liked it. :)
yea the 5th chapter was my favorite also! i think im ok with the fact that reds pikachus trainer. chapter 6 was also good. but pit would say "my lady" to palutena
fixed. :P
ashei should be coming here soon.....
:P
agh, I havn't got the petience to make chapter 7 today, but it'll be up sometime tomorrow, I promise. :)
sorry for the "delay.." :P
here's chapter 7.
Enjoy.
Chapter 7, Determination
"We've been walking for hours!" whined Red.
"Where are we going anyways?"
Mario turned to Red.
"You-a know how ninten is-a made up of-a diffrent districts?" He asked.
"Well, yeah.." Red replied.
"What holds-a this planet together, is the power of-a the almighty smash ball."
Mario told, "I have-a feeling that the smash ball has-a something to do with all of this."
He said.
"Well, where is this.. smash thingy?" asked Red.
"They say that the smash ball is-a located in the core of our planet." Mario said,
"but the only way to get through there, is by going to the lylat district. That's all I-a know."
"Pika!" Shouted Pikachu.
"Right.." Said Red, "we gotta get to this Lylat district."
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Kirby, Peach, and Zelda had walked ino a dense forest.
"Where are we?" asked Peach. Zelda took out her map of ninten.
"It looks like we are in the dream land district." She said.
"Pooooyo!" said Kirby.
"thats right Kirby."said Zeda, "This is your homeland..."
As the trio kept on moving, they heard scufles in the bushes.
Zelda heard thse noises, and her hand started to glow blue.
"I feel a strange energy.." She said, "Stay still."
Then, a giant Spider jumped out of the bush, and lunged for peach.
As Peach shrieked in horror, she waited for it to be over.
All she heard was a slashing noise.
Peach opened her eyes, only to find the spider, cut in two.
"Was that one of you guys?" asked the confused princess.
Zelda heard something, and looked up into the trees.
There stood a figure on one of the branches.
"Who are you? Show yourself!" zelda demanded.
"Calm down, I am not your enemy." the figure said, as he jumped to the ground.
the figured eyed Kirby, "So, your tied up in all of this mess eh?" the figure asked.
"Who are you?" Asked Zelda.
The figue walked a little closer to he trio.
"You can call me Meta knight."
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Link tried to pursue the ship with all his speed, but to no avail.
Link huffed and puffed, as he took a seat on a nearby rock.
"Aaaargh, i'm not fast enough.." Link complained.
"If only there was some call grass, then I would be able to catch up with him with Epona.."
Link looked around, he could only find a substitute for the call grass.
"Well, it's worth a shot..." Link said, as he put the grass near his mouth.
He whstled into it, and played the song of his horse.
After a while, he saw a figure on the horizon, running towards him.
"Epona!" Cried Link with joy, "Now we can pursue them!"
Link climbed aboared the carrier horse, and off they went.
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Crimean kingdom, Tellius district
"Good job Ike!" yelled Titania, "we probably got 5000 gold by clearing out those bandits."
Ike was the leader of a small mercenary group, that went on an amazing adventure.
They even stopped the war between Daien and Crimea.
It has been two years after that war, and Ike longed for any important news.
After they returned to thier stronghold, Ike wondered about the Black knight.
The black knight was a general in Daien's army. He was also the one who killed Ike's father, Greil.
Ike wanted Revenge, so he made an oath to kill the black knight, to avenge his dead father.
As the sun rose the next day, Ike was going to train with his colleage, and friend, Boyd, when Titania burst into his room.
"Ike, Ike, we have trouble!" Yelled Titania.
"What is it?" Asked the ranger, " Your not going to believe this, but a flying ship is attacking Crimea castle!" She said.
"What?!" said the stunned Ike.
"we have got to get over to Crimea castyle, before it is destroyed!" Yelled titania.
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after a day of traveling, and worrying, Ie and his band finally made it to Crimea castle, well, what was left of crimea castle.
"Oh no!" Ike yelled.
"Look for the survivors! Leave the dead." Ike demanded.
After about 2 hours, they had rounded up all the survivors.
Fortunatley, Queen Elincia was one of them.
"What happened Elincia?" Asked Ike.
"It happened so fast..." Elincia said, shivering.
"A large ship, hovered over my castle, and started firing metal objects at it, and once the metal hit something, it exploded!"
"we need to know who did this." Ike yelled.
"I have a feeling that our world, is in grave dager." Elincia said.
"we need someone to go out into the world, and find out whats going on."
"I'll do it!" Ike said.
"Then it is settled, your ship will be ready in the morning." Elincia said.
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And with that, another lad is involved in what will soon be called the great war of ninten.
Sorry if there are mistakes, I'm quite tired today.
Well, I hope you enjoyed it! :)
Pretty good. I liked the air of mystery when you introduced Metaknight.
Not sure if chapter 8 will be up tomorrow...
you'll just have to wait and see!
I like this story. Very detailed.
This is the BEST FAN FIC EVER!
MORE CHAPTERS PLEASE!
It would be cool if Ike and Pit meet before meeting anyone else. 8)
Quote from: RedSox on October 16, 2007, 03:52:29 PM
It would be cool if Ike and Pit meet before meeting anyone else. 8)
how did you?!......
:D
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 16, 2007, 04:03:38 PM
Quote from: RedSox on October 16, 2007, 03:52:29 PM
It would be cool if Ike and Pit meet before meeting anyone else. 8)
how did you?!......
:D
You mean I was right?!? :O ?!?!?!?!?!?!?!
Quote from: RedSox on October 16, 2007, 04:22:16 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 16, 2007, 04:03:38 PM
Quote from: RedSox on October 16, 2007, 03:52:29 PM
It would be cool if Ike and Pit meet before meeting anyone else. 8)
how did you?!......
:D
You mean I was right?!? :O ?!?!?!?!?!?!?!
yeah!
next time, keep your foresights to yourself.... ;)
Chapter 8!!!!!!
Enjoy. :)
Chapter 8, Prophecy
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"GWAAAAAAAA!!!!!" yelled a white figure, as it's inards exploded.
Two men landed on the ground, sheathing thier swords. The figure looked at the duo in disgust, "YOU! I'LL MAKE YOU PAY! SOMEDAY, I WILL MAKE YOU PAY!!!!!! I WILL HAVE MY REVENGE!!!!!!!" It screamed, as numerous explosions occured around it. The two men smiled, as the figure dissapeared in a roaring inferno.
"Well," said one of the men, "you going?" the other man looked at him. "Yeah... I need to get back to the Altea district...."
"I have to go back soon too.... My father will become even more ill if i'm not at his side..." said the other man. His Fire red hair blew in the wind. "Well, see ya around..." He said as he turned around, and walked off into the distance.
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In the main hall of the halbred, the Green figure sat upon his throne.
"Soon.... I will have my revenge....." he murmured to himself.
"I'll get you back for taking my hands...."
"If I can change the events that are told in the prophecy, I might have a chance....."
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There is an old prophecy told about in legends. Tales about the legendary orb of light. they say if one was to obtain it, his or her wishes would be granted. But, there is a seal around the orb. and the only thing that can break the seal, is to obtain the seven gems of chaos.
The prophecy also states that if the orb would fall into the wrong hands, three heroes would rise to stop it.
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Green fields
Ike has been traveling for days. He was running dangerously low on food and water.
"I should have brought more...." Ike grunted.
Then, he heard a noise.
"What was that?!" Ike asked, as he drew his golden blade.
A beam of light emmited from the sky, and came hurdling down to earth.
It hit the ground with a mighty force. Even Ike fell to the ground from the shock wave.
Ike stared at the small crater, that the beam made. Once the dust settled, Ike saw a glowing figure with wings, raise from the ground.
"Stay where you are!" ike yelled, as he pointed his blade towards it.
The figure's glow dimmed, and Ike saw his true appearance.
"Hello!" said the being.
"Wh..who are you?!" Asked a confused Ike.
"I am Pit, an elite angel, hand chosen from Palutena godess of light." He claimed.
"I can tell, your wings don't stand out at all..." Ike said sarcastically.
"Will you help me find a large ship?" Pit asked.
"why can't you fly?" Ike asked.
"Coming to ninten took alot out of me..." Pit told, "I won't be able to fly long distances for about a week..."
"Well, your in luck, I'm looking for a purple flying ship too!" Ike said.
"I guess you can tag along..."
"Alrighty then!" Pit said cheerfully, "let's go!"
and with that, the two set off for thier search for the Halbred.
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So, that is chapter 8.
I hope you liked it! :)
More please? :(
Quote from: wiiboychris on October 16, 2007, 07:29:34 PM
More please? :(
I make a chapter every 1-2 days.
Be patient. ;)
Quote from: RedSox on October 17, 2007, 05:04:19 AM
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Quote from: RedSox on October 16, 2007, 04:22:16 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 16, 2007, 04:03:38 PM
Quote from: RedSox on October 16, 2007, 03:52:29 PM
It would be cool if Ike and Pit meet before meeting anyone else. 8)
how did you?!......
:D
You mean I was right?!? :O ?!?!?!?!?!?!?!
yeah!
next time, keep your foresights to yourself.... ;)
Sorry.
That's alrght.... :D
Umm... anyone know why this is pinned?
It needs work.
More description, better spelling.
And just in general to be better than it is.
And don't try and pull a "Like you could do better" Out on me.
I have done better.
This isn't meant to be insulting your story completely.
All I am saying is work on it, make the reader feel like they're there watching it first-hand.
Quote from: Orgizirtee on October 17, 2007, 07:58:11 PM
It needs work.
More description, better spelling.
And just in general to be better than it is.
And don't try and pull a "Like you could do better" Out on me.
I have done better.
This isn't meant to be insulting your story completely.
All I am saying is work on it, make the reader feel like they're there watching it first-hand.
And eliminate the "It-a Toad, It's-a complicate" thing, is really annoying!
Quote from: wiiboychris on October 17, 2007, 09:10:46 PM
Quote from: Orgizirtee on October 17, 2007, 07:58:11 PM
It needs work.
More description, better spelling.
And just in general to be better than it is.
And don't try and pull a "Like you could do better" Out on me.
I have done better.
This isn't meant to be insulting your story completely.
All I am saying is work on it, make the reader feel like they're there watching it first-hand.
And eliminate the "It-a Toad, It's-a complicate" thing, is really annoying!
You mean the Mario speech?
Also, to the mod: Well can you give me tips on how to improve?
also since you have done "better" can I see a fiction of yours?
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 18, 2007, 04:25:30 AM
Quote from: wiiboychris on October 17, 2007, 09:10:46 PM
Quote from: Orgizirtee on October 17, 2007, 07:58:11 PM
It needs work.
More description, better spelling.
And just in general to be better than it is.
And don't try and pull a "Like you could do better" Out on me.
I have done better.
This isn't meant to be insulting your story completely.
All I am saying is work on it, make the reader feel like they're there watching it first-hand.
And eliminate the "It-a Toad, It's-a complicate" thing, is really annoying!
You mean the Mario speech?
Also, to the mod: Well can you give me tips on how to improve?
also since you have done "better" can I see a fiction of yours?
I think his fan fic is GREAT! ;D
Quote from: RedSox on October 18, 2007, 04:41:12 AM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 18, 2007, 04:25:30 AM
Quote from: wiiboychris on October 17, 2007, 09:10:46 PM
Quote from: Orgizirtee on October 17, 2007, 07:58:11 PM
It needs work.
More description, better spelling.
And just in general to be better than it is.
And don't try and pull a "Like you could do better" Out on me.
I have done better.
This isn't meant to be insulting your story completely.
All I am saying is work on it, make the reader feel like they're there watching it first-hand.
And eliminate the "It-a Toad, It's-a complicate" thing, is really annoying!
You mean the Mario speech?
Also, to the mod: Well can you give me tips on how to improve?
also since you have done "better" can I see a fiction of yours?
I think his fan fic is GREAT! ;D
Can you give me a link to it?
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 18, 2007, 04:25:30 AM
Quote from: wiiboychris on October 17, 2007, 09:10:46 PM
Quote from: Orgizirtee on October 17, 2007, 07:58:11 PM
It needs work.
More description, better spelling.
And just in general to be better than it is.
And don't try and pull a "Like you could do better" Out on me.
I have done better.
This isn't meant to be insulting your story completely.
All I am saying is work on it, make the reader feel like they're there watching it first-hand.
And eliminate the "It-a Toad, It's-a complicate" thing, is really annoying!
You mean the Mario speech?
Also, to the mod: Well can you give me tips on how to improve?
also since you have done "better" can I see a fiction of yours?
Not a fan-fiction, I don't write those.
But here's something that I have on the Internet.
http://forums.projectfcd.com/index.php?topic=2049.0
There.
Quote from: Orgizirtee on October 18, 2007, 09:39:09 AM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 18, 2007, 04:25:30 AM
Quote from: wiiboychris on October 17, 2007, 09:10:46 PM
Quote from: Orgizirtee on October 17, 2007, 07:58:11 PM
It needs work.
More description, better spelling.
And just in general to be better than it is.
And don't try and pull a "Like you could do better" Out on me.
I have done better.
This isn't meant to be insulting your story completely.
All I am saying is work on it, make the reader feel like they're there watching it first-hand.
And eliminate the "It-a Toad, It's-a complicate" thing, is really annoying!
You mean the Mario speech?
Also, to the mod: Well can you give me tips on how to improve?
also since you have done "better" can I see a fiction of yours?
Not a fan-fiction, I don't write those.
But here's something that I have on the Internet.
http://forums.projectfcd.com/index.php?topic=2049.0
There.
Wow....
my fic sucks compared to this....
can yopu give me any tips on how to improve?
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 18, 2007, 11:48:19 AM
Quote from: Orgizirtee on October 18, 2007, 09:39:09 AM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 18, 2007, 04:25:30 AM
Quote from: wiiboychris on October 17, 2007, 09:10:46 PM
Quote from: Orgizirtee on October 17, 2007, 07:58:11 PM
It needs work.
More description, better spelling.
And just in general to be better than it is.
And don't try and pull a "Like you could do better" Out on me.
I have done better.
This isn't meant to be insulting your story completely.
All I am saying is work on it, make the reader feel like they're there watching it first-hand.
And eliminate the "It-a Toad, It's-a complicate" thing, is really annoying!
You mean the Mario speech?
Also, to the mod: Well can you give me tips on how to improve?
also since you have done "better" can I see a fiction of yours?
Not a fan-fiction, I don't write those.
But here's something that I have on the Internet.
http://forums.projectfcd.com/index.php?topic=2049.0
There.
Wow....
my fic sucks compared to this....
can yopu give me any tips on how to improve?
ARE YOU NUTS? YOUR FAN FIC IS MORE AWESOME THAN THAT!
Quote from: wiiboychris on October 18, 2007, 01:06:15 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 18, 2007, 11:48:19 AM
Quote from: Orgizirtee on October 18, 2007, 09:39:09 AM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 18, 2007, 04:25:30 AM
Quote from: wiiboychris on October 17, 2007, 09:10:46 PM
Quote from: Orgizirtee on October 17, 2007, 07:58:11 PM
It needs work.
More description, better spelling.
And just in general to be better than it is.
And don't try and pull a "Like you could do better" Out on me.
I have done better.
This isn't meant to be insulting your story completely.
All I am saying is work on it, make the reader feel like they're there watching it first-hand.
And eliminate the "It-a Toad, It's-a complicate" thing, is really annoying!
You mean the Mario speech?
Also, to the mod: Well can you give me tips on how to improve?
also since you have done "better" can I see a fiction of yours?
Not a fan-fiction, I don't write those.
But here's something that I have on the Internet.
http://forums.projectfcd.com/index.php?topic=2049.0
There.
Wow....
my fic sucks compared to this....
can yopu give me any tips on how to improve?
ARE YOU NUTS? YOUR FAN FIC IS MORE AWESOME THAN THAT!
Thanks Chris. :)
Chapter 9 will be up tonight.
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 18, 2007, 01:08:32 PM
Quote from: wiiboychris on October 18, 2007, 01:06:15 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 18, 2007, 11:48:19 AM
Quote from: Orgizirtee on October 18, 2007, 09:39:09 AM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 18, 2007, 04:25:30 AM
Quote from: wiiboychris on October 17, 2007, 09:10:46 PM
Quote from: Orgizirtee on October 17, 2007, 07:58:11 PM
It needs work.
More description, better spelling.
And just in general to be better than it is.
And don't try and pull a "Like you could do better" Out on me.
I have done better.
This isn't meant to be insulting your story completely.
All I am saying is work on it, make the reader feel like they're there watching it first-hand.
And eliminate the "It-a Toad, It's-a complicate" thing, is really annoying!
You mean the Mario speech?
Also, to the mod: Well can you give me tips on how to improve?
also since you have done "better" can I see a fiction of yours?
Not a fan-fiction, I don't write those.
But here's something that I have on the Internet.
http://forums.projectfcd.com/index.php?topic=2049.0
There.
Wow....
my fic sucks compared to this....
can yopu give me any tips on how to improve?
ARE YOU NUTS? YOUR FAN FIC IS MORE AWESOME THAN THAT!
Thanks Chris. :)
Chapter 9 will be up tonight.
You know I think Sox was talking about yours
Quote from: Ridley on October 18, 2007, 01:18:52 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 18, 2007, 01:08:32 PM
Quote from: wiiboychris on October 18, 2007, 01:06:15 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 18, 2007, 11:48:19 AM
Quote from: Orgizirtee on October 18, 2007, 09:39:09 AM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 18, 2007, 04:25:30 AM
Quote from: wiiboychris on October 17, 2007, 09:10:46 PM
Quote from: Orgizirtee on October 17, 2007, 07:58:11 PM
It needs work.
More description, better spelling.
And just in general to be better than it is.
And don't try and pull a "Like you could do better" Out on me.
I have done better.
This isn't meant to be insulting your story completely.
All I am saying is work on it, make the reader feel like they're there watching it first-hand.
And eliminate the "It-a Toad, It's-a complicate" thing, is really annoying!
You mean the Mario speech?
Also, to the mod: Well can you give me tips on how to improve?
also since you have done "better" can I see a fiction of yours?
Not a fan-fiction, I don't write those.
But here's something that I have on the Internet.
http://forums.projectfcd.com/index.php?topic=2049.0
There.
Wow....
my fic sucks compared to this....
can yopu give me any tips on how to improve?
ARE YOU NUTS? YOUR FAN FIC IS MORE AWESOME THAN THAT!
Thanks Chris. :)
Chapter 9 will be up tonight.
You know I think Sox was talking about yours
oops. :D
Hey. You're fan fic was floated.
Congrats! ;D
Now one of these days I need to read it.
Quote from: Java_Java on October 18, 2007, 01:47:44 PM
Hey. You're fan fic was floated.
Congrats! ;D
Now one of these days I need to read it.
might want to do it now, because You won't want to be really behind... ;)
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 18, 2007, 01:25:40 PM
Quote from: Ridley on October 18, 2007, 01:18:52 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 18, 2007, 01:08:32 PM
Quote from: wiiboychris on October 18, 2007, 01:06:15 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 18, 2007, 11:48:19 AM
Quote from: Orgizirtee on October 18, 2007, 09:39:09 AM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 18, 2007, 04:25:30 AM
Quote from: wiiboychris on October 17, 2007, 09:10:46 PM
Quote from: Orgizirtee on October 17, 2007, 07:58:11 PM
It needs work.
More description, better spelling.
And just in general to be better than it is.
And don't try and pull a "Like you could do better" Out on me.
I have done better.
This isn't meant to be insulting your story completely.
All I am saying is work on it, make the reader feel like they're there watching it first-hand.
And eliminate the "It-a Toad, It's-a complicate" thing, is really annoying!
You mean the Mario speech?
Also, to the mod: Well can you give me tips on how to improve?
also since you have done "better" can I see a fiction of yours?
Not a fan-fiction, I don't write those.
But here's something that I have on the Internet.
http://forums.projectfcd.com/index.php?topic=2049.0
There.
Wow....
my fic sucks compared to this....
can yopu give me any tips on how to improve?
ARE YOU NUTS? YOUR FAN FIC IS MORE AWESOME THAN THAT!
Thanks Chris. :)
Chapter 9 will be up tonight.
You know I think Sox was talking about yours
oops. :D
Triforceman22 I was talking about yours! It's the best fic ever! :)
Quote from: wiiboychris on October 18, 2007, 01:06:15 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 18, 2007, 11:48:19 AM
Quote from: Orgizirtee on October 18, 2007, 09:39:09 AM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 18, 2007, 04:25:30 AM
Quote from: wiiboychris on October 17, 2007, 09:10:46 PM
Quote from: Orgizirtee on October 17, 2007, 07:58:11 PM
It needs work.
More description, better spelling.
And just in general to be better than it is.
And don't try and pull a "Like you could do better" Out on me.
I have done better.
This isn't meant to be insulting your story completely.
All I am saying is work on it, make the reader feel like they're there watching it first-hand.
And eliminate the "It-a Toad, It's-a complicate" thing, is really annoying!
You mean the Mario speech?
Also, to the mod: Well can you give me tips on how to improve?
also since you have done "better" can I see a fiction of yours?
Not a fan-fiction, I don't write those.
But here's something that I have on the Internet.
http://forums.projectfcd.com/index.php?topic=2049.0
There.
Wow....
my fic sucks compared to this....
can yopu give me any tips on how to improve?
ARE YOU NUTS? YOUR FAN FIC IS MORE AWESOME THAN THAT!
To each their own opinion.
I do agree that this fan-fiction does shine in some areas where mine does not. In actual truth, it is rather hard to compare the two. They are completely different tales.
And as for tips, try to put yourself right in the scene. Describe it through the eyes of one who is watching it happen. The sounds around you, the smoky scent of Mario's fireballs being unleashed.
That sort of thing.
Quote from: Orgizirtee on October 18, 2007, 03:04:04 PM
Quote from: wiiboychris on October 18, 2007, 01:06:15 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 18, 2007, 11:48:19 AM
Quote from: Orgizirtee on October 18, 2007, 09:39:09 AM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 18, 2007, 04:25:30 AM
Quote from: wiiboychris on October 17, 2007, 09:10:46 PM
Quote from: Orgizirtee on October 17, 2007, 07:58:11 PM
It needs work.
More description, better spelling.
And just in general to be better than it is.
And don't try and pull a "Like you could do better" Out on me.
I have done better.
This isn't meant to be insulting your story completely.
All I am saying is work on it, make the reader feel like they're there watching it first-hand.
And eliminate the "It-a Toad, It's-a complicate" thing, is really annoying!
You mean the Mario speech?
Also, to the mod: Well can you give me tips on how to improve?
also since you have done "better" can I see a fiction of yours?
Not a fan-fiction, I don't write those.
But here's something that I have on the Internet.
http://forums.projectfcd.com/index.php?topic=2049.0
There.
Wow....
my fic sucks compared to this....
can yopu give me any tips on how to improve?
ARE YOU NUTS? YOUR FAN FIC IS MORE AWESOME THAN THAT!
To each their own opinion.
I do agree that this fan-fiction does shine in some areas where mine does not. In actual truth, it is rather hard to compare the two. They are completely different tales.
And as for tips, try to put yourself right in the scene. Describe it through the eyes of one who is watching it happen. The sounds around you, the smoky scent of Mario's fireballs being unleashed.
That sort of thing.
oh...
okay, sounds pretty good.... :)
Thanks for the tips!
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 18, 2007, 03:20:10 PM
Quote from: Orgizirtee on October 18, 2007, 03:04:04 PM
Quote from: wiiboychris on October 18, 2007, 01:06:15 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 18, 2007, 11:48:19 AM
Quote from: Orgizirtee on October 18, 2007, 09:39:09 AM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 18, 2007, 04:25:30 AM
Quote from: wiiboychris on October 17, 2007, 09:10:46 PM
Quote from: Orgizirtee on October 17, 2007, 07:58:11 PM
It needs work.
More description, better spelling.
And just in general to be better than it is.
And don't try and pull a "Like you could do better" Out on me.
I have done better.
This isn't meant to be insulting your story completely.
All I am saying is work on it, make the reader feel like they're there watching it first-hand.
And eliminate the "It-a Toad, It's-a complicate" thing, is really annoying!
You mean the Mario speech?
Also, to the mod: Well can you give me tips on how to improve?
also since you have done "better" can I see a fiction of yours?
Not a fan-fiction, I don't write those.
But here's something that I have on the Internet.
http://forums.projectfcd.com/index.php?topic=2049.0
There.
Wow....
my fic sucks compared to this....
can yopu give me any tips on how to improve?
ARE YOU NUTS? YOUR FAN FIC IS MORE AWESOME THAN THAT!
To each their own opinion.
I do agree that this fan-fiction does shine in some areas where mine does not. In actual truth, it is rather hard to compare the two. They are completely different tales.
And as for tips, try to put yourself right in the scene. Describe it through the eyes of one who is watching it happen. The sounds around you, the smoky scent of Mario's fireballs being unleashed.
That sort of thing.
oh...
okay, sounds pretty good.... :)
Thanks for the tips!
Always happy to help a fellow writer.
Okay, so here is chapter 9.
Enjoy! :)
Chapter 9, Plot
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In the main room of the Halbred, The Green robed creature sat on his throne. He was in deep thought, as if he was trying to solve a hard calculus question.
The main room was quite large. There was a blood red carpet located in the middle of the floor.
You could hear the noise of the jets, bellowing, as it kept the ship in the air. It was quite irritating.
The creature finally lifted his masked face.
"Will all on-board Primid meet in the throne room immediatley." He said.
In mere seconds, thousands of Primids came rushing into the throne room.
As they stood in single file lines, they waited for thier master to speak.
"As you all know, the time for the subspace army to rule the universe, has come!" He yelled.
The primids started to cheer with joy.
"I have found a way to make our dreams, come true!" The creatured bellowed, "after my last defeat, I started to think about bigger, and better things.... That was when I heard about the orb of light." The primids were all very intrested in thier master's tale.
"The orb of lightis a magic item created by Palutena herself, it can make anyone's wishes come true. It is located in the core of this planet. And the only way to get into the planet's core is through a worm hole located in the Lylat district. Once we get there, we can't just grab it and leave. We need what is called, "the gems of Chaos." He continued.
"The only problem is... That these gems of chaos, are located in another dimension." He said.
"But not to worry! If we can perform a transporting spell, we might be able to get them in this world."
The primids started to cheer again.
"But we need to be near a strong power source to pull this off. In other words, we need to be close to the orb of light to do this." He told.
"Now Lylat is known for it's powerful defences, but they are no match for our subspace bombs!" He said triumphantly.
"Now, TO LYLAT!!!!!!!!" He yelled.
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Poke' district borders
"Were almost out of the district... Red told his companions.
The grassy plains of the Poke' district seemed endless.
"We should reach the Lylat district in about a month..." Mario said.
"A MONTH?!" Red yelled.
"Yes, we still need to get past three more districts until we reach Lylat..." Mario said.
"Pika!" yelled Pikachu.
"Yeah, I guess your right," Red replied.
"We should be entering Altea's district in about a week." Mario informed.
"good, we should be on our way then..." Red said.
After about a minute of walking, Mario heard a high pitched noise.
Mario's eyes widened.
"STAY BACK!!!" He yelled.
In a flash, a figure appeared before them.
"You dare tresspass into my land?!" the figure said, as he grabbed the hilt of his blade, and pulled it out of his sheathe.
Mario took his fighting stance, as did the figure. Red had a sick look on his face.
"Pika!" Yelled Pikachu, as he tried to help Red up to his feet.
"Prepare yourself Fools!" yelled the figure as he lunged at Mario.
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Unknown mountain region
Link set up camp for the night. It was a clear night with the stars shining brightly, but the main source of light was coming from the full-moon.
with Epona fast asleep, Link dimmed the light on his lantern, and was ready to fall asleep.
Until he heard rustling in the nearby bushes. Lnik eyed the bush, and grabbed the master sword's hilt.
In one quick action, Link jumped up, and slashed at the bush. Link saw a squirell run away in the distance. Link sighed, as he sheathed his sword, and walked back to his sleeping spot.
Then, out of nowhere, a person jumped out of a nearby tree, drew his blade, and leaped towards an unexpecting Link.
TO BE CONTINUED....
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I hope you all like cliffhangers. :D
Now there are two of them! :P
well I hope you enjoyed it! :)
Solve the cliff hangers soon please
Quote from: Ridley on October 18, 2007, 07:11:11 PM
Solve the cliff hangers soon please
They will be solved next chapter,
but how do you like it? :)
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 19, 2007, 04:24:08 AM
Quote from: Ridley on October 18, 2007, 07:11:11 PM
Solve the cliff hangers soon please
They will be solved next chapter,
but how do you like it? :)
It is the best fanfic I ever read
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 19, 2007, 04:24:08 AM
Quote from: Ridley on October 18, 2007, 07:11:11 PM
Solve the cliff hangers soon please
They will be solved next chapter,
but how do you like it? :)
Reader's tip: cliffhangers = great fic= suspence and action. ;)
Quote from: Ridley on October 19, 2007, 04:39:09 AM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 19, 2007, 04:24:08 AM
Quote from: Ridley on October 18, 2007, 07:11:11 PM
Solve the cliff hangers soon please
They will be solved next chapter,
but how do you like it? :)
It is the best fanfic I ever read
Then you probably don't read a lot of fanfics. :P Anyway, I think this story is... ok. Nothing special, and I'm not even sure why this is floated, since fanfics normally aren't (And in my opinion, shouldn't be). I need to find time to read it all, though.
Quote from: LIGHTNINGSWORD on October 19, 2007, 08:38:25 PM
Quote from: Ridley on October 19, 2007, 04:39:09 AM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 19, 2007, 04:24:08 AM
Quote from: Ridley on October 18, 2007, 07:11:11 PM
Solve the cliff hangers soon please
They will be solved next chapter,
but how do you like it? :)
It is the best fanfic I ever read
Then you probably don't read a lot of fanfics. :P Anyway, I think this story is... ok. Nothing special, and I'm not even sure why this is floated, since fanfics normally aren't (And in my opinion, shouldn't be). I need to find time to read it all, though.
That's YOUR opinion. IMO this story is great.
Quote from: LIGHTNINGSWORD on October 19, 2007, 08:38:25 PM
Quote from: Ridley on October 19, 2007, 04:39:09 AM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 19, 2007, 04:24:08 AM
Quote from: Ridley on October 18, 2007, 07:11:11 PM
Solve the cliff hangers soon please
They will be solved next chapter,
but how do you like it? :)
It is the best fanfic I ever read
Then you probably don't read a lot of fanfics. :P Anyway, I think this story is... ok. Nothing special, and I'm not even sure why this is floated, since fanfics normally aren't (And in my opinion, shouldn't be). I need to find time to read it all, though.
All stories are boring at the beginning,
once it's near the middle/end it will be WAY better.
Maybe you should read it too, that will help. :P
Also, Why is it so bad that this is floated?
I say who cares?
It's easier to find it now.
*scratches head*, I'm not sure why this is floated either...
I didn't float this.....
Well, who ever thought it was meant to be floated, then thats there call.
I'm actually, "Iffy" about this being floated :-\
As it's not a source for information or a contest, or something along those lines
where Threads Are usually floated.
I'll talk to, "Geno" about it.
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On other news, I Still like the stories that are being told and I'm highly interested in it.
The way you right your story is fine, and IMO, you don't really need to go into Exact Detail.......
It's cool in some areas but it's not really needed.
Spell check/Proof read your work before you post it Always dude.
Quote from: StarWindWizard7 on October 20, 2007, 01:04:47 PM
*scratches head*, I'm not sure why this is floated either...
I didn't float this.....
Well, who ever thought it was meant to be floated, then thats there call.
I'm actually, "Iffy" about this being floated :-\
As it's not a source for information or a contest, or something along those lines
where Threads Are usually floated.
I'll talk to, "Geno" about it.
_____________________________________________________________________________________________
On other news, I Still like the stories that are being told and I'm highly interested in it.
The way you right your story is fine, and IMO, you don't really need to go into Exact Detail.......
It's cool in some areas but it's not really needed.
Spell check/Proof read your work before you post it Always dude.
Yes I agree. People already know and love this fanfic. It really doesn't need to be floated anymore.
Defloated.
Quote from: Geno on October 20, 2007, 01:26:32 PM
Quote from: StarWindWizard7 on October 20, 2007, 01:04:47 PM
*scratches head*, I'm not sure why this is floated either...
I didn't float this.....
Well, who ever thought it was meant to be floated, then thats there call.
I'm actually, "Iffy" about this being floated :-\
As it's not a source for information or a contest, or something along those lines
where Threads Are usually floated.
I'll talk to, "Geno" about it.
_____________________________________________________________________________________________
On other news, I Still like the stories that are being told and I'm highly interested in it.
The way you right your story is fine, and IMO, you don't really need to go into Exact Detail.......
It's cool in some areas but it's not really needed.
Spell check/Proof read your work before you post it Always dude.
Yes I agree. People already know and love this fanfic. It really doesn't need to be floated anymore.
Defloated.
But it was so easy to find! :(
Sorry I havn't posted a new chapter in a while...
(I was busy.)
New chap will be up tomorrow. :)
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 23, 2007, 05:47:22 PM
Sorry I havn't posted a new chapter in a while...
(I was busy.)
New chap will be up tomorrow. :)
Cool. :)
Can Lucas, Sonic and the ice climbers appear please? :(
Quote from: wiiboychris on October 23, 2007, 06:45:58 PM
Can Lucas, Sonic and the ice climbers appear please? :(
Gems of chaos give you any hint? ;)
Some characters might not appear.....
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 24, 2007, 04:42:08 AM
Quote from: wiiboychris on October 23, 2007, 06:45:58 PM
Can Lucas, Sonic and the ice climbers appear please? :(
Gems of chaos give you any hint? ;)
Some characters might not appear.....
Hmm, gems of chaos, does that means Midna will appear?
Quote from: wiiboychris on October 24, 2007, 11:02:33 AM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 24, 2007, 04:42:08 AM
Quote from: wiiboychris on October 23, 2007, 06:45:58 PM
Can Lucas, Sonic and the ice climbers appear please? :(
Gems of chaos give you any hint? ;)
Some characters might not appear.....
Hmm, gems of chaos, does that means Midna will appear?
How did you know?! :D
well I finally got time to write so here's part 2 of chapter 9.
also for the subspace video's, this is now my version of the story, so sorry if this is a little diffrent from the real deal...
well, anyways, enjoy! :)
Chapter 9 part 2, Duel
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Sparks flew in the air, as Link and the figure's sword clashed together violentley.
The two struggled to get free, and in one quick move, they both jumped away from each other.
As they caught thier breath, Link looked up at his attacker.
"Who are you?!" He yelled.
The man's blade suddenly burst into flames.
Link's eyes widned in awe, as the man moved towards him.
"What are you doing in this forbidden part of my country?!" asked the man, as he raised his burning blade towards Link.
"I..i'm just travelling through here!" Link said innocentley.
"Hmph, this is a forbidden land, and now, YOU MUST DIE!" He yelled, as he lunged towards the hylian hero.
Link readied his hylian shield, and waited.
In a flash, the man's sword came hammering down on the metal shield.
Link lost his balance, and fell to the ground.
As he tried to get back up, Link felt a sudden sharp pain in his right arm.
He looked at it, and blood started to gush out of a large gash that was now located there.
"But... i shielded!" Link yelled in anger.
Then, Link soon found out why it didn't block.
His shield was sliced in two.
Link's eye twitched as he looked up at the mysterious man.
"Too bad..." He said, as readied his sword.
"Prepare for your punishment!"
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"So, what are you doing here?" Asked peach.
"I was training in my strong hold, when all of a sudden, an explosion occured...."
Meta knight said in his low-toned voice...
"What?!... Who are you?" Asked Meta knight, as a green cloaked entity appeared from the smoke.
"you may call me the ancient minister, and I am here to take your ship!" yelled the figure in victory.
"Well, your going to have to get through me first!" Meta knight said as he readied Master, his golden sword.
"Heh..heh... I don't need to!" said the figure, "i'll just let my army take you out for me!"
"What do you mean?" meta knight asked, as he raised his sword.
The figure then let out a high pitched screech, and in a second, a giant monstrosity came out. he had two giant sickles located on his round body.
"Greap, take him out!" yelled the minister. The giant rushed meta knight. The two sickles came crashing down on the warp star knight. He easlily dodged though, and jumped into the air.
He raised his golden sword, and impaled the monster in the head. Meta knight touched the ground just as the monster exploded.
Then, he felt the ground shake violentley.
"No...." Meta knight said, as he rushed outside.
Once he got outside, he caught a glimpse of his halbred, flying away.
"darn...." meta knight said under his breath, as he saw his ship soar farther away in the sky
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TO BE CONTINUED..................
Sorry this was short.
Everything will be in part 3.
Yay for more cliffhangers. :P
Darn you!!!!!!!!! lol, keep it up man! pretty good so far!
AWSOME! ;D I wanna know who the guy with the fire blade is, can't wait to find out. :D
Roy? Or perhaps Ryu Hayabusa. I remember those two having fire powers.
Quote from: Triforce_Luigi on October 25, 2007, 05:13:06 AM
Roy? Or perhaps Ryu Hayabusa. I remember those two having fire powers.
'
isn't it obvious? :D
Which one was in melee?
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 25, 2007, 11:46:26 AM
Quote from: Triforce_Luigi on October 25, 2007, 05:13:06 AM
Roy? Or perhaps Ryu Hayabusa. I remember those two having fire powers.
'
isn't it obvious? :D
Which one was in melee?
Peanut butter? ???
Charizard? No, wait, its Tails!
Oh gosh it is captain flacon!!!!
Maybe it's Samus! :robotsurprised:
Here's chapter 9 part 3.
Enjoy. :)
Chapter 9, part 3, clash!
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Poke' district border
As Mario hit the ground again, the blue haired man started to draw nearer.
Blood started to drip out of mario's mouth, as he looked up at his opponent.
"Give up now, fool!" he said, pointing his sword at the plumber's head, "or else you will die!"
Mario jumped upwards, and raised his fist into the air. As he started to descend, Mario punched the man's face with brutal force.
The man flew back, and hit the ground hard.
As Mario landed on both his feet, he wiped the blood from his mouth.
"we mean no harm!" Mario yelled, trying to reason with the man, "just let us through!"
The man got back up. A large bruise was now on his forehead.
"I won't let you pass!" yelled the man, as he dashed towards Mario.
The man's sword started to turn a light purple colour.
Mario crossed his arms, and in a flash, a red-coloured orb emmited around him.
The man's sword came down, and in one swipe, the orb shattered.
Mario flew into the air, and hit the ground hard.
Red stared at his fallen partner in fear.
"Oh no! Mario's down! Oh, what can I do?"
"Pika!" said Pikachu, as he leaped towards the swordsman.
"Pikachu!" yelled Red.
"He might need some help!" he said to himself, as he reached into his pocket.
He took out a white and red metal ball.
"Charizard!" he yelled, as he threw the ball at the ground.
In a second, the ball automatically opened. a bright light emmited from it.
The swordsman was slightly blinded by this.
Once the light dulled, an orange coloured dragon appeared.
"Now, attack that one!" Yelled red.
The dragon inhaled, and blew fire out of his mouth.
Then Pikachu fired a lightning bolt.
The two attacks combined, and was headed straight for the man.
Before the man knew what hit him, he was hit head-on.
He screamed in pain, as he hit the ground once again.
After about twenty seconds, he stood up again.
His sword was snapped in two.
"Oh no! he's not down yet!" Red thought to himself.
The man started to laugh a bit.
"Why are you laughing?!" Red asked.
"I give up!" Said the man.
"What?!" red said, suprised.
"Without my sword, I can't fight!" He said.
Red just stared aimlessley at him.
"Your friend there needs medication, come into my town." The man said as he walked out of the border. "...That was awkward..." Red said to himself.
"Pika!" yelled Pikachu.
How the hell did he brake my sword?! The man thought, there's more to this...boy than I thought..
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Bern district, mountain region
Link clashed again with the man's engulfed blade.
"Persistant one... eh?" the man said.
"I won't die!" Link yelled, as he pushed even harder.
The master sword scraped against the man's sword until finally Link over powered him.
Link pushed the man, dropping his guard. This was Link's chance.
He leaped at the man and slashed.
but the thing his sword hit was the man's blue chest plate.
The man pushed Link back.
Link quickly took out a bomb. he threw it into the air, and then took out his gale boomerang.
What's he planning? the man wondered. His cape blowing in the wind.
Then, Link threw his boomerang towards the aerial bomb.
The bomb got caught into the boomerang's whirwind.
I hope this works! Link thought, as the boomerang headed towards the man.
As the boomerang made contact with the man's sword, a large explosion errupted.
Pieces flew everywhere, as a cloud of smoke appeared.
With all the smoke in his face, The man couldn't see that Link was now charging at him.
In a flash, Link appeared out of the smoke, and slashed the man's chest.
As Blood gushed out of the large gash, the man fell to the ground.
dangit! how could I be so weak? The man thought as everything went black.
Link sheathed the master sword, and walked up to the fallen warrior.
He reached into his pocket and took out a bottle filled with a red liquid.
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Ike and Pit walked through a wide open field.
"I wonder where we are?" Ike asked.
"I'm not sure..." Pit replied.
"Your an angel, aren't you suppoed to know these kind of things?!" ike asked.
"sorry..." Pit said sadly.
Just then, they heard a loud noise.
"What was that?" Ike asked.
"It sounded like the sound of a jet engine.." Pit said.
"Well, lets follow it!" Ike yelled as began to run to where the sound came from.
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Samus walked out of her orange-coloured ship. She had landed on a nearby cliff. The sun was rising. Soon it would be day-time.
"Now scaning..." she said, as her visor glew.
She looked around for a bit, then she saw two people running towards her location.
"Well, two armed figures eh? One has a sword, the other has a bow... This should be fun...." samus said, as she switched her arm cannon to missle mode.
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This was a long one....
Well I hope you liked it! :)
I like it. still a very good story ^_^
I did not understand the part .....where Mario crossed his arms......why did he, what orb were you talking about at that part?
Quote from: StarWindWizard7 on October 27, 2007, 08:49:31 PM
I did not understand the part .....where Mario crossed his arms......why did he, what orb were you talking about at that part?
i think he was talking about the shield.
Quote from: StarWindWizard7 on October 27, 2007, 08:49:31 PM
I did not understand the part .....where Mario crossed his arms......why did he, what orb were you talking about at that part?
You know when you shield a red orb surrounds you...
Marth's B attack breaks it when it's fully charged.
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 27, 2007, 09:07:40 PM
Quote from: StarWindWizard7 on October 27, 2007, 08:49:31 PM
I did not understand the part .....where Mario crossed his arms......why did he, what orb were you talking about at that part?
You know when you shield a red orb surrounds you...
Marth's B attack breaks it when it's fully charged.
SO THAT WAS MARTH WHO WAS ATTACKING MARIO!!?! :O
Quote from: StarWindWizard7 on October 27, 2007, 09:09:51 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 27, 2007, 09:07:40 PM
Quote from: StarWindWizard7 on October 27, 2007, 08:49:31 PM
I did not understand the part .....where Mario crossed his arms......why did he, what orb were you talking about at that part?
You know when you shield a red orb surrounds you...
Marth's B attack breaks it when it's fully charged.
SO THAT WAS MARTH WHO WAS ATTACKING MARIO!!?! :O
You didn't know?
I thought the blue hair part gave it away....
And besides, Marth is the only other swordsman in melee, since Link and Roy are fighting...
oops maybe iv'e said too much :P
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 27, 2007, 09:11:46 PM
Quote from: StarWindWizard7 on October 27, 2007, 09:09:51 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 27, 2007, 09:07:40 PM
Quote from: StarWindWizard7 on October 27, 2007, 08:49:31 PM
I did not understand the part .....where Mario crossed his arms......why did he, what orb were you talking about at that part?
You know when you shield a red orb surrounds you...
Marth's B attack breaks it when it's fully charged.
SO THAT WAS MARTH WHO WAS ATTACKING MARIO!!?! :O
You didn't know?
I thought the blue hair part gave it away....
And besides, Marth is the only other swordsman in melee, since Link and Roy are fighting...
oops maybe iv'e said too much :P
Maybe, but still great story.
Still liking this, great job
OMG, Mario is being attacked by Jigglypuff and Link just fought Pichu! j/k
Great story
Next chap will be up tomorrow.
Can you give us any hints?
I can, Sonic appears and Lucas defeat him with ease. :D
Quote from: wiiboychris on October 29, 2007, 09:24:40 PM
I can, Sonic appears and Lucas defeat him with ease. :D
Sonic won't appear until the middle of the story....
Lucas is coming.... so is ness. ;)
Also ike Pit and samus Fight.
When will the next chapter be up?
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 29, 2007, 06:33:59 PM
Next chap will be up tomorrow.
Which is NOW today...
*waits*
::)
Quote from: RedSox on October 30, 2007, 04:28:19 PM
When will the next chapter be up?
Right now! :P
Enjoy. :)
Chapter 10, A Swordsman, angel, and a bounty hunter
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As the swordsman opened to the door to his small house, Mario looked around.
The town looked like a older version of Pellet town.
"Please, come in," said the swordsman.
As the trio entered the house, they saw training equipment laying around.
"You must train quite alot sir," Red said.
"Yes, I do..." the man said.
"By the way, call me Marth," the man told.
"Now where did I put my Vulnery?"
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As Link's attacker opened his eyes, he found himself laying on a large piece of cloth.
He saw Link near a small camp fire, making his supper.
The man tried to get up, but a sharp pain prevented him from doing it.
The man looked at his stomach. A bloodied cloth was wrapped around him.
He then looked over at Link again.
"Why didn't you finish me?" he asked.
Link turned his head over to him.
"I only kill monsters..." Link replied, as he turned his head back again.
"Well, thank you for helping me...." the man replied.
Link didn't reply.
"Well, my name is Roy," the man said.
Link turned his head again, "call me Link," he said smiling.
"I thought you were trying to take over our district...." Roy said.
"Why would you think that" Link asked.
"Because most people who entered my district, they have tried to take over it." he said.
"My father asigned me to this region, and to attack anyone who entered,"
"I'm just passing by," Link said, "I was following a purple flying ship who attacked me the other day." Roy looked up at Link, "the same ship attcked my father's castle," roy replied.
"Why don't I come with you?" Roy suggested, "I can be a huge help."
"fine," Link replied, "we'll wait a few days until that wound of yours is healed."
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As Pit, and ike kept running towards the sound they heard earlier, Pit heard a noise.
"wait a sec!" pit said, grabbibg Ike's cloak.
"Whats wrong?" Ike asked.
In a flash, a beam of blue energy came out of nowhere. It's buzzing noise rang in the air as it flew towards the duo.
"GET OUT OF THE WAY!" Pit yelled, as he and ike jumped out of harm's way.
The beam flew by and hit a nearby mountain.
A large explosion occoured afterwards. Ike and Pit looked towards where the beam came from.
Then, a figure in orange armour landed on the ground.
"Who are you?" ike asked.
Without responding, Samus ran towards the two, with her arm cannon loaded with a small missle.
Ike drew Ragnell quickly, and dashed towards the bounty hunter.
Pit's hand started to glow. And in a second, an arrow appeared. He took out his sacred bow, and strung the arrow.
Ike slashed at Samus. Only to have it blocked.
"What the hell?! This guy is stronger than Ashnard!" Ike thought as his sword scraped along Samuses armour.
As the two clanged off eachother, Samus fired the missle.
Ike shielded, but the missle exploded.
Ike looked behind him, and saw Pit lowering his bow.
"You attack while I fire!" Pit yelled.
Ike nodded, and swiped again.
Samus dodge, and hit ike very quickly.
As Ike hit the ground, Samus dashed towards Pit with blinding speed.
It's too fast! Pit thought, trying to aim.
Samus hit Pit with her arm cannon.
Pit hit the ground, an skidded a few feet.
Ike got up, and dashed towards Samus again.
"your too slow boy!" samus yelled, as she kicked him in the stomach.
Ike cried in pain, as he coughed up blood.
Pit got up, and dislocated his bow, turning it into a pair of daggers.
"Come on, lets see what you got!" samus yelled.
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sorry there are a few grammer mistakes. i'm tired.
Well I hope you liked it. :)
Not bad, not bad at all......................
Do you have all of this written already, or do you make it up as you go?
I think you need to type a bit more every time.
Quote from: StarWindWizard7 on October 30, 2007, 08:19:57 PM
Not bad, not bad at all......................
Do you have all of this written already, or do you make it up as you go?
I think you need to type a bit more every time.
I had to change th plot numerous times....
I was tired yesterday, so I cut it short. Sorry. :(
Quote from: Triforceman22 on October 31, 2007, 04:40:17 AM
Quote from: StarWindWizard7 on October 30, 2007, 08:19:57 PM
Not bad, not bad at all......................
Do you have all of this written already, or do you make it up as you go?
I think you need to type a bit more every time.
I had to change th plot numerous times....
I was tired yesterday, so I cut it short. Sorry. :(
No problem.
It's really coming right along! I really find myself anticipating the next chapter!
Here's chapter 11.
Enjoy. :)
Chapter 11, Aether
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Another Kremling hit the ground, as a giant figure lowered his fist.
The figure then walked towards a metal door. He raised his fist again, and punched the door.
The door flew off it's hinges, as it hit the ground.
The figure walked into the large room.
Out of the shadows, a large crocodile wearing a crown, and red cape appeared.
"Well done you stupid ape!" The crocodile snorted, "But you will not stop me this time, I, King K. Rool, will rule Japes, and become emporer!"
The ape cracked his neck, and put up his fist.
He yelled, as he charged at K.rool. The crocodile didn't move an inch.
as the ape was about to punch, he hit an invisible wall.
"Ha ha! You can't touch me Donkey!" K. rool yelled.
Just then, a peanut flew from out the door, and hit the wall.
On impact, the peanut exploded, thus making a huge hole in the "shield."
The ape then walked slowly towards the king.
He had an angry look on his furry face.
The king was very worried, in a last ditch effort to escape, he jumped out of the glass window, that was in the room.
The ape turned around to see where the peanut came from, and out came a small monkey putting away a wooden hand gun.
As the two were about to leave the room, the floor started to shake violentley.
Unbeknowest to them, that the Halbred was right above them.
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"Take this, my friend," Marth said, as he gave Mario a blue coloured mushroom.
"What's this?" He asked, eying the odd looking fungus, "That's called a Vulnery," Marth began to say, "eat it, and you will be healed instantley!"
"Okay then..." mario said as he ate the mushroom.
Within seconds, the plumber's injuries were all healed.
"wow!" Mario said suprisingly, "I feel great!"
"Please let me join your group," marth said.
The trio looked at him.
"I think I know what your after,"
Mario thought for a minute.
Hmmm. He is quite strong, but I can't trust him completley....
"Okay! Your in!" Mario said happily.
"But he attacked us!" Red yelled.
"But if it wasn't for him, I would have been killed." Mario said in defence.
"Fine..." Red sulked.
"Okay, just a moment, I need to get some things," Marth said, as he ran into the living room.
As Marth entered the room, he walked up to the fire place. Above it, there hung a sword.
Marth grabbed the hilt and took it down from it's resting place.
Fachion, it's been a while since I last used you... Marth thought, looking at how good the blade's condition was, I think I will need you for this one....
Marth sheathed the blade into his sheathe, and walked out of the room.
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Pit wiped the blood from his mouth, as he strung another arrow to his bow.
Samus charged yet again, asher cannon started to glow.
Being infused with chozo blood, Samus was extremley fast, so Pit had little time to aim.
Pit aimed and fired. It went straight towards her.
Finally! Pit said with relief, as he waited for the arrow to hit it's target.
But the arrow bounced off samus's Armour as if it was nothing.
Ike got back up. Blood pouring out from one of his arms.
He saw Pit being hit dead-on with samus's arm cannon.
Being hit right in the stomach, Pit spewed out a large amount of blood, then hit the ground, unconcious.
Dam... Looks like I need to use my trump card.... Ike thought, as he dashed towards the bounty hunter. Samus charged her cannon, until a large ball of energy appeared.
Ike threw his sword into the air. he then jumped for it.
Samus looked up, and fired her ball of energy. The ball hit Ragnell. Only to have it distintergrate upon impact. "Impossible!" samus yelled, as she shielded herself.
"AETHER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!" Ike yelled, as he fell from the sky. In one quick slash, Ike split Samus's armour in two. As ike landed, Samus hit the ground.
Ike dashed towards Pit who had fallen a while ago.
I hope my vulnery can heal him... he thought as he ran towards his fallen friend.
Ike didn't notice Samus getting up, or her getting her blaster out.
"Your mine kid!" Samus yelled, as her blaster charged up.
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Sorry if there are mistakes.
I'm tired. Well I hope you enjoyed it. :)
Zamus will own in the next chapter, I'm guessing :)
Quote from: Depster on November 03, 2007, 08:51:08 PM
Zamus will own in the next chapter, I'm guessing :)
That's what YOU think! ;)
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 03, 2007, 09:00:11 PM
Quote from: Depster on November 03, 2007, 08:51:08 PM
Zamus will own in the next chapter, I'm guessing :)
That's what YOU think! ;)
be realalistic; in ssbb, Pit and Ike would destroy Samus... :|
Quote from: RedSox on November 04, 2007, 05:52:08 AM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 03, 2007, 09:00:11 PM
Quote from: Depster on November 03, 2007, 08:51:08 PM
Zamus will own in the next chapter, I'm guessing :)
That's what YOU think! ;)
be realalistic; in ssbb, Pit and Ike would destroy Samus... :|
What fun would that be then....
Marth would have won against Red an mario....
nothing is realistic about this....
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 04, 2007, 07:30:51 AM
Quote from: RedSox on November 04, 2007, 05:52:08 AM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 03, 2007, 09:00:11 PM
Quote from: Depster on November 03, 2007, 08:51:08 PM
Zamus will own in the next chapter, I'm guessing :)
That's what YOU think! ;)
be realalistic; in ssbb, Pit and Ike would destroy Samus... :|
What fun would that be then....
Marth would have won against Red an mario....
nothing is realistic about this....
:-[ sorry...... :-X
Quote from: RedSox on November 04, 2007, 08:11:44 AM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 04, 2007, 07:30:51 AM
Quote from: RedSox on November 04, 2007, 05:52:08 AM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 03, 2007, 09:00:11 PM
Quote from: Depster on November 03, 2007, 08:51:08 PM
Zamus will own in the next chapter, I'm guessing :)
That's what YOU think! ;)
be realalistic; in ssbb, Pit and Ike would destroy Samus... :|
What fun would that be then....
Marth would have won against Red an mario....
nothing is realistic about this....
:-[ sorry...... :-X
To tell you the truth there was pikachu mario and poketrainer they would have demolished him. Three on one
Quote from: Ridley on November 04, 2007, 08:37:44 AM
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Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 03, 2007, 09:00:11 PM
Quote from: Depster on November 03, 2007, 08:51:08 PM
Zamus will own in the next chapter, I'm guessing :)
That's what YOU think! ;)
be realalistic; in ssbb, Pit and Ike would destroy Samus... :|
What fun would that be then....
Marth would have won against Red an mario....
nothing is realistic about this....
:-[ sorry...... :-X
To tell you the truth there was pikachu mario and poketrainer they would have demolished him. Three on one
And they did defeat Marth. ;).
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 04, 2007, 09:42:25 AM
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Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 03, 2007, 09:00:11 PM
Quote from: Depster on November 03, 2007, 08:51:08 PM
Zamus will own in the next chapter, I'm guessing :)
That's what YOU think! ;)
be realalistic; in ssbb, Pit and Ike would destroy Samus... :|
What fun would that be then....
Marth would have won against Red an mario....
nothing is realistic about this....
:-[ sorry...... :-X
To tell you the truth there was pikachu mario and poketrainer they would have demolished him. Three on one
And they did defeat Marth. ;).
True but you said it wasn't realistic when it is
Quote from: Ridley on November 04, 2007, 09:45:01 AM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 04, 2007, 09:42:25 AM
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Quote from: RedSox on November 04, 2007, 05:52:08 AM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 03, 2007, 09:00:11 PM
Quote from: Depster on November 03, 2007, 08:51:08 PM
Zamus will own in the next chapter, I'm guessing :)
That's what YOU think! ;)
be realalistic; in ssbb, Pit and Ike would destroy Samus... :|
What fun would that be then....
Marth would have won against Red an mario....
nothing is realistic about this....
:-[ sorry...... :-X
To tell you the truth there was pikachu mario and poketrainer they would have demolished him. Three on one
And they did defeat Marth. ;).
True but you said it wasn't realistic when it is
oops, sorry, i'm quite tired today for some reason....
Btw, an new character dedication wil be up tonight. :)
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 04, 2007, 09:47:47 AM
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Quote from: RedSox on November 04, 2007, 05:52:08 AM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 03, 2007, 09:00:11 PM
Quote from: Depster on November 03, 2007, 08:51:08 PM
Zamus will own in the next chapter, I'm guessing :)
That's what YOU think! ;)
be realalistic; in ssbb, Pit and Ike would destroy Samus... :|
What fun would that be then....
Marth would have won against Red an mario....
nothing is realistic about this....
:-[ sorry...... :-X
To tell you the truth there was pikachu mario and poketrainer they would have demolished him. Three on one
And they did defeat Marth. ;).
True but you said it wasn't realistic when it is
oops, sorry, i'm quite tired today for some reason....
Btw, an new character dedication wil be up tonight. :)
Man you contribute a lot to the smash boards. I bet you make member of the month next month
Quote from: Ridley on November 04, 2007, 09:58:39 AM
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Quote from: RedSox on November 04, 2007, 05:52:08 AM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 03, 2007, 09:00:11 PM
Quote from: Depster on November 03, 2007, 08:51:08 PM
Zamus will own in the next chapter, I'm guessing :)
That's what YOU think! ;)
be realalistic; in ssbb, Pit and Ike would destroy Samus... :|
What fun would that be then....
Marth would have won against Red an mario....
nothing is realistic about this....
:-[ sorry...... :-X
To tell you the truth there was pikachu mario and poketrainer they would have demolished him. Three on one
And they did defeat Marth. ;).
True but you said it wasn't realistic when it is
oops, sorry, i'm quite tired today for some reason....
Btw, an new character dedication wil be up tonight. :)
Man you contribute a lot to the smash boards. I bet you make member of the month next month
You think so?
Thanks! :)
I'm either doing Ness/Lucas, or Dedede....
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 04, 2007, 10:01:00 AM
Quote from: Ridley on November 04, 2007, 09:58:39 AM
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Quote from: Ridley on November 04, 2007, 09:45:01 AM
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Quote from: RedSox on November 04, 2007, 05:52:08 AM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 03, 2007, 09:00:11 PM
Quote from: Depster on November 03, 2007, 08:51:08 PM
Zamus will own in the next chapter, I'm guessing :)
That's what YOU think! ;)
be realalistic; in ssbb, Pit and Ike would destroy Samus... :|
What fun would that be then....
Marth would have won against Red an mario....
nothing is realistic about this....
:-[ sorry...... :-X
To tell you the truth there was pikachu mario and poketrainer they would have demolished him. Three on one
And they did defeat Marth. ;).
True but you said it wasn't realistic when it is
oops, sorry, i'm quite tired today for some reason....
Btw, an new character dedication wil be up tonight. :)
Man you contribute a lot to the smash boards. I bet you make member of the month next month
You think so?
Thanks! :)
I'm either doing Ness/Lucas, or Dedede....
You're welcome and Ness wasn't updated yet. I know you are tired today
Quote from: Ridley on November 04, 2007, 10:04:19 AM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 04, 2007, 10:01:00 AM
Quote from: Ridley on November 04, 2007, 09:58:39 AM
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Quote from: Ridley on November 04, 2007, 09:45:01 AM
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Quote from: RedSox on November 04, 2007, 05:52:08 AM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 03, 2007, 09:00:11 PM
Quote from: Depster on November 03, 2007, 08:51:08 PM
Zamus will own in the next chapter, I'm guessing :)
That's what YOU think! ;)
be realalistic; in ssbb, Pit and Ike would destroy Samus... :|
What fun would that be then....
Marth would have won against Red an mario....
nothing is realistic about this....
:-[ sorry...... :-X
To tell you the truth there was pikachu mario and poketrainer they would have demolished him. Three on one
And they did defeat Marth. ;).
True but you said it wasn't realistic when it is
oops, sorry, i'm quite tired today for some reason....
Btw, an new character dedication wil be up tonight. :)
Man you contribute a lot to the smash boards. I bet you make member of the month next month
You think so?
Thanks! :)
I'm either doing Ness/Lucas, or Dedede....
You're welcome and Ness wasn't updated yet. I know you are tired today
I do every character that has appeared in a smash game...
Which includes Ness. ;)
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 04, 2007, 10:05:22 AM
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Quote from: RedSox on November 04, 2007, 05:52:08 AM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 03, 2007, 09:00:11 PM
Quote from: Depster on November 03, 2007, 08:51:08 PM
Zamus will own in the next chapter, I'm guessing :)
That's what YOU think! ;)
be realalistic; in ssbb, Pit and Ike would destroy Samus... :|
What fun would that be then....
Marth would have won against Red an mario....
nothing is realistic about this....
:-[ sorry...... :-X
To tell you the truth there was pikachu mario and poketrainer they would have demolished him. Three on one
And they did defeat Marth. ;).
True but you said it wasn't realistic when it is
oops, sorry, i'm quite tired today for some reason....
Btw, an new character dedication wil be up tonight. :)
Man you contribute a lot to the smash boards. I bet you make member of the month next month
You think so?
Thanks! :)
I'm either doing Ness/Lucas, or Dedede....
You're welcome and Ness wasn't updated yet. I know you are tired today
I do every character that has appeared in a smash game...
Which includes Ness. ;)
Do Lucas. I asked you nicely before.
I will agree with lucas
1. Stop apologizing!
Your doing a great job, so stop saying your sorry in every one of your stories,
it shows that you lack confidence. If you don't want to be sorry, make sure you fix your mistakes before
you post it.
Your doing a Great Job, no need for apologies, because Nobody is complaining about them. ;)
2. Marth's personality.
question- Is he really like that, so masculine?
Going from SSBM he seemed kind of................ "Froo Froo".
(which is why he's my main :P )
I'm just saying, it doesn't hurt to add some humor to the story! Make him more feminine!
(If you want too of course, I don't know if you can think like that) ha ha ha ha!
Quote from: StarWindWizard7 on November 04, 2007, 11:00:53 AM
1. Stop apologizing!
Your doing a great job, so stop saying your sorry in every one of your stories,
it shows that you lack confidence. If you don't want to be sorry, make sure you fix your mistakes before
you post it.
Your doing a Great Job, no need for apologies, because Nobody is complaining about them. ;)
2. Marth's personality.
question- Is he really like that, so masculine?
Going from SSBM he seemed kind of................ "Froo Froo".
(which is why he's my main :P )
I'm just saying, it doesn't hurt to add some humor to the story! Make him more feminine!
(If you want too of course, I don't know if you can think like that) ha ha ha ha!
"Froo froo"? Of course he's froo froo, he wears a TIARA!
Quote from: Triforce_Luigi on November 04, 2007, 11:05:07 AM
Quote from: StarWindWizard7 on November 04, 2007, 11:00:53 AM
1. Stop apologizing!
Your doing a great job, so stop saying your sorry in every one of your stories,
it shows that you lack confidence. If you don't want to be sorry, make sure you fix your mistakes before
you post it.
Your doing a Great Job, no need for apologies, because Nobody is complaining about them. ;)
2. Marth's personality.
question- Is he really like that, so masculine?
Going from SSBM he seemed kind of................ "Froo Froo".
(which is why he's my main :P )
I'm just saying, it doesn't hurt to add some humor to the story! Make him more feminine!
(If you want too of course, I don't know if you can think like that) ha ha ha ha!
"Froo froo"? Of course he's froo froo, he wears a TIARA!
Thats not a Tiara!
It's a Crown, but in a Tiara shape Form!
Like Totally duh!
Quote from: StarWindWizard7 on November 04, 2007, 11:10:32 AM
Quote from: Triforce_Luigi on November 04, 2007, 11:05:07 AM
Quote from: StarWindWizard7 on November 04, 2007, 11:00:53 AM
1. Stop apologizing!
Your doing a great job, so stop saying your sorry in every one of your stories,
it shows that you lack confidence. If you don't want to be sorry, make sure you fix your mistakes before
you post it.
Your doing a Great Job, no need for apologies, because Nobody is complaining about them. ;)
2. Marth's personality.
question- Is he really like that, so masculine?
Going from SSBM he seemed kind of................ "Froo Froo".
(which is why he's my main :P )
I'm just saying, it doesn't hurt to add some humor to the story! Make him more feminine!
(If you want too of course, I don't know if you can think like that) ha ha ha ha!
"Froo froo"? Of course he's froo froo, he wears a TIARA!
Thats not a Tiara!
It's a Crown, but in a Tiara shape Form!
Like Totally duh!
Uh, actually, I believe that it is in fact a tiara, given to him by his sister. That's why he wears it. Do your research.
Quote from: Triforce_Luigi on November 04, 2007, 11:12:33 AM
Quote from: StarWindWizard7 on November 04, 2007, 11:10:32 AM
Quote from: Triforce_Luigi on November 04, 2007, 11:05:07 AM
Quote from: StarWindWizard7 on November 04, 2007, 11:00:53 AM
1. Stop apologizing!
Your doing a great job, so stop saying your sorry in every one of your stories,
it shows that you lack confidence. If you don't want to be sorry, make sure you fix your mistakes before
you post it.
Your doing a Great Job, no need for apologies, because Nobody is complaining about them. ;)
2. Marth's personality.
question- Is he really like that, so masculine?
Going from SSBM he seemed kind of................ "Froo Froo".
(which is why he's my main :P )
I'm just saying, it doesn't hurt to add some humor to the story! Make him more feminine!
(If you want too of course, I don't know if you can think like that) ha ha ha ha!
"Froo froo"? Of course he's froo froo, he wears a TIARA!
Thats not a Tiara!
It's a Crown, but in a Tiara shape Form!
Like Totally duh!
Uh, actually, I believe that it is in fact a tiara, given to him by his sister. That's why he wears it. Do your research.
Are you cereal? :-X
Quote from: StarWindWizard7 on November 04, 2007, 11:13:37 AM
Quote from: Triforce_Luigi on November 04, 2007, 11:12:33 AM
Quote from: StarWindWizard7 on November 04, 2007, 11:10:32 AM
Quote from: Triforce_Luigi on November 04, 2007, 11:05:07 AM
Quote from: StarWindWizard7 on November 04, 2007, 11:00:53 AM
1. Stop apologizing!
Your doing a great job, so stop saying your sorry in every one of your stories,
it shows that you lack confidence. If you don't want to be sorry, make sure you fix your mistakes before
you post it.
Your doing a Great Job, no need for apologies, because Nobody is complaining about them. ;)
2. Marth's personality.
question- Is he really like that, so masculine?
Going from SSBM he seemed kind of................ "Froo Froo".
(which is why he's my main :P )
I'm just saying, it doesn't hurt to add some humor to the story! Make him more feminine!
(If you want too of course, I don't know if you can think like that) ha ha ha ha!
"Froo froo"? Of course he's froo froo, he wears a TIARA!
Thats not a Tiara!
It's a Crown, but in a Tiara shape Form!
Like Totally duh!
Uh, actually, I believe that it is in fact a tiara, given to him by his sister. That's why he wears it. Do your research.
Are you cereal? :-X
Yes and serious too. :)
On old Nsider, were you the person that put pictures of Genis talking when you posted?
Quote from: Triforce_Luigi on November 04, 2007, 11:15:15 AM
Quote from: StarWindWizard7 on November 04, 2007, 11:13:37 AM
Quote from: Triforce_Luigi on November 04, 2007, 11:12:33 AM
Quote from: StarWindWizard7 on November 04, 2007, 11:10:32 AM
Quote from: Triforce_Luigi on November 04, 2007, 11:05:07 AM
Quote from: StarWindWizard7 on November 04, 2007, 11:00:53 AM
1. Stop apologizing!
Your doing a great job, so stop saying your sorry in every one of your stories,
it shows that you lack confidence. If you don't want to be sorry, make sure you fix your mistakes before
you post it.
Your doing a Great Job, no need for apologies, because Nobody is complaining about them. ;)
2. Marth's personality.
question- Is he really like that, so masculine?
Going from SSBM he seemed kind of................ "Froo Froo".
(which is why he's my main :P )
I'm just saying, it doesn't hurt to add some humor to the story! Make him more feminine!
(If you want too of course, I don't know if you can think like that) ha ha ha ha!
"Froo froo"? Of course he's froo froo, he wears a TIARA!
Thats not a Tiara!
It's a Crown, but in a Tiara shape Form!
Like Totally duh!
Uh, actually, I believe that it is in fact a tiara, given to him by his sister. That's why he wears it. Do your research.
Are you cereal? :-X
Yes and serious too. :)
On old Nsider, were you the person that put pictures of Genis talking when you posted?
LOL, I think you missed the "South Park Cereal" reference. :P
And yes, That was me.
Quote from: StarWindWizard7 on November 04, 2007, 11:17:34 AM
Quote from: Triforce_Luigi on November 04, 2007, 11:15:15 AM
Quote from: StarWindWizard7 on November 04, 2007, 11:13:37 AM
Quote from: Triforce_Luigi on November 04, 2007, 11:12:33 AM
Quote from: StarWindWizard7 on November 04, 2007, 11:10:32 AM
Quote from: Triforce_Luigi on November 04, 2007, 11:05:07 AM
Quote from: StarWindWizard7 on November 04, 2007, 11:00:53 AM
1. Stop apologizing!
Your doing a great job, so stop saying your sorry in every one of your stories,
it shows that you lack confidence. If you don't want to be sorry, make sure you fix your mistakes before
you post it.
Your doing a Great Job, no need for apologies, because Nobody is complaining about them. ;)
2. Marth's personality.
question- Is he really like that, so masculine?
Going from SSBM he seemed kind of................ "Froo Froo".
(which is why he's my main :P )
I'm just saying, it doesn't hurt to add some humor to the story! Make him more feminine!
(If you want too of course, I don't know if you can think like that) ha ha ha ha!
"Froo froo"? Of course he's froo froo, he wears a TIARA!
Thats not a Tiara!
It's a Crown, but in a Tiara shape Form!
Like Totally duh!
Uh, actually, I believe that it is in fact a tiara, given to him by his sister. That's why he wears it. Do your research.
Are you cereal? :-X
Yes and serious too. :)
On old Nsider, were you the person that put pictures of Genis talking when you posted?
LOL, I think you missed the "South Park Cereal" reference. :P
And yes, That was me.
Yes, I did...
Interesting...
Next chap. will be up tomorrow.
Cool. ;D
*waits*
(http://i82.photobucket.com/albums/j242/StarWindWizard7/16x16_man-indifferent.gif)
Quote from: StarWindWizard7 on November 08, 2007, 09:04:56 PM
*waits*
(http://i82.photobucket.com/albums/j242/StarWindWizard7/16x16_man-indifferent.gif)
I was busy yesterday night.... (My dad's birthday..)
It will be up tonight hopefully...
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 09, 2007, 05:03:37 AM
Quote from: StarWindWizard7 on November 08, 2007, 09:04:56 PM
*waits*
(http://i82.photobucket.com/albums/j242/StarWindWizard7/16x16_man-indifferent.gif)
I was busy yesterday night.... (My dad's birthday..)
It will be up tonight hopefully...
Nice, but I'm still waiting.
And add Lucas killing Sonic, why? See the pictures of Lucas moveset and see who is suffering all the damage, that's also counts the person who is in the block of ice. :O
Okay, here is Chapter 12.
Enjoy! :)
Chapter 12, Help from a king
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As Marth walked back into the kitchen, he saw that Mario's wounds were all healed.
"Good.." Marth said, grinning.
"We should go now..."
As Marth walked out the door, he paused, and turned around to his companions.
"So, were going to Lylat then...." He said quietly.
"Yes, I have a feeling that those monsters are after the orb of light found there." Mario said.
"Then lets go!" Red shouted as he dashed out the door, almost tripping arth in the process.
"Watch it!" marth said, as he tried to keep his balance.
"Pika!" Pikachu cheered, as he jumped on Marth's head, leaped off it and followed his trainer.
"Watch the Tiara!" marth yelled, "it was my sister's!"
Mario chukled under his breath, as he followed Marth out the door.
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After five days, Roy's wounds were all healed.
"So, your all healed up.." Link said.
"Yep!" Roy replied, "we should head out then..."
"I remember the floating ship going south," Link said, "we should head that way..."
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"While were in the dream land district, Maybe we should go ask king Dedede for our help," Zelda suggested.
"That is a wise decision," meta knight replied, "were going to need his strength for this..."
Kirby had an annoyed look on his face, he didn't approve of this decision.
"I know you and Dedede have had some...issues in the past, but were going to need all the help we can get." Meta knight said to the sulking warpstar knight.
As the group entered Cappy town, (the town located beside Dedede's palace)
They saw no Cappies outside. Every door locked, every window shut, it was like a ghost town.
"What happened here?!" Peach asked worringly.
"That creature must have been here too!" Meta Knight said.
"I can't believe that my ship would ever do something this horrible..."
As the group looked up at Dedede's palace, they saw smoke coming from the roof.
"We'd better hurry," Meta knight exclaimed, "we might be too late!"
As they entered through the door, they found numourous waddle dee's battered, and bruised, as they lay on the rock floor. They ran to the throne room as fast as they could.
"Dedede?" Meta knight yelled out, "It's me, Meta knight! Come out from hiding!"
Just then, a figure walk out from behind the throne.
It was dedede.
"M..meta knight!" Dedede yelled out, "Why did you attack my beutiful castle?!"
"It wasn't me.." Meta knight told, "creatures stole my ship and are using it to terrorize Ninten!" Meta knight said. "We need your help!"
The king sulked, "why should I help you?!" he asked.
"Please sir!" Peach said, "we really need your assistance!"
Dedede frowned, "Hmph! Why should I? I will probably get myself killed!" He said angrily.
Then Kirby popped out from hiding behind Zelda.
"Oh great, it's you...." dedede said.
Kirby opened his mouth, and started to inhale.
Dedede started to nudge closer to Kirby,
"N..no! Stop! STOP!!" he yelled, as he was sucked into the vortex Kirby made.
He was now inside his mouth.
Dedede banged around inside.
"Let me out! Let me out!" He screamed in a muffled voice.
"We will, if you help us..." Meta knight said happily.
"Argh! Fine, i'll help you. NOW GET ME OUT OF THIS PINK MARSHMELLOW!!"
He screamed.
Kirby opened his mouth, and out came the king.
Covered in saliva, he frowned again.
"Where are we going?!" He asked in an annoyed voice.
"i'll try to contact Mario with my mind..." Zelda said.
"Why didn't you do that earlier?" Meta Knight asked,
"Because when I was in that Pirhana's cage it drained all my Triforce energy," she explained,
"But now I have been fully restored. so here we go! Zelda said as she closed her eyes, and concentrated.
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Sorry about the wait.
I hope you liked it. :)
That was a right nice chapter, guv'nor. Keep up the good work, ya hear!
I sooooooooooooooooooooooo totally want to float your thread
because you took my idea about Marth's personality/Tiara!! :D
I read that part, I swear I couldn't stop laughing for 5 minutes!
So.........you CAN think like that...
;D
Quote from: StarWindWizard7 on November 09, 2007, 10:23:44 PM
I sooooooooooooooooooooooo totally want to float your thread
because you took my idea about Marth's personality/Tiara!! :D
I read that part, I swear I couldn't stop laughing for 5 minutes!
So.........you CAN think like that...
;D
Yeah, I was thinking on how you would react to that... :P
Well, I finally got around to reading your fanfiction. :P It's pretty good so far, and you were right about how it was pretty different from mine.
A few suggestions that I'd like to make, though. You need to work on spelling and grammar a bit more. Although you have improved on that a lot since Link's Journey. Just use spellcheck more often. ;)
Maybe you should have personalities collide a bit more in your fanfiction? All of the characters seem to agree with little to no persuasion from the other characters. You just introduced Dedede, and he didn't really want to join Peach and everyone. Maybe he's a coward and will run away as soon as they have a battle? Do whatever you want, it's your fanfiction. :P
I'll look forward to the next chapter whenever it's up. The next chapter for my fanfiction will hopefully be up tonight as well. I'm considering moving it here, since the fanfiction board is still pretty dead and this board isn't as active as it was on the old Nsider. :D
When will the next chapter be up?
This is just... AWESOME! I'm serious, but there a couple things I'd like to point out. I hope you don't mind.
- The ship is spelt "Halberd"
- Meta Knights sword is called Galaxia, I know it was called Master in Amazing mirror, but on the Meta Knight's final smash update it said it was called Galaxia
- I thought at the beginning when you fight Petey, you can only choose one princess to save.
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But still, this is best thing I've read in a while, great job! :D
When's the next chapter?
Chapter 13, the announcement
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Samus fired her blaster. The orange-coloured beam sped through the air, as it aimed for Ike.
In one flash Ike swept around, and deflected the shot with Ragnell. The clanging noise was very loud. as the beam fired back at Samus, she held her arms up in defence.
It hit her dead-on. As the burning sensation flowed through her arms, Samus switched her blaster to Plasma-whip mode. Ike helped Pit to his feet, as he saw a long orange-coloured whip emmit out of Samus's blaster.
Ike charged her again. Ragnell ready to attack if needed.
Ike jumped into the air, ready to slash downwards. But Samus, with her bulky power suit gone, was faster. The plasma-whip latched around Ike's right wrist.
As Ike cried in pain, he dropped Ragnell. The blessed blade hit the ground hard, as Ike was pulled into Samus's grasp. She then tangled the whip around Ike's throat, and threw him into a nearby rock. holding him with her hand she started to punch him.
"Your mine now kid!" samus yelled as she continually punched Ike in the face over, and over again.
Blood streamed doen Ike's face, as he started to loose conciousness.
Just then, Pit appeared out of nowhere, and held a strung arrow at the back of samus's head.
"Don't move..." Pit said in a deep tone, "if you hit him again, I will fire!"
"Crap! how could I been so careless!" Samus thought, as she clenched her teeth.
Samus shrugged and closed her eyes for a second.
"Well, I guess you win....." Samus said, turning off her blaster.
Ike hit the ground. Blood still spewing out of his nose.
"Pit..." Ike said weakly.
"Keep your strength," Pit replied, still aiming his arrow at samus's head.
"Well, I guess this is it huh?" Samus asked.
Pit grumbled, arrow still facing her head.
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"Okay! here it goes!" Zelda said as she concentrated harder and harder.
She then found a lock on Maro's life enrgy. "Got it!" zelda said happily.
What's up with this witch?! Dedede thought as he stared at the hylian princess,
Is she doing some voodoo thingy?
Mario... Zelda thought.
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As Marth, Red, Pikachu and Mario were leaving Altea's border, Mario froze.
"What's wrong?" Marth asked.
Mario... can you hear me? Zelda asked telepathecally.
"Zelda?!" mario asked out loud,
"Who's this Zelda?" Marth asked, looking over at red.
"I have no clue...." He replied.
Yes, it's me zelda.
"where are you?!" mario asked,
I'm in the dream land district.
"that's pretty far away.... I didn't think the cannon ball hit me that far..."
isten to me Mario, we need to stop the Halberd!
"I know, and I think I know where it's going too...." Mario said.
Really?! that would be alot of help!
"I think it is headed towards the Lylat system. To obtain the legendary "Orb of light"." Mario said.
Hmm... I see, well we'll be headed there right away!
"Wait! I need you to do one more thing..." Mario said.
What?
"Can you tell the contestants from the big tournament this message? I think we'll need all the help we can get."
You mean the tournament seven years ago?
"Yes, that's the one."
Okay, i'll try. we'll meet at Lylat.
"See ya' then..."
The voice inside Mario's head stopped.
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Zelda concentrated very hard, and then she started.
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Contestants! Listen to my words! We are in need of your assistance!
You have been chosen to help save the world!
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Big blue disrict
"W..was that Zelda's voice I just heard?!" a man in a tight blue suit, said to himself.
"Well, I guess i'm needed again..."
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If you might have noticed, a giant flying ship has been terrorizing the districts of ninten. From what we know, they are headed to the Lylat system, the largest district in the world. We think they are after the legendary orb of light. The object that keeps our world intact.
If they take it, Ninten will be destroyed!
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Eagle land district
"Ness! it's time for supper!" a female figure yelled out.
"just a sec' mom!" yelled a boy.
"So, I guess I should start to train again....."
He said, as his hand started to glow.
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Meet us in the Lylat district in two months, I will make sure we are not attacked, when we enter thier border. Right Fox?
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Lylat district, Cornerin central
"s..so... they are coming here...." a figure said, shivering a bit.
Just then, a blue bird clothed in a red jacket appeared from out the door.
"Yo, Fox! Wanna go flying?"
Fox didn't reply.
"Falco, I have something to tell you...." He said.
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So good luck, and see you all in two months!i]
And with that, the announcement was over.
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"Zelda..." Link said to himself, as he gathered his food.
"What was that?" roy asked.
"We should head south, we need go to the lylat system!" Link said, grabbing the hilt of the master sword.
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"Wait you guys! hold up!" Samus yelled out.
"What?" Pit asked.
"I just found out where that flying ship is going!"
"What?!" Pit asked, "where?"
"It's headed towards the Lylat district!"
Ike's eyes opened up again.
"Pit..." Ike said.
"What is it?" Pit replied, "get a vulnery out of my bag, it will heal me..."
Pit looked back at thier attacker, "can I trust you not to attack us?"
Samus nodded, "Yes, it is my mission to track down that ship.."
Pit nodded, and went to Ike's aid.
After Ike ate the vulnery, Samus apoligized for her attack.
She was told to attack any armed men that might attack her.
"So, we should get to my ship, I need to get another Varia suit on...."
She said.
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And thus, the quest to save the world has begn. Will the subspace army reach thier goal and destroy the planeet? or will the smash team stop thier plans?
Only time will tell.
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Sorry the format is so confusing....
NOTE: The reason Marth, Roy, falco couldn't hear it, was because they are unlockable.
Only starters could hear the message.
Hpe that clears a few things up. ;)
Well, I hope you enjoyed it. :)
There were a few noticeable spelling mistakes but other then that, this chapter was pretty good. ;)
Shouldn't Marth have known who Zelda was, though? Or was the tournament seven years ago the N64 Smash Brothers? Seven years ago right now would be in 2000 and that's in between the release of the original Smash and Melee.
I wonder if you'll end up having the same three heroes that I'm going to have in my fanfiction? :P I know everything that's going to happen in my story, but things might change...
Anyways, good chapter. ;) Can't wait to see more. Although the place i pre-ordered Galaxy at should get it in tomorrow...so I might not be able to read tomorrow. :P
Oh yeah, if Falco, Marth and Roy couldn't hear Zelda's message because they were unlockable, why could Captain Falcon and Ness? Are you just going by who was unlockable in Melee?
Quote from: Retronintendodude7 on November 12, 2007, 07:11:04 PM
There were a few noticeable spelling mistakes but other then that, this chapter was pretty good. ;)
Shouldn't Marth have known who Zelda was, though? Or was the tournament seven years ago the N64 Smash Brothers? Seven years ago right now would be in 2000 and that's in between the release of the original Smash and Melee.
I wonder if you'll end up having the same three heroes that I'm going to have in my fanfiction? :P I know everything that's going to happen in my story, but things might change...
Anyways, good chapter. ;) Can't wait to see more. Although the place i pre-ordered Galaxy at should get it in tomorrow...so I might not be able to read tomorrow. :P
Oh yeah, if Falco, Marth and Roy couldn't hear Zelda's message because they were unlockable, why could Captain Falcon and Ness? Are you just going by who was unlockable in Melee?
since brawl is being released in 2008, it makes seven years. :P
also Captain, and ness heard it since they are starters in melee. ;)
also who are your three heroes?
Mine may be diffrent....
(Probably not though... :P)
The best chapter yet! :)
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 12, 2007, 07:29:38 PM
Quote from: Retronintendodude7 on November 12, 2007, 07:11:04 PM
There were a few noticeable spelling mistakes but other then that, this chapter was pretty good. ;)
Shouldn't Marth have known who Zelda was, though? Or was the tournament seven years ago the N64 Smash Brothers? Seven years ago right now would be in 2000 and that's in between the release of the original Smash and Melee.
I wonder if you'll end up having the same three heroes that I'm going to have in my fanfiction? :P I know everything that's going to happen in my story, but things might change...
Anyways, good chapter. ;) Can't wait to see more. Although the place i pre-ordered Galaxy at should get it in tomorrow...so I might not be able to read tomorrow. :P
Oh yeah, if Falco, Marth and Roy couldn't hear Zelda's message because they were unlockable, why could Captain Falcon and Ness? Are you just going by who was unlockable in Melee?
since brawl is being released in 2008, it makes seven years. :P
also Captain, and ness heard it since they are starters in melee. ;)
also who are your three heroes?
Mine may be diffrent....
(Probably not though... :P)
Well, I don't really want to give anything away, because then it won't be a surprise. :P You know that Link's one of them, though.
Let's just say that Retro's guess on the old Nsider wasn't that far off from what I'm doing. ;)
Quote from: Retronintendodude7 on November 12, 2007, 08:04:13 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 12, 2007, 07:29:38 PM
Quote from: Retronintendodude7 on November 12, 2007, 07:11:04 PM
There were a few noticeable spelling mistakes but other then that, this chapter was pretty good. ;)
Shouldn't Marth have known who Zelda was, though? Or was the tournament seven years ago the N64 Smash Brothers? Seven years ago right now would be in 2000 and that's in between the release of the original Smash and Melee.
I wonder if you'll end up having the same three heroes that I'm going to have in my fanfiction? :P I know everything that's going to happen in my story, but things might change...
Anyways, good chapter. ;) Can't wait to see more. Although the place i pre-ordered Galaxy at should get it in tomorrow...so I might not be able to read tomorrow. :P
Oh yeah, if Falco, Marth and Roy couldn't hear Zelda's message because they were unlockable, why could Captain Falcon and Ness? Are you just going by who was unlockable in Melee?
since brawl is being released in 2008, it makes seven years. :P
also Captain, and ness heard it since they are starters in melee. ;)
also who are your three heroes?
Mine may be diffrent....
(Probably not though... :P)
Well, I don't really want to give anything away, because then it won't be a surprise. :P You know that Link's one of them, though.
Let's just say that Retro's guess on the old Nsider wasn't that far off from what I'm doing. ;)
I forget....
i'm guessing....
A few major characters.....
One starts with a "M" and the other starts with an "S".
Am I right? :P
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 12, 2007, 08:26:48 PM
Quote from: Retronintendodude7 on November 12, 2007, 08:04:13 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 12, 2007, 07:29:38 PM
Quote from: Retronintendodude7 on November 12, 2007, 07:11:04 PM
There were a few noticeable spelling mistakes but other then that, this chapter was pretty good. ;)
Shouldn't Marth have known who Zelda was, though? Or was the tournament seven years ago the N64 Smash Brothers? Seven years ago right now would be in 2000 and that's in between the release of the original Smash and Melee.
I wonder if you'll end up having the same three heroes that I'm going to have in my fanfiction? :P I know everything that's going to happen in my story, but things might change...
Anyways, good chapter. ;) Can't wait to see more. Although the place i pre-ordered Galaxy at should get it in tomorrow...so I might not be able to read tomorrow. :P
Oh yeah, if Falco, Marth and Roy couldn't hear Zelda's message because they were unlockable, why could Captain Falcon and Ness? Are you just going by who was unlockable in Melee?
since brawl is being released in 2008, it makes seven years. :P
also Captain, and ness heard it since they are starters in melee. ;)
also who are your three heroes?
Mine may be diffrent....
(Probably not though... :P)
Well, I don't really want to give anything away, because then it won't be a surprise. :P You know that Link's one of them, though.
Let's just say that Retro's guess on the old Nsider wasn't that far off from what I'm doing. ;)
I forget....
i'm guessing....
A few major characters.....
One starts with a "M" and the other starts with an "S".
Am I right? :P
Marth was captured, remember? :P
I'm guessing your heroes are the same people you're thinking of?
Keep this thread going it just gets more awsome to read
I here you need character suggestions!
may i suggest that one group of characters stumble upon some kind of under water palace and find none other than STAFY!!
im serious, Stafy for brawl!
Quote from: WaterGod on November 13, 2007, 08:03:15 PM
I here you need character suggestions!
may i suggest that one group of characters stumble upon some kind of under water palace and find none other than STAFY!!
im serious, Stafy for brawl!
I meant for my dedicaton thread. ;)
But I will do a dedication for Stafy if you like. :)
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 13, 2007, 08:08:45 PM
Quote from: WaterGod on November 13, 2007, 08:03:15 PM
I here you need character suggestions!
may i suggest that one group of characters stumble upon some kind of under water palace and find none other than STAFY!!
im serious, Stafy for brawl!
I meant for my dedicaton thread. ;)
But I will do a dedication for Stafy if you like. :)
whoop ok sorry
When's the next chapter? This fic is awsome.
Quote from: RedSox on November 17, 2007, 06:02:07 AM
When's the next chapter? This fic is awsome.
sorry it hasn't been up in a while...
it'll be up maybe tonight. :)
*waits*
When's the next chapter?
Quote from: RedSox on November 12, 2007, 07:36:12 PM
The best chapter yet! :)
*agrees*
It's becoming big though.
He has to split his story line into different sections even more now...
Quote from: StarWindWizard7 on November 18, 2007, 11:49:36 PM
Quote from: RedSox on November 12, 2007, 07:36:12 PM
The best chapter yet! :)
*agrees*
It's becoming big though.
He has to split his story line into different sections even more now...
yay...
*wat a drag...*
;)
Next Chapter may be up tonight. :)
Chapter 14, explosions, Tiara's, and a psychic
Donkey kong couldn't hear the voice inside his head anymore.
As he regained sanity from the odd expierience, he walked towards Diddy.
The Halberd had already left, leaving a huge hole in the celing behind it.
The two then jumped out the broken window K. rool smashed, and headed towards thier island to pack for thier journey to Lylat.
Unbeknowest to them that they were being watched.
The figure, still inside the tower, gritted his teeth, as he walked towards the window.
His fiery red hair blew in the wind, as he looked down.
that voice sounded like Zelda's.... So, I now need to travel to the Lylat district eh?
crap...I really wanted that treasure here, so I could finally crush that moustacheoed wimp!
The figure thought, as he too jumped out the window.
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After his delicous meal his mom made for him, Ness walked into his backyard.
He looked around to see if anyone was near, there was no one.
"Okay... here we go...." Ness said, as his hand glew red.
He then stuck out his two index fingers, and pointed outwards.
"P.K FIRE!" he yelled, as a small bolt of lightning popped out.
It hit a neaby tree. In a flash, the tree was engulfed in flames.
"okay, lets try again!" Ness yelled, as his hands started to glow again.
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As Samus exited the ship her suit was whole again.
"All right boys, lets get to Lylat!" she said at Pit and Ike.
"Just a sec, I need to grab Ragnell," Ike said, running towards his blade.
"Fine, just hurry it up," Samus called back.
About eleven seconds later, a beam of light shot down from the sky, and hit Samus's ship. It then exploded.
As parts of it flew in the air, the core of the ship was engulfed in the inferno.
unfortunatley, Samus was quite close to the ship when it exploded. and was tossed like a ragdoll to the ground.
Ike looked up in the sky, and saw the Halberd flying off into the horizon.
"Dammit!" Ike yelled, as he sheathed Ragnell, and ran to Samus's aid.
Pit was already at her side.
"How are we getting to Lylat now?!Ike asked angrily.
"Were going to have to walk..." Pit replied.
Ike sulked. Ike never liked travelling on foot. And now, he has to do alot of it.
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As the group exited the dream land border, Dedede was still sulking.
Peach noticed this, and intended to stop it.
She looked at the sulking Penguin, "stop sulking! your bringing us all down!" Peach yelled.
Dedede just ignored her, as he closed his eyes.
Peach was furious now, she then took out a polished golf club, and raised it into the air.
Zelda and the others ignored the whailing Peach gave the king.
After four minutes of whacks, Dedede had a smile on his face.
Too bad several teeth were missing from it.
"We should be entering the Jungle Japes district about now." zelda said.
"Then we should be meeting that giant ape soon..." Peach replied, as she put away her bloodied golf club.
"We should hurry... who knows when those creatures will strike again..." meta knight reminded.
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Marth, Mario, Red, and Pikachu had just entered the Big blue district.
"This is where those crazy races are being held..." marth said.
Red eyed Marth oddly.
"What do you want?" he asked annoyingly...
"What's up with that tiara?!" red asked.
Marth paniced for a second. "Um...ahhh... i..it was my sister's!" Marth replied.
"so, why do you where it? it makes you look like a girl..." Red said, trying to make Marth mad.
"Shut up!" Marth yelled, as he punched Red in the forehead.
"OWWW! that hurt!" Red complained, as he held his head with pain.
"Next time, think before you say something like that!" marth yelled.
"Mama mia...." mario sighed, as he quickened his pace.
"Lets go to Port town, I know a man here that might help us with our travel." He said.
"Pika!" Pikachu yelled happily, as he followed Mario.
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So that's chap. 14, hope you enjoyed it... :)
Me likey.
I know now, you don't want to add Lucas!
Rikku: You meanie!
Quote from: wiiboychris on November 19, 2007, 10:07:10 PM
I know now, you don't want to add Lucas!
Rikku: You meanie!
I am adding him in Chris....
just be patient....
eww filler!. j/k i like it
Quote from: WaterGod on November 20, 2007, 05:54:38 AM
eww filler!. j/k i like it
I knew someone would say that... :D
Really great chapter; but seems like it was fillers/stalling untill an exciting chapter. :|
Quote from: RedSox on November 20, 2007, 04:12:44 PM
Really great chapter; but seems like it was fillers/stalling untill an exciting chapter. :|
fillers?
you mean Bowser's appearance is a filler?
Samus's ship exploding a filler?
every story has it's fillers.... :|
:P
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 20, 2007, 04:22:31 PM
Quote from: RedSox on November 20, 2007, 04:12:44 PM
Really great chapter; but seems like it was fillers/stalling untill an exciting chapter. :|
fillers?
you mean Bowser's appearance is a filler?
every story has it's fillers.... :|
:P
Stop the EVIL smiley!
Quote from: Ridley on November 20, 2007, 04:23:26 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 20, 2007, 04:22:31 PM
Quote from: RedSox on November 20, 2007, 04:12:44 PM
Really great chapter; but seems like it was fillers/stalling untill an exciting chapter. :|
fillers?
you mean Bowser's appearance is a filler?
every story has it's fillers.... :|
:P
Stop the EVIL smiley!
you mean this one? :|
yeah, I BARELY ever use it.....
It really should die.... :|
(:P)
You got it right on the number :| but that doesn't stop me from using it :|
Quote from: Ridley on November 20, 2007, 04:27:36 PM
You got it right on the number :| but that doesn't stop me from using it :|
True dat. :|...:|
:|:|:|:| :| :| :| :| :| :| :| :|................. :|
Is there a place where I can buy a copy of this? :D
and BTW: :| :| :| :| :| :| :| :| :P
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 20, 2007, 04:22:31 PM
Quote from: RedSox on November 20, 2007, 04:12:44 PM
Really great chapter; but seems like it was fillers/stalling untill an exciting chapter. :|
fillers?
you mean Bowser's appearance is a filler?
Samus's ship exploding a filler?
every story has it's fillers.... :|
:P
Good point. Marth's thing was funny. :)
:| :| :| :| :| :| :| :| :| :| :| :| :| :| :| :|
:P
sorry about the fillers.
Here is chapter 15. Enjoy. :|... :P
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Chapter 15, foes become friends
Peach, Zelda, Meta knight, Kirby, and the bumbling Dedede walked through the dense forests of Jungle Japes district. Dedede was more annoying than ever.
"I'm too hot!" he complained, as he stomped the ground in frustration.
"Quit it!" Zelda yelled, as she shot a yellow bolt at the king.
The king barely dodged it. "Hey! knock it off." Dedede yelled.
"Stop trying to hurt m-"
Dedede was confused. He was wondering why everyone was staring behind him.
"W..what's up with you fools?" he asked, annoyed,
"It looks like you just saw a gho-"
Dedede was smacked from behind, and flew into a nearby tree.
"GWAHAHAHAHA!!!!!! Nice to see you again Princess peach!" the figure laughed.
"B...Bowser!" Peach said, suprised.
"Now, come with me to my castle, that annoying plumber isn't here." he said, as he tried to grab Peach. In a second, Bowser felt a pain in his tail. He looked back, and saw that Meta knight had sliced half of it off.
As blood spewed everywhere, Bowser ran around in circles, crying and screaming from the pain.
"AAARGH IT HURTS!!!!" He screamed, as he punched the ground.
Meta knight was dumb founded.
"I cut off a little.... and he's acting like I slashed an arm off...."
As everyone huddled near the babbling bowser, he knew that he was outmatched.
He suddenly stopped crying, and looked up at them.
"H..hey guys.... please don't hurt me...." He said innocentley.
Zelda's hand started to glow.
Bowser paniced.
"W..Why don't I join your little group or whatever...." Bowser suggested.
"Please! just don't hurt me!!!"
Peach sighed, and helped Bowser up.
"Even though you may try to be evil, you are a little baby on the inside..." Peach told him.
"But we will probably need your fire power, so I guess you can come along...."
Bowser stood up. "Oh thank you thank you thank you!!!" He yelled.
Why do I think were going to regret this? Zelda thought, sulking.
"Hey, we should get your little friend over there...." Bowser said, pointing to Dedede...
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Samus, Pit, and Ike have been travelling for over an hour now.
Samus still hasn't fully recovered of her wounds, so Ike had to carry her.
It was night now, so the cool breeze felt nice on thier faces.
Then, Pit spotted a small light in the distance.
a camp fire, perhaps? he thought to himself.
"Ike, I just saw a brigh-"
"I know Pit, I saw it too..." Ike interrupterd.
"We should get there before they leave..."
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Link and Roy were just about to pack up, when they saw two figures closing in on them in the distance. "Roy, get your sword, this could be trouble..." The hylian warned.
Roy grabbed his blade's hilt and walked back to his spot.
Just then, they saw that there were three people instead of two.
"We should charge em' right?" Roy asked inpatiently.
"Hold up, there's something familiar about the one in the orange suit...." Link said.
The three finally met up with them.
"Please help us!" Pit said to Link, "she needs medical attention!"
That's when Link remembered.
"Samus...." he said quietly.
"Then, Samus's helmet opened up, revealing her real face.
"I..it's been a while....Link..." she said weakly.
"You know this guy?" Ike asked.
"Yeah, me and him competed in a big tournament about eight years ago...." She said.
"Heh, I still remembered when I beat you, and I rose to the semifinals..." Link said victoriously.
"That was dumb luck, if that bomb didn-"
"Hush, you need some medicine," Link said, trying to stop Samus.
Samus growled, as she sat down.
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I hope that made up for last chapter's "Fillers"...
Well, I hoped you liked it. :P
I like the chapter.
That wimp =p crying cause he got half his tail cut off =p wait... That would hurt!
Quote from: Depster on November 20, 2007, 06:33:27 PM
That wimp =p crying cause he got half his tail cut off =p wait... That would hurt!
Not really....
You know how small his tail is?! :P
Yet another great chapter, I'm almost getting tired of great >:(
De Ja Vu right Triforceman? ;)
:| :| :| :| :P
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 20, 2007, 06:34:25 PM
Quote from: Depster on November 20, 2007, 06:33:27 PM
That wimp =p crying cause he got half his tail cut off =p wait... That would hurt!
Not really....
You know how small his tail is?! :P
ya, and it's easily big enough for mario to grab in super mario 64. Yes, i have the game. It would still hurt lol =p imagine gettin gone of your butt cheecks sliced off right now as you sit in your chair :P
Quote from: Depster on November 20, 2007, 06:49:06 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 20, 2007, 06:34:25 PM
Quote from: Depster on November 20, 2007, 06:33:27 PM
That wimp =p crying cause he got half his tail cut off =p wait... That would hurt!
Not really....
You know how small his tail is?! :P
ya, and it's easily big enough for mario to grab in super mario 64. Yes, i have the game. It would still hurt lol =p imagine gettin gone of your butt cheecks sliced off right now as you sit in your chair :P
ooo...
that would hurt like hell....
But bowser's a big boy.... :D
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 20, 2007, 06:57:25 PM
Quote from: Depster on November 20, 2007, 06:49:06 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 20, 2007, 06:34:25 PM
Quote from: Depster on November 20, 2007, 06:33:27 PM
That wimp =p crying cause he got half his tail cut off =p wait... That would hurt!
Not really....
You know how small his tail is?! :P
ya, and it's easily big enough for mario to grab in super mario 64. Yes, i have the game. It would still hurt lol =p imagine gettin gone of your butt cheecks sliced off right now as you sit in your chair :P
ooo...
that would hurt like hell....
But bowser's a big boy.... :D
Did you not see how hard he cried? You must not have read Triforceman's fanfi-...oops. ya, you know how hard he cried -.-
Who are the 3 characters? Charlie Angels?
Quote from: Depster on November 20, 2007, 06:59:07 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 20, 2007, 06:57:25 PM
Quote from: Depster on November 20, 2007, 06:49:06 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 20, 2007, 06:34:25 PM
Quote from: Depster on November 20, 2007, 06:33:27 PM
That wimp =p crying cause he got half his tail cut off =p wait... That would hurt!
Not really....
You know how small his tail is?! :P
ya, and it's easily big enough for mario to grab in super mario 64. Yes, i have the game. It would still hurt lol =p imagine gettin gone of your butt cheecks sliced off right now as you sit in your chair :P
ooo...
that would hurt like hell....
But bowser's a big boy.... :D
Did you not see how hard he cried? You must not have read Triforceman's fanfi-...oops. ya, you know how hard he cried -.-
the :D meant I was joking...... ;)
Quote from: wiiboychris on November 20, 2007, 07:08:41 PM
Who are the 3 characters? Charlie Angels?
you mean the ones walking towards Link and roy?
Thats Samus, Pit, and Ike.
Didn't you read it?
you must not have got my joke...
Then, are they Charlie Angels?
Aren't we the hilarious bunch? :D
Quote from: wiiboychris on November 20, 2007, 09:26:11 PM
Then, are they Charlie Angels?
ooooohhhh I get it now... :P
sorry i'm too tired right now... :O
The last chapter waas not really fillers, only the part about Marth. Which was hilarious :P. This chaper was great! :D
*waits patiently... or maybe not so patiently...*
Keep them comin', they're great!
Oh man did I just say that?
When will the next chapter be up?
Quote from: RedSox on November 22, 2007, 02:28:47 PM
When will the next chapter be up?
some time tonight....
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 25, 2007, 12:21:05 PM
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Quote from: wiiboychris on November 25, 2007, 12:17:10 PM
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Quote from: RedSox on November 22, 2007, 02:28:47 PM
When will the next chapter be up?
some time tonight....
I want "you know who".
voltemort? :P
wouldn't that be a plot twist... :D
lol, i kinda figured since u said "you know who"
Quote from: thunderhero4 on November 25, 2007, 12:21:39 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 25, 2007, 12:21:05 PM
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Quote from: wiiboychris on November 25, 2007, 12:17:10 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 25, 2007, 12:16:17 PM
Quote from: RedSox on November 22, 2007, 02:28:47 PM
When will the next chapter be up?
some time tonight....
I want "you know who".
voltemort? :P
wouldn't that be a plot twist... :D
lol, i kinda figured since u said "you know who"
heh...
he wants Lucas....
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 25, 2007, 12:23:51 PM
Quote from: thunderhero4 on November 25, 2007, 12:21:39 PM
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Quote from: wiiboychris on November 25, 2007, 12:17:10 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 25, 2007, 12:16:17 PM
Quote from: RedSox on November 22, 2007, 02:28:47 PM
When will the next chapter be up?
some time tonight....
I want "you know who".
voltemort? :P
wouldn't that be a plot twist... :D
lol, i kinda figured since u said "you know who"
heh...
he wants Lucas....
Way too close, but no. :|
Quote from: wiiboychris on November 25, 2007, 12:25:21 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 25, 2007, 12:23:51 PM
Quote from: thunderhero4 on November 25, 2007, 12:21:39 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 25, 2007, 12:21:05 PM
Quote from: thunderhero4 on November 25, 2007, 12:17:58 PM
Quote from: wiiboychris on November 25, 2007, 12:17:10 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 25, 2007, 12:16:17 PM
Quote from: RedSox on November 22, 2007, 02:28:47 PM
When will the next chapter be up?
some time tonight....
I want "you know who".
voltemort? :P
wouldn't that be a plot twist... :D
lol, i kinda figured since u said "you know who"
heh...
he wants Lucas....
Way too close, but no. :|
how can a guy get way too close?
Quote from: thunderhero4 on November 25, 2007, 12:26:02 PM
Quote from: wiiboychris on November 25, 2007, 12:25:21 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 25, 2007, 12:23:51 PM
Quote from: thunderhero4 on November 25, 2007, 12:21:39 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 25, 2007, 12:21:05 PM
Quote from: thunderhero4 on November 25, 2007, 12:17:58 PM
Quote from: wiiboychris on November 25, 2007, 12:17:10 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 25, 2007, 12:16:17 PM
Quote from: RedSox on November 22, 2007, 02:28:47 PM
When will the next chapter be up?
Hint, they are 2.
some time tonight....
I want "you know who".
voltemort? :P
wouldn't that be a plot twist... :D
lol, i kinda figured since u said "you know who"
heh...
he wants Lucas....
Way too close, but no. :|
how can a guy get way too close?
you don't want lucas? then who?
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 25, 2007, 12:31:14 PM
you don't want lucas? then who?
he wants sonic...hurry and put sonic in...
Quote from: thunderhero4 on November 25, 2007, 12:32:17 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 25, 2007, 12:31:14 PM
you don't want lucas? then who?
he wants sonic...hurry and put sonic in...
he's going to have to wait a while then.... :P
Quote from: thunderhero4 on November 25, 2007, 12:38:14 PM
Quote from: wiiboychris on November 25, 2007, 12:36:51 PM
Quote from: thunderhero4 on November 25, 2007, 12:32:17 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 25, 2007, 12:31:14 PM
you don't want lucas? then who?
he wants sonic...hurry and put sonic in...
For god, no! Hint, they are 2.
how are ice climbers close to lucas?
WAY TOO-wait, did you see the SSBM cinema?
just tell us who you want.
Quote from: wiiboychris on November 25, 2007, 12:40:27 PM
Quote from: thunderhero4 on November 25, 2007, 12:38:14 PM
Quote from: wiiboychris on November 25, 2007, 12:36:51 PM
Quote from: thunderhero4 on November 25, 2007, 12:32:17 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 25, 2007, 12:31:14 PM
you don't want lucas? then who?
he wants sonic...hurry and put sonic in...
For god, no! Hint, they are 2.
how are ice climbers close to lucas?
WAY TOO-wait, did you see the SSBM cinema?
yes, and just tell us! im not much of a guesser....hury before triforceman22 unleashes his chaos blast fury among you....
Ice Climbers! I mean, Lucas! I mean, the 3 together!
Quote from: thunderhero4 on November 25, 2007, 12:43:36 PM
Quote from: wiiboychris on November 25, 2007, 12:40:27 PM
Quote from: thunderhero4 on November 25, 2007, 12:38:14 PM
Quote from: wiiboychris on November 25, 2007, 12:36:51 PM
Quote from: thunderhero4 on November 25, 2007, 12:32:17 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 25, 2007, 12:31:14 PM
you don't want lucas? then who?
he wants sonic...hurry and put sonic in...
For god, no! Hint, they are 2.
how are ice climbers close to lucas?
WAY TOO-wait, did you see the SSBM cinema?
yes, and just tell us! im not much of a guesser....hury before triforceman22 unleashes his chaos blast fury among you....
ARGH!!!! Death to those who oppose me!!!! :P
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 25, 2007, 12:46:00 PM
Quote from: thunderhero4 on November 25, 2007, 12:43:36 PM
Quote from: wiiboychris on November 25, 2007, 12:40:27 PM
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Quote from: wiiboychris on November 25, 2007, 12:36:51 PM
Quote from: thunderhero4 on November 25, 2007, 12:32:17 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 25, 2007, 12:31:14 PM
you don't want lucas? then who?
he wants sonic...hurry and put sonic in...
For god, no! Hint, they are 2.
how are ice climbers close to lucas?
WAY TOO-wait, did you see the SSBM cinema?
yes, and just tell us! im not much of a guesser....hury before triforceman22 unleashes his chaos blast fury among you....
ARGH!!!! Death to those who oppose me!!!! :P
uh oh.... :-\ its too late....
Quote from: thunderhero4 on November 25, 2007, 12:47:38 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 25, 2007, 12:46:00 PM
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Quote from: wiiboychris on November 25, 2007, 12:36:51 PM
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Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 25, 2007, 12:31:14 PM
you don't want lucas? then who?
he wants sonic...hurry and put sonic in...
For god, no! Hint, they are 2.
how are ice climbers close to lucas?
WAY TOO-wait, did you see the SSBM cinema?
yes, and just tell us! im not much of a guesser....hury before triforceman22 unleashes his chaos blast fury among you....
ARGH!!!! Death to those who oppose me!!!! :P
uh oh.... :-\ its too late....
CHAOS.......
joking. :P
The 3 of them!
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 25, 2007, 12:48:20 PM
Quote from: thunderhero4 on November 25, 2007, 12:47:38 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 25, 2007, 12:46:00 PM
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Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 25, 2007, 12:31:14 PM
you don't want lucas? then who?
he wants sonic...hurry and put sonic in...
For god, no! Hint, they are 2.
how are ice climbers close to lucas?
WAY TOO-wait, did you see the SSBM cinema?
yes, and just tell us! im not much of a guesser....hury before triforceman22 unleashes his chaos blast fury among you....
ARGH!!!! Death to those who oppose me!!!! :P
uh oh.... :-\ its too late....
CHAOS.......
joking. :P
:D
Hello?
Ahem! The 3 of them!
*Breaks Sonic icon trend* :P
The last two chapters were pretty good, even though that one was pretty much filler. :P Maybe you should make your chapters longer so you can have filler and still have the story progress a bit?
You're still getting better at fixing your spelling mistakes, but I still noticed a few. That stuff happens all the time, though. I even noticed a few mistakes in Echoes' fanfiction if you remember. :P
I can't wait for the next chapter. ;)
Quote from: Retronintendodude7 on November 25, 2007, 03:05:52 PM
*Breaks Sonic icon trend* :P
The last two chapters were pretty good, even though that one was pretty much filler. :P Maybe you should make your chapters longer so you can have filler and still have the story progress a bit?
You're still getting better at fixing your spelling mistakes, but I still noticed a few. That stuff happens all the time, though. I even noticed a few mistakes in Echoes' fanfiction if you remember. :P
I can't wait for the next chapter. ;)
No! You must join the sonic icon group! :P
anyways, thanks for the tips! :)
the reasons I keep making mistakes is that I have a retarded keyboard.
I type in P, and P won't show up on it....
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 25, 2007, 03:31:06 PM
Quote from: Retronintendodude7 on November 25, 2007, 03:05:52 PM
No! You must join the sonic icon group! :P
anyways, thanks for the tips! :)
the reasons I keep making mistakes is that I have a retarded keyboard.
I type in P, and P won't show up on it....
Meh, I'll stick with Alucard for now. :P
Maybe you should try to convince your parents to get a better keyboard if that's the problem? Or you could just find a p somewhere and copy and paste it where it needs to be put. :D
Quote from: Retronintendodude7 on November 25, 2007, 03:36:10 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 25, 2007, 03:31:06 PM
Quote from: Retronintendodude7 on November 25, 2007, 03:05:52 PM
No! You must join the sonic icon group! :P
anyways, thanks for the tips! :)
the reasons I keep making mistakes is that I have a retarded keyboard.
I type in P, and P won't show up on it....
Meh, I'll stick with Alucard for now. :P
Maybe you should try to convince your parents to get a better keyboard if that's the problem? Or you could just find a p somewhere and copy and paste it where it needs to be put. :D
lol, yeah....
Omega would go nicely with you....
Change it!!!! :D
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 25, 2007, 03:39:31 PM
Quote from: Retronintendodude7 on November 25, 2007, 03:36:10 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 25, 2007, 03:31:06 PM
Quote from: Retronintendodude7 on November 25, 2007, 03:05:52 PM
No! You must join the sonic icon group! :P
anyways, thanks for the tips! :)
the reasons I keep making mistakes is that I have a retarded keyboard.
I type in P, and P won't show up on it....
Meh, I'll stick with Alucard for now. :P
Maybe you should try to convince your parents to get a better keyboard if that's the problem? Or you could just find a p somewhere and copy and paste it where it needs to be put. :D
lol, yeah....
Omega would go nicely with you....
Change it!!!! :D
omega sounds like a good idea...
Dude, don't forget, Omega is a killer machine!
Quote from: wiiboychris on November 25, 2007, 07:19:36 PM
Dude, don't forget, Omega is a killer machine!
yep...isnt it awesome!?
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 25, 2007, 07:46:54 PM
Quote from: wiiboychris on November 25, 2007, 07:43:43 PM
Quote from: thunderhero4 on November 25, 2007, 07:20:21 PM
Quote from: wiiboychris on November 25, 2007, 07:19:36 PM
Dude, don't forget, Omega is a killer machine!
yep...isnt it awesome!?
A killer machine, god NO!
:)
See?
Quote from: wiiboychris on November 25, 2007, 08:05:31 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 25, 2007, 07:46:54 PM
Quote from: wiiboychris on November 25, 2007, 07:43:43 PM
Quote from: thunderhero4 on November 25, 2007, 07:20:21 PM
Quote from: wiiboychris on November 25, 2007, 07:19:36 PM
Dude, don't forget, Omega is a killer machine!
yep...isnt it awesome!?
A killer machine, god NO!
:)
See?
he edited your post to make it say yes, not no...
Quote from: thunderhero4 on November 25, 2007, 09:42:13 PM
Quote from: wiiboychris on November 25, 2007, 08:05:31 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 25, 2007, 07:46:54 PM
Quote from: wiiboychris on November 25, 2007, 07:43:43 PM
Quote from: thunderhero4 on November 25, 2007, 07:20:21 PM
Quote from: wiiboychris on November 25, 2007, 07:19:36 PM
Dude, don't forget, Omega is a killer machine!
yep...isnt it awesome!?
A killer machine, god NO!
:)
See?
he edited your post to make it say yes, not no...
DUH!
*waits*
Also try to incorporate items in the story e.g Beamsword Baseball bat.
Maayybbee. ::)
sorry I havn't done a chapter in a while...
next one will be up tomorrow. :)
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 30, 2007, 12:55:41 PM
sorry I havn't done a chapter in a while...
next one will be up tomorrow. :)
I'm gonna say Triforce_luigi catchprase:
YAY! :D
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 30, 2007, 12:55:41 PM
sorry I havn't done a chapter in a while...
next one will be up tomorrow. :)
Great! I've been waiting for the next chapter in this epic story. ;)
Quote from: RedSox on November 30, 2007, 05:07:15 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 30, 2007, 12:55:41 PM
sorry I havn't done a chapter in a while...
next one will be up tomorrow. :)
Great! I've been waiting for the next chapter in this epic story. ;)
yeah, the long wait was from the sonic avatar thread, and what not... :P
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 30, 2007, 05:10:10 PM
Quote from: RedSox on November 30, 2007, 05:07:15 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 30, 2007, 12:55:41 PM
sorry I havn't done a chapter in a while...
next one will be up tomorrow. :)
Great! I've been waiting for the next chapter in this epic story. ;)
yeah, the long wait was from the sonic avatar thread, and what not... :P
and what not is my line and what not... :P
Hm... What should my line be? I know! Dude!!! 'tsup?
Quote from: wiiboychris on November 30, 2007, 04:21:36 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 30, 2007, 12:55:41 PM
sorry I havn't done a chapter in a while...
next one will be up tomorrow. :)
I'm gonna say Triforce_luigi catchprase:
YAY! :D
I'm changing my catchphrase... How troublesome...
Quote from: Triforce_Luigi on November 30, 2007, 07:46:49 PM
Quote from: wiiboychris on November 30, 2007, 04:21:36 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 30, 2007, 12:55:41 PM
sorry I havn't done a chapter in a while...
next one will be up tomorrow. :)
I'm gonna say Triforce_luigi catchprase:
How troublesome...
I'm changing my catchphrase... How troublesome...
Fixed
Quote from: wiiboychris on November 30, 2007, 07:48:15 PM
Quote from: Triforce_Luigi on November 30, 2007, 07:46:49 PM
Quote from: wiiboychris on November 30, 2007, 04:21:36 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 30, 2007, 12:55:41 PM
sorry I havn't done a chapter in a while...
next one will be up tomorrow. :)
I'm gonna say Triforce_luigi catchprase:
How troublesome...
I'm changing my catchphrase... How troublesome...
Fixed
my catch phrase is "and what not" after every sentence and what not...
Quote from: thunderhero4 on November 30, 2007, 07:49:33 PM
Quote from: wiiboychris on November 30, 2007, 07:48:15 PM
Quote from: Triforce_Luigi on November 30, 2007, 07:46:49 PM
Quote from: wiiboychris on November 30, 2007, 04:21:36 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 30, 2007, 12:55:41 PM
sorry I havn't done a chapter in a while...
next one will be up tomorrow. :)
I'm gonna say Triforce_luigi catchprase:
How troublesome...
I'm changing my catchphrase... How troublesome...
Fixed
my catch phrase is "and what not" after every sentence and what not...
Liar, your catchprase is "Ya".
Quote from: wiiboychris on November 30, 2007, 07:50:25 PM
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Quote from: wiiboychris on November 30, 2007, 04:21:36 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 30, 2007, 12:55:41 PM
sorry I havn't done a chapter in a while...
next one will be up tomorrow. :)
I'm gonna say Triforce_luigi catchprase:
How troublesome...
I'm changing my catchphrase... How troublesome...
Fixed
my catch phrase is "and what not" after every sentence and what not...
Liar, your catchprase is "Ya".
no! its been and what not for years...i just never used it here and what not...
Ok. ;D
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 30, 2007, 05:10:10 PM
Quote from: RedSox on November 30, 2007, 05:07:15 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on November 30, 2007, 12:55:41 PM
sorry I havn't done a chapter in a while...
next one will be up tomorrow. :)
Great! I've been waiting for the next chapter in this epic story. ;)
yeah, the long wait was from the sonic avatar thread, and what not... :P
Understanable. Can't wait. :D
sorry guys I was busy yesterday..
new chap. will be up tonight. :)
Quote from: Triforceman22 on December 01, 2007, 11:17:31 PM
sorry guys I was busy yesterday..
new chap. will be up tonight. :)
ok!
Quote from: thunderhero4 on December 01, 2007, 11:36:11 PM
Quote from: wiiboychris on December 01, 2007, 11:34:14 PM
Quote from: thunderhero4 on December 01, 2007, 11:18:10 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on December 01, 2007, 11:17:31 PM
sorry guys I was busy yesterday..
new chap. will be up tonight. :)
ok!
Suuure, tonight. ::)
hes probably typing it right now and thats why he doesnt answer...
Right, then why his username says "offline"?
Quote from: wiiboychris on December 01, 2007, 11:39:44 PM
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Quote from: wiiboychris on December 01, 2007, 11:34:14 PM
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Quote from: Triforceman22 on December 01, 2007, 11:17:31 PM
sorry guys I was busy yesterday..
new chap. will be up tonight. :)
ok!
Suuure, tonight. ::)
hes probably typing it right now and thats why he doesnt answer...
Right, then why his username says "offline"?
because hes gone...
Quote from: thunderhero4 on December 01, 2007, 11:41:02 PM
Quote from: wiiboychris on December 01, 2007, 11:39:44 PM
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Quote from: wiiboychris on December 01, 2007, 11:34:14 PM
Quote from: thunderhero4 on December 01, 2007, 11:18:10 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on December 01, 2007, 11:17:31 PM
sorry guys I was busy yesterday..
new chap. will be up tonight. :)
ok!
Suuure, tonight. ::)
hes probably typing it right now and thats why he doesnt answer...
Right, then why his username says "offline"?
because hes gone...
DUUHH!
Quote from: wiiboychris on December 01, 2007, 11:43:57 PM
Quote from: thunderhero4 on December 01, 2007, 11:41:02 PM
Quote from: wiiboychris on December 01, 2007, 11:39:44 PM
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Quote from: wiiboychris on December 01, 2007, 11:34:14 PM
Quote from: thunderhero4 on December 01, 2007, 11:18:10 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on December 01, 2007, 11:17:31 PM
sorry guys I was busy yesterday..
new chap. will be up tonight. :)
ok!
Suuure, tonight. ::)
hes probably typing it right now and thats why he doesnt answer...
Right, then why his username says "offline"?
because hes gone...
DUUHH!
;D
Quote from: thunderhero4 on December 01, 2007, 11:44:48 PM
Quote from: wiiboychris on December 01, 2007, 11:43:57 PM
Quote from: thunderhero4 on December 01, 2007, 11:41:02 PM
Quote from: wiiboychris on December 01, 2007, 11:39:44 PM
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Quote from: wiiboychris on December 01, 2007, 11:34:14 PM
Quote from: thunderhero4 on December 01, 2007, 11:18:10 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on December 01, 2007, 11:17:31 PM
sorry guys I was busy yesterday..
new chap. will be up tonight. :)
ok!
Suuure, tonight. ::)
hes probably typing it right now and thats why he doesnt answer...
Right, then why his username says "offline"?
because hes gone...
DUUHH!
;D
HAHA! :D
I meant tonight!
When I was typing that, it was 2 in the morning...
I cant wait. This rocks! Please hurry! I'm all in for a new chap. good job this fan fic rocks.
Quote from: Triforceman22 on December 02, 2007, 07:14:54 AM
I meant tonight!
When I was typing that, it was 2 in the morning...
Waits. It's dark. It's night. ;)
Sorry for the LONG wait.
Here is Chapter 16.
Enjoy. :)
Chapter 16,
As Samus drank the last drop of red potion, Link look into the horizon.
"So, you heard her too, right?" Link asked.
"Yeah.." She replied, placing the empty bottle on the ground.
Ike was confused, he stepped into thier little conversation.
"Um, excuse me, but who is this "her"?" He asked.
Link looked at the ground, and began to speak.
" About eight years ago, there was a large tournament consisting of fighters from chosen districts to fight against eachother. This tournament was called, Melee.."
Ike was starting to understand a little more.
"But who is this person who contacted you?"
Link continued. "Her name is Zelda. She's the princess of my home District, Hyrule." He said,
"She also participated in the Melee tornament."
"oh..." Ike said, now educated on this situation.
"I have a feeling these creatures are trying to destroy the contestants of the tournament, so they aren't threatened by our combined strength.." Link replied.
"That's why they attacked your ship, samus!" Ike said.
"But.. Why did they attack Crimea castle?!" Ike asked, confused.
"Not too sure about that..." Link replied, "But I have a feeling we will find out soon enough!"
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As Peach, and her group kept venturing through the vast forests of Japes district, they decided to split up. Zelda and peach would go north, Meta knight and Kirby would go west, and Bowser and Dedede go east.
After about three hours of searching, Dedede and Bowser found Diddy kong.
Diddy was quite afraid of Bowser, he hasn't seen anyone bigger than DK before.
He shrieked in fear, as he took out his popgun. Dedede screamed, as he hid behind Bowser.
"H..HE'S GOT A GUN!!!" Dedede yelled.
Bowser sighed, and lunged at Diddy.
Diddy fired shot after shot of peanuts at the leaping Koopa, but the peanuts just bounced off his hard stomach. Bowser grabbed Diddy's collar of his shirt and ran towards Dedede.
"Lets mee at the rendevous point." bowser said as he passed the bumbling king.
"W..Wait for me!" Dedede yelled, as he followed the koopa king.
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Captain Falcon exited the building and walked on to the side walk.
He put his hand in his pocket, and pulled out a small machine.
He clicked the button on it, and in a flash, a blue coloured ship appered out of nowhere infront of the captain.
"Well, I better start training if i'm going to be fighting again..." He said as he got into the racer.
Before he stepped on the gas pedal, someone called out to him.
"Captain Falcon! Wait!" Said the unknown voice.
the Captain seemed confused at first, and then he recognized the voice.
"Mario?" He said, as he got out of his racer.
He looked up, and saw the mustacheod hero and a few other figures run towards him.
"So, it looks like I won't be getting any training done afterall...." The captain said, smirking.
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So that was chapter 16...
I hoped you liked it... :)
It was okay... NEW CHAPTER IN MY FANFIC!!! Just wanted to see how fast I could type that, even if it's true.
It as a little short for that long a wait. But otherwise great chapter!
Other than some of the characters learning something, Mario meeting Falcon, and Diddy's (random) appearance, this chapter was kinda filler.
So they just "happened to find Diddy Kong randomly?
kind of, they split up to search for them....
You people are complaining about fillers?
You found out more about the emissary's intentions!
Man, for once I would like no complaining about a chpater's fillers.
Quote from: Triforceman22 on December 02, 2007, 03:38:56 PM
kind of, they split up to search for them....
You people are complaining about fillers?
You found out more about the emissary's intentions!
Man, for once I would like no complaining about a chpater's fillers.
I'm not really complaining. More, stating a fact. Also, what happened to Marth and Red? And why is mine being ignored :'(?
Quote from: Triforce_Luigi on December 02, 2007, 03:40:17 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on December 02, 2007, 03:38:56 PM
kind of, they split up to search for them....
You people are complaining about fillers?
You found out more about the emissary's intentions!
Man, for once I would like no complaining about a chpater's fillers.
I'm not really complaining. More, stating a fact. Also, what happened to Marth and Red? And why is mine being ignored :'(?
They are following behind Mario.
I should have put that in....
Quote from: Triforceman22 on December 02, 2007, 03:41:56 PM
Quote from: Triforce_Luigi on December 02, 2007, 03:40:17 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on December 02, 2007, 03:38:56 PM
kind of, they split up to search for them....
You people are complaining about fillers?
You found out more about the emissary's intentions!
Man, for once I would like no complaining about a chpater's fillers.
I'm not really complaining. More, stating a fact. Also, what happened to Marth and Red? And why is mine being ignored :'(?
They are following behind Mario.
I should have put that in....
Yeah, you should have... But then again: shoulda, woulda, coulda. You might want to edit that in before more readers are confused.
good idea...
Hey Guys!
Check out my other fiction!
It's called Soul Calibur Link's journey.
It's my first fan fic so there are a few mistakes, but it's really good.
http://nsiderforums.net/index.php?topic=1367.0
Enjoy! :)
Quote from: Triforceman22 on December 02, 2007, 07:54:38 PM
Hey Guys!
Check out my other fiction!
It's called Soul Calibur Link's journey.
It's my first fan fic so there are a few mistakes, but it's really good.
[glow=green]http://nsiderforums.net/index.php?topic=1367.0[/glow]
Enjoy! :)
Is it supposed to glow? Because it's not.
Quote from: Triforce_Luigi on December 02, 2007, 07:55:19 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on December 02, 2007, 07:54:38 PM
Hey Guys!
Check out my other fiction!
It's called Soul Calibur Link's journey.
It's my first fan fic so there are a few mistakes, but it's really good.
[glow=green]http://nsiderforums.net/index.php?topic=1367.0[/glow]
Enjoy! :)
Is it supposed to glow? Because it's not.
oh...
well go read it anyway! :P
Also, that was really good. Only read the first chapter, but looks good so far.
Now read this:
http://nsiderforums.net/index.php?topic=8462.0
Now read this:
Now read above:
Did you received the videos I send you?
Quote from: wiiboychris on December 02, 2007, 08:46:31 PM
Did you received the videos I send you?
I haven't received any videos recently...
Quote from: Triforce_Luigi on December 02, 2007, 08:51:09 PM
Quote from: wiiboychris on December 02, 2007, 08:46:31 PM
Did you received the videos I send you?
I haven't received any videos recently...
..........I need to send you more videos.
new chap. will be up sometime today! :)
Quote from: Triforceman22 on December 11, 2007, 05:21:47 AM
new chap. will be up sometime today! :)
Hurray......I can't wait......
Yay! ;D
Okay, chapter 17!!!!
Enjoy! :)
Chapter 17,
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General black, can you hear me?
-Yes, my lord,
Is everything ready?
-We need a little more time,
and how much time would that take?
-About a month or so,
excellent. This world will cease to exist in a month then.
-And without the strongest fighters, wrecking havoc upon this pathetic galaxy will be simple.
Good luck, and you have the greatest of speed.
-thank you, lord smash. General black, out.
Just then, a primid came barging through the doors to the main room in the halbred.
The ancient minister lost his train of thought as he looked at the low-classed solider.
"Sir! Link and his group are on thier way to Lylat!" The primid said.
"Hmm.... Send a small squad there to greet them..." He replied.
"One of those worms was responsible for my defeat 8 years ago."
"Y..yes sir! Right away!" and with that, the primid exited the large room.
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After peach and Zelda found DK, they traveled back to the rendevous point.
But while they were walking, they heard something rustle in a nearby bush.
And then, a small creature jummped out, and ran away from them.
It was red, white, and black in colour and had cube-shaped objects on it's body.
"What was that?!" Peach asked,
"Not too sure... But we shouldn't let it get away..." Zelda replied.
Then the creature shreiked. It was blood curdling.
Peach, Zelda, and DK squirmed in pain.
Then, the creature vanished.
"W..what?" Zelda said, suprised.
Then, a purple rift opened in the sky, and purple specks fell from it.
"Those look familiar..." Zelda said, trying to remember where she saw them.
"That's right! Peach! These are the things we encountered at Terra Firma!"
Zelda yelled out.
I guess that ...thing... has planted his seed across all of Ninten....
She thought, as she took her fighting stance.
About eight Primids appeared from the purple specks. And they all took thier fighting stances.
DK roared, and readied for the battle that was before them.
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"So, we need to get to Lylat as soon as possible, eh?" Captain falcon said,
"Yes, we should leave as soon as possible..." Mario said.
"Too bad, we can't use the blue falcon..." The captain said.
"It only fits one...."
"Looks like were going to have to get there by foot...."
Mario sighed.
"Not necissarily..." the captain said.
He then took out the small machine again. He clicked the button twice.
"Just wait," He told the group.
In about two seconds, a medium sized ship appeared infront of the blue falcon.
"this, is the Falcon flyer. we can all get in, and make it to Lylat faster!" The falcon said, grinning.
"Great! Everyone get in! Mario commanded, as Marth, red, and Pikachu followed.
"Now, lets get this party started!" Falcon said, as the hatch door closed.
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Link poured water on the dieing campfire.
The black smoke rose up to the sky.
"Well, we should be heading out, the others are probably almost, if not already at Lylat."
Link said. "Samus has fully recovered from her wounds, and was ready to go.
"So, lets head out!" Roy said sheathing his sword.
Just then, they saw rising dirt coming from the horizon.
"What's that?" Pit asked, as they all watched it coming closer.
Just then, they heard the sound of running motors.
Then, they saw something that looked like a small motorcycle come from out of the smoke.
"What the?!" Ike said.
Then, thirteen more came roaring up behind the one.
"Mission delta, commence!" Said the one in front.
"It doesn't look like anyone is driving it.... What's going on?!" samus said.
"I don't know, but everyone! draw your weapons! It looks like were going to need them..." Link told them, drawing the master sword.
Everyone else readied for their encounter, as the squad of bikes came closer, and closer to them.
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That was a little longer...
hoped you liked it. :)
.......................good.........job?
Quote from: wiiboychris on December 11, 2007, 02:20:26 PM
.......................good.........job?
...........you........didn't........like.........it?
Quote from: Triforceman22 on December 11, 2007, 02:25:00 PM
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Quote from: wiiboychris on December 11, 2007, 02:20:26 PM
Good job.
...........you........didn't........like.........it?
Eh, yes, I did like it.
so what's with all the periods then?
What periods?
Great chapter! :D :D :D
When is the next chapter?
Quote from: RedSox on December 14, 2007, 03:59:03 PM
When is the next chapter?
Well, mine is in 4 hours. ;)
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Quote from: RedSox on December 14, 2007, 03:59:03 PM
When is the next chapter?
Well, mine is in 4 hours. ;)
Why not now? :(
:P
I was wondering the same thing :)
Hmm, ok, in 1 hour. ;)
For real... WHEN IS THE NEXT CHAPTER?! >:(
Quote from: RedSox on December 14, 2007, 07:20:10 PM
For real... WHEN IS THE NEXT CHAPTER?! >:(
Mine or Triforceman22?
Guys, call me Ryan. It's shorter to say than Triforceman22. :P
here's new chapter you being enjoying it. K?
Good. :)
Chapter 18,
As the eight primid were about to attack, DK whirled his fist around.
He was getting ready for his signiature move.
Two Primid suddenly jumped at Peach.
The princess took out her Majenta Parasol with blinding speed, and whacked one of the attackers.
It fell to the ground.
She turned around, and kicked the other. Her high heels sticking into the creatures stomach.
it dissapeared into a cloud of purple smoke.
About three other attacked Zelda. The three were instantley set on fire from Din's fire.
As they ran around in circles screaming from the intense pain they were in, the other three leaped at DK. That was a mistake. DK, with his already charged fist, punched them with all his might.
The three subspace troops were sent flying.
They flew out of the forest's branches and were now soaring over the Japes district.
the three thought they were done... There was something else hiding in the bushes. Something that could not be seen.
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Bowser, Dedede and Diddy were returning to the rendevous point. Diddy was squirming frequentley, trying to escape the Koopa king's grasp, but to no avail.
They were now walking along a lake side. the crystal clear water shimmered in the sunlight.
Just then, they heard a whacking noise. They were startled at first, but then they looked around from where it came from. Then, Bowser spotted three figures fly into the sky.
That's DK alright... They must be in trouble, we should hurry up... he thought, as he turned to Dedede.
"We should hurry up..." bowser suggested.
Dedede nodded, and the two kings quickened thier paces.
The water in the lake started to ripple.
Bowser eyed the lake carefully, as he was running.
The ripples turned into waves. Dedede now noticed, and he was eyeing it too.
Then, a giant snake-like creature flew out of the water, and soared towards Bowser.
Dedede shrieked, as bowser took his fighting stances.
As the creature got nearer, and nearer, it opened it's mouth.
A giant blue orb appeared there. Bowser readied to move out of the way.
Without notice, it fired the blue orb of energy at Dedede!
dedede shrieked yet again, and barely jumped out of the way.
Bowser turned at his companion.
It was now the creature's chance. It eyed Diddy for about a second, and then lunged at the little monkey. It grabbed him by the arm, almost yanking it off.
It then hovered over the lake. Looking at Diddy with it's piercing black eyes.
Bowser shrieked. "Oh no! what are we supposed to do now?!" He asked.
The creature's tounge came out and licked it's lips. It was dinner time.
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As Mario and co. Soared over Big Blue, Falcon couldn't shake off the feeling that they were being followed. He turned to Marth and Red.
"Hey guys, can you open the rear door to see anything?" he asked.
"Uhhh....sure...I guess.." Red replied.
as the two walked towards the back of the flyer, Red noticed that marth hadn't taken off the tiara yet.
"When are you going to take that thing off?!" He asked impatiently.
Marth eyed red again. "I told you once, I told you twice, and i'll tell you again, I'M NOT TAKING THIS TIARA OFF!!" he yelled.
"It makes you look... Froo-froo..." Red said.
"WHAT'S THAT SUPPOSED TO MEA-" Marth was interrupted when the flyer rocked back and forth.
Falcon looked at the many screens on the dashboard. Five were flashing Red.
"Oh no..." Falcon said under his breath.
Just then, something flew up towards a nearby window. Mario was staring at it.
It looked like a mechanical bird, but something wasn't right...
Just then, another rocking happened. Another two screens flashed Red.
Marth and Red opened the back door.
Marth's cloak was blowing every where.
then they was a flat object flying towards them. Then they saw another, and another, and another. Mario got out of his seat. "Finally! Some action!" He said cheerfully as he ran toward his two companions.
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I hope you liked this one.
new chap. may be up tomorrow depending on how busy I am. :)
One of the best chapters yet!
@Cris: This is Ryan's thread. ;)
You are getting better at this.
Quote from: Triforce_Luigi on December 15, 2007, 07:50:49 AM
You are getting better at this.
This is going to get SO much better!
were near the half way point. :)
Trust me, near the end, your going to love this. :)
I already love it. The detail has improved lately.
Quote from: Triforce_Luigi on December 15, 2007, 07:56:39 AM
I already love it. The detail has improved lately.
well, your going to love it more! :)
Quote from: Triforceman22 on December 15, 2007, 08:08:49 AM
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Quote from: Triforce_Luigi on December 15, 2007, 07:56:39 AM
I already love it. The detail has improved lately.
well, your going to love it more! :)
Impossible! ::)
Nope!
At the halfway point, a new character appears! Guess who it is!
Check your pms. ;)
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Quote from: Triforce_Luigi on December 15, 2007, 07:56:39 AM
I already love it. The detail has improved lately.
well, your going to love it more! :)
Impossible! ::)
Nope!
At the halfway point, a new character appears! Guess who it is!
Check your pms. ;)
Lucas or either Sonic.
Quote from: wiiboychris on December 15, 2007, 12:30:31 PM
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Quote from: Triforce_Luigi on December 15, 2007, 07:56:39 AM
I already love it. The detail has improved lately.
well, your going to love it more! :)
Impossible! ::)
Nope!
At the halfway point, a new character appears! Guess who it is!
Check your pms. ;)
Lucas or either Sonic.
I guessed in the thread and got it right and he said it spoiled it for everyone and next time to tell him via pm. And I got it right! If anyone wants it spoiled.... Too bad! You'll have to wait! :P
Quote from: RedSox on December 15, 2007, 04:11:14 PM
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Quote from: Triforce_Luigi on December 15, 2007, 07:56:39 AM
I already love it. The detail has improved lately.
well, your going to love it more! :)
Impossible! ::)
Nope!
At the halfway point, a new character appears! Guess who it is!
Check your pms. ;)
Lucas or either Sonic.
I guessed in the thread and got it right and he said it spoiled it for everyone and next time to tell him via pm. And I got it right! If anyone wants it spoiled.... Too bad! You'll have to wait! :P
I'm thinking is either Shadow or Stafy.
You should add in items and assist trophies.
Quote from: RedSox on December 15, 2007, 06:10:55 PM
You should add in items and assist trophies.
I writing the next cahpter right now!
Quote from: wiiboychris on December 15, 2007, 06:15:27 PM
Quote from: RedSox on December 15, 2007, 06:10:55 PM
You should add in items and assist trophies.
I writing the next cahpter right now!
For future reference, if I post in this thread, I'm talking to Ryan. ;)
Quote from: RedSox on December 15, 2007, 06:24:33 PM
Quote from: wiiboychris on December 15, 2007, 06:15:27 PM
Quote from: RedSox on December 15, 2007, 06:10:55 PM
You should add in items and assist trophies.
I writing the next cahpter right now!
For future reference, if I post in this thread, I'm talking to Ryan. ;)
I will add items in the last part of the story, and in flashbacks (From the melee tourney)
:)
Quote from: Triforceman22 on December 15, 2007, 07:58:12 PM
Quote from: RedSox on December 15, 2007, 06:24:33 PM
Quote from: wiiboychris on December 15, 2007, 06:15:27 PM
Quote from: RedSox on December 15, 2007, 06:10:55 PM
You should add in items and assist trophies.
I writing the next cahpter right now!
For future reference, if I post in this thread, I'm talking to Ryan. ;)
I will add items in the last part of the story, and in flashbacks (From the melee tourney)
:)
Cool, what about assist trophies?
Quote from: RedSox on December 15, 2007, 08:17:28 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on December 15, 2007, 07:58:12 PM
Quote from: RedSox on December 15, 2007, 06:24:33 PM
Quote from: wiiboychris on December 15, 2007, 06:15:27 PM
Quote from: RedSox on December 15, 2007, 06:10:55 PM
You should add in items and assist trophies.
I writing the next cahpter right now!
For future reference, if I post in this thread, I'm talking to Ryan. ;)
I will add items in the last part of the story, and in flashbacks (From the melee tourney)
:)
Cool, what about assist trophies?
Good idea.
Quote from: wiiboychris on December 15, 2007, 08:34:05 PM
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Quote from: wiiboychris on December 15, 2007, 06:15:27 PM
Quote from: RedSox on December 15, 2007, 06:10:55 PM
You should add in items and assist trophies.
I writing the next cahpter right now!
For future reference, if I post in this thread, I'm talking to Ryan. ;)
I will add items in the last part of the story, and in flashbacks (From the melee tourney)
:)
Cool, what about assist trophies?
Good idea.
it'll be kinda hard to implant AT's into this alread, since everyone is on the move...
so, I doubt thier appearance.
Sorry.
Quote from: Triforceman22 on December 15, 2007, 08:52:36 PM
Quote from: wiiboychris on December 15, 2007, 08:34:05 PM
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Quote from: RedSox on December 15, 2007, 06:24:33 PM
Quote from: wiiboychris on December 15, 2007, 06:15:27 PM
Quote from: RedSox on December 15, 2007, 06:10:55 PM
You should add in items and assist trophies.
I writing the next cahpter right now!
For future reference, if I post in this thread, I'm talking to Ryan. ;)
I will add items in the last part of the story, and in flashbacks (From the melee tourney)
:)
Cool, what about assist trophies?
Good idea.
it'll be kinda hard to implant AT's into this alread, since everyone is on the move...
so, I doubt thier appearance.
Sorry.
That's fine. :(
:P
Chapter 19 Approaches!
it will be up sometime in the afternoon. :)
Quote from: Triforceman22 on December 16, 2007, 06:14:06 AM
Chapter 19 Approaches!
it will be up sometime in the afternoon. :)
Cool. 8)
I missed three chapters? :O Sorry about that, Ryan...
The chapters were pretty good, I liked how the chapters are getting longer. :) You're adding more comedy into the fanfiction, which is never a bad thing. I can tell that Marth's tiara is probably going to be a running gag in your fic, like Link's ears in your other fanfiction. :P
I think that your chapters could be a bit longer so the story can progress faster than it is. The length of your chapters is fine right now, especially for people who miss a few :P, but it's just a suggestion.
I'll wait for the next chapter to come up. :)
Quote from: Retronintendodude7 on December 16, 2007, 04:04:56 PM
I missed three chapters? :O Sorry about that, Ryan...
The chapters were pretty good, I liked how the chapters are getting longer. :) You're adding more comedy into the fanfiction, which is never a bad thing. I can tell that Marth's tiara is probably going to be a running gag in your fic, like Link's ears in your other fanfiction. :P
I think that your chapters could be a bit longer so the story can progress faster than it is. The length of your chapters is fine right now, especially for people who miss a few :P, but it's just a suggestion.
I'll wait for the next chapter to come up. :)
I think the legnth of the chapters is just fine in my opinion
How dare you insult Marth! >:(
Don't worry, Marth is going to kick ass next chapter. :)
Okay guys, chapter 19.
Enjoy. :)
Chapter 19
Link and company readied thier blades for the battle coming towards them.
Pit connected his knives, and aimed an arrow at the lead Roader.
They were at least twenty feet apart, when Pit fired his first arrow of many.
It hit the roader dead in the visor.
Smoke rised from the cracked opening, and the roader was set aflame.
If hit the ground, and rolled around in place until it was dead.
The other roaders were coming in too quickly. fastening thier pace after what Pit did to thier leader.
Finally, Ike sprinted towards the fleet of roaders. Link and roy followed him.
So did samus, who already had her arm cannon charged.
Ike slashed through one with his brute strength, as Link grappled to ne with his hookshot.
Link swung himself on the Roader. As the enemy tried top shake him off, Link drew the Master sword, and impaled the top of it's head. Link then jumped off along with his blade, looking at the Roader as it hit a nearby rock and exploded.
Samus fired a missile. It exploded upon impact. Ripping the roader in two.
Pit fired arrow after arrow, destroying enemy after enemy.
this is too easy, somethingb more powerful is coming, I know it... Pit thought, as another roader fell.
Just then, a giant purple blob hit the ground. smushing about three roaders.
"W...what in the..?!" Ike said, suprised.
Then the blob formed itself. Two Giant Scythes appeared over it's head.
It's glowing red eyes were terrifying, as it destroyed the entire fleet of roaders in one swing.
"...dam n..." Link said under his breath.
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Dedede jumped at rayquaza with all his might. He got his mallet ready, and swung at the rogue Pokemon with all his strength.
Unfortunatley for Dedede, Rayquaza just smacked the king away. As Dedede hit the ground, Bowser inhaled. Once he exhaled, a wave of fire burst out from his mouth.
Raquaza fired a blue beam of enrgy out of his mouth.
Once the two energies hit, the blue beam blasted right through the inferno.
"No!" bowser screamed as the beam hit him.
sending him flying into the air. As both kings were unconcious, diddy screamed, as he tried to squirm free once again.
Just Then, a golden flash of light came out of nowhere, and impaled rayquaza in the fore head.
Blood squirted everywhere as The legendary Pokemon screamed and dropped back into the lake.
As it's lifeless head bobbed in the water, the golden light faded. Turning out to be a familiar golden sword.
Then, Meta Knight flew from the skies and landed on the monster's head. He grabbed his sword and sheathed it. Kirby followed.
they glared at diddy for a second, and then Meta Knight spoke out.
"Come with us." He said, as the two warp star knights ran towards the rendevous point.
Diddy didn't know what was going on, but he followed anyway.
Sorry this was short.
But I hoped you liked it. :)
I liked it, but poor Rayquayza.
Nice one. IT IMPALED HIM! :P
come on guys, post!
Quote from: Triforceman22 on January 06, 2008, 08:35:19 PM
come on guys, post!
You have serious Rayquaza issues. Have you seen a counselor about that? I would recommend talking to Brandon.
Quote from: RedSox on January 06, 2008, 08:40:05 PM
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come on guys, post!
When is the next chapter?
tomorrow, but I doubt it.
I need to do a project...
What subject?
health.
our teacher calls it a take home exam. >_<
Quote from: Triforceman22 on January 01, 2008, 08:33:06 PM
Quote from: Triforce_Luigi on January 01, 2008, 06:11:48 PM
I liked it, but poor Rayquayza.
HE HAD TO DIE!!!!! :P
hehe, you sound alot like alvinearthworm......the guy who made SMBZ!
Quote from: Triforceman22 on January 06, 2008, 08:42:02 PM
Quote from: RedSox on January 06, 2008, 08:40:05 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on January 06, 2008, 08:38:18 PM
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Quote from: Triforceman22 on January 06, 2008, 08:35:19 PM
come on guys, post!
When is the next chapter?
tomorrow, but I doubt it.
I need to do a project...
What subject?
health.
our teacher calls it a take home exam. >_<
I'm taking Biology, but I'm learning Human anatomy and physiology so I probably know what you're going to talk about. What body system/organ/muscle/cell are you gonna do it on?
Quote from: RedSox on January 06, 2008, 08:45:17 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on January 06, 2008, 08:42:02 PM
Quote from: RedSox on January 06, 2008, 08:40:05 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on January 06, 2008, 08:38:18 PM
Quote from: RedSox on January 06, 2008, 08:37:22 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on January 06, 2008, 08:35:19 PM
come on guys, post!
When is the next chapter?
tomorrow, but I doubt it.
I need to do a project...
What subject?
health.
our teacher calls it a take home exam. >_<
I'm taking Biology, but I'm learning Human anatomy and physiology so I probably know what you're going to talk about. What body system/organ/muscle/cell are you gonna do it on?
umm...
It's gym version of health.
Like fitness and such...
Quote from: Triforceman22 on January 06, 2008, 08:47:53 PM
Quote from: RedSox on January 06, 2008, 08:45:17 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on January 06, 2008, 08:42:02 PM
Quote from: RedSox on January 06, 2008, 08:40:05 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on January 06, 2008, 08:38:18 PM
Quote from: RedSox on January 06, 2008, 08:37:22 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on January 06, 2008, 08:35:19 PM
come on guys, post!
When is the next chapter?
tomorrow, but I doubt it.
I need to do a project...
What subject?
health.
our teacher calls it a take home exam. >_<
I'm taking Biology, but I'm learning Human anatomy and physiology so I probably know what you're going to talk about. What body system/organ/muscle/cell are you gonna do it on?
umm...
It's gym version of health.
Like fitness and such...
Oh :-X This is getting off topic...
Quote from: RedSox on January 06, 2008, 08:52:43 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on January 06, 2008, 08:47:53 PM
Quote from: RedSox on January 06, 2008, 08:45:17 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on January 06, 2008, 08:42:02 PM
Quote from: RedSox on January 06, 2008, 08:40:05 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on January 06, 2008, 08:38:18 PM
Quote from: RedSox on January 06, 2008, 08:37:22 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on January 06, 2008, 08:35:19 PM
come on guys, post!
When is the next chapter?
tomorrow, but I doubt it.
I need to do a project...
What subject?
health.
our teacher calls it a take home exam. >_<
I'm taking Biology, but I'm learning Human anatomy and physiology so I probably know what you're going to talk about. What body system/organ/muscle/cell are you gonna do it on?
umm...
It's gym version of health.
Like fitness and such...
Oh :-X This is getting off topic...
indeed it is. :P
I read the first three chapters, and then skipped to the last chapter you wrote. It's not bad, but it's not great either. Your description is good, but the story itself seems to be missing something... The plot isn't very elaborate from what I've read, and the characters don't seem to be... very in character. Also, I spotted a few grammar, mechanical, and spelling errors.
However, I haven't read the whole thing, so what do I know? Write a few more chapters, and I'll be able to make a more clear verdict.
Quote from: LightningSword on January 31, 2008, 09:17:26 PM
I read the first three chapters, and then skipped to the last chapter you wrote. It's not bad, but it's not great either. Your description is good, but the story itself seems to be missing something... The plot isn't very elaborate from what I've read, and the characters don't seem to be... very in character. Also, I spotted a few grammar, mechanical, and spelling errors.
However, I haven't read the whole thing, so what do I know? Write a few more chapters, and I'll be able to make a more clear verdict.
hmmm.....
I know the plot is bad, but it will get better.
Were very close to the half point, where the plot will pick up more...
Also it's hard getting characters that barely talk into character....
Remember that...
Quote from: LightningSword on January 31, 2008, 09:17:26 PM
I read the first three chapters, and then skipped to the last chapter you wrote. It's not bad, but it's not great either. Your description is good, but the story itself seems to be missing something... The plot isn't very elaborate from what I've read, and the characters don't seem to be... very in character. Also, I spotted a few grammar, mechanical, and spelling errors.
However, I haven't read the whole thing, so what do I know? Write a few more chapters, and I'll be able to make a more clear verdict.
Oh, and by the way, you wont like mine unless you like random things that make sense at the same time...
and I love this fan-fic! <3
Quote from: Triforceman22 on January 31, 2008, 09:20:59 PM
Quote from: LightningSword on January 31, 2008, 09:17:26 PM
I read the first three chapters, and then skipped to the last chapter you wrote. It's not bad, but it's not great either. Your description is good, but the story itself seems to be missing something... The plot isn't very elaborate from what I've read, and the characters don't seem to be... very in character. Also, I spotted a few grammar, mechanical, and spelling errors.
However, I haven't read the whole thing, so what do I know? Write a few more chapters, and I'll be able to make a more clear verdict.
hmmm.....
I know the plot is bad, but it will get better.
Were very close to the half point, where the plot will pick up more...
Also it's hard getting characters that barely talk into character....
Remember that...
Use their emotions, then. Detail the wrinkles that appear on their face when they grimace, the way they move, etc.
"Let's go." Kriby said.
That didn't sound very good, did it? Or, maybe it did sound good, but not great. Instead, do this:
The small, pink puffball jumped up and down with joy, and waved his stubby arms at the others to get their attention.
Characters are or aren't supposed to talk in video games for a reason. Use that to your advantage. ;) Also, might I reccommend the Fanfic of the Month contest, if you want to see how you fare against others?
Quote from: LightningSword on January 31, 2008, 09:26:30 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on January 31, 2008, 09:20:59 PM
Quote from: LightningSword on January 31, 2008, 09:17:26 PM
I read the first three chapters, and then skipped to the last chapter you wrote. It's not bad, but it's not great either. Your description is good, but the story itself seems to be missing something... The plot isn't very elaborate from what I've read, and the characters don't seem to be... very in character. Also, I spotted a few grammar, mechanical, and spelling errors.
However, I haven't read the whole thing, so what do I know? Write a few more chapters, and I'll be able to make a more clear verdict.
hmmm.....
I know the plot is bad, but it will get better.
Were very close to the half point, where the plot will pick up more...
Also it's hard getting characters that barely talk into character....
Remember that...
Use their emotions, then. Detail the wrinkles that appear on their face when they grimace, the way they move, etc.
"Let's go." Kriby said.
That didn't sound very good, did it? Or, maybe it did sound good, but not great. Instead, do this:
The small, pink puffball jumped up and down with joy, and waved his stubby arms at the others to get their attention.
Characters are or aren't supposed to talk in video games for a reason. Use that to your advantage. ;) Also, might I reccommend the Fanfic of the Month contest, if you want to see how you fare against others?
Wow, sounds like you write alot of Fan-Fics! ;)
and where do you add the fanfics we PMd to you on the thread?
Then again,. Lightning Sword is a tough critic to please... So I guess that is a good sign.....
XD
I'll take your advice....
This is my second fic, so that's why it isn't all that great... :P
Next chapter soon? I all but abandoned my horrendous fanfic, so my anticipation for this runs high.
Quote from: thunderhero4 on January 31, 2008, 09:27:54 PM
Quote from: LightningSword on January 31, 2008, 09:26:30 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on January 31, 2008, 09:20:59 PM
Quote from: LightningSword on January 31, 2008, 09:17:26 PM
I read the first three chapters, and then skipped to the last chapter you wrote. It's not bad, but it's not great either. Your description is good, but the story itself seems to be missing something... The plot isn't very elaborate from what I've read, and the characters don't seem to be... very in character. Also, I spotted a few grammar, mechanical, and spelling errors.
However, I haven't read the whole thing, so what do I know? Write a few more chapters, and I'll be able to make a more clear verdict.
hmmm.....
I know the plot is bad, but it will get better.
Were very close to the half point, where the plot will pick up more...
Also it's hard getting characters that barely talk into character....
Remember that...
Use their emotions, then. Detail the wrinkles that appear on their face when they grimace, the way they move, etc.
"Let's go." Kriby said.
That didn't sound very good, did it? Or, maybe it did sound good, but not great. Instead, do this:
The small, pink puffball jumped up and down with joy, and waved his stubby arms at the others to get their attention.
Characters are or aren't supposed to talk in video games for a reason. Use that to your advantage. ;) Also, might I reccommend the Fanfic of the Month contest, if you want to see how you fare against others?
Wow, sounds like you write alot of Fan-Fics! ;)
and where do you add the fanfics we PMd to you on the thread?
If you read my thread, then you'd know that I keep them until the 24th, and then I'll post all the entries. So far, you're the only one.
QuoteNext chapter soon? I all but abandoned my horrendous fanfic, so my anticipation for this runs high.
And I hope that
you haven't forgotten that you are a judge in the contest. ;)
Quote from: LightningSword on January 31, 2008, 09:40:51 PM
Quote from: thunderhero4 on January 31, 2008, 09:27:54 PM
Quote from: LightningSword on January 31, 2008, 09:26:30 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on January 31, 2008, 09:20:59 PM
Quote from: LightningSword on January 31, 2008, 09:17:26 PM
I read the first three chapters, and then skipped to the last chapter you wrote. It's not bad, but it's not great either. Your description is good, but the story itself seems to be missing something... The plot isn't very elaborate from what I've read, and the characters don't seem to be... very in character. Also, I spotted a few grammar, mechanical, and spelling errors.
However, I haven't read the whole thing, so what do I know? Write a few more chapters, and I'll be able to make a more clear verdict.
hmmm.....
I know the plot is bad, but it will get better.
Were very close to the half point, where the plot will pick up more...
Also it's hard getting characters that barely talk into character....
Remember that...
Use their emotions, then. Detail the wrinkles that appear on their face when they grimace, the way they move, etc.
"Let's go." Kriby said.
That didn't sound very good, did it? Or, maybe it did sound good, but not great. Instead, do this:
The small, pink puffball jumped up and down with joy, and waved his stubby arms at the others to get their attention.
Characters are or aren't supposed to talk in video games for a reason. Use that to your advantage. ;) Also, might I reccommend the Fanfic of the Month contest, if you want to see how you fare against others?
Wow, sounds like you write alot of Fan-Fics! ;)
and where do you add the fanfics we PMd to you on the thread?
If you read my thread, then you'd know that I keep them until the 24th, and then I'll post all the entries. So far, you're the only one.
QuoteNext chapter soon? I all but abandoned my horrendous fanfic, so my anticipation for this runs high.
And I hope that you haven't forgotten that you are a judge in the contest. ;)
Fan fic of the month? Can I enter?
Quote from: wiiboychris on February 01, 2008, 01:17:45 AM
Quote from: LightningSword on January 31, 2008, 09:40:51 PM
Quote from: thunderhero4 on January 31, 2008, 09:27:54 PM
Quote from: LightningSword on January 31, 2008, 09:26:30 PM
Quote from: Triforceman22 on January 31, 2008, 09:20:59 PM
Quote from: LightningSword on January 31, 2008, 09:17:26 PM
I read the first three chapters, and then skipped to the last chapter you wrote. It's not bad, but it's not great either. Your description is good, but the story itself seems to be missing something... The plot isn't very elaborate from what I've read, and the characters don't seem to be... very in character. Also, I spotted a few grammar, mechanical, and spelling errors.
However, I haven't read the whole thing, so what do I know? Write a few more chapters, and I'll be able to make a more clear verdict.
hmmm.....
I know the plot is bad, but it will get better.
Were very close to the half point, where the plot will pick up more...
Also it's hard getting characters that barely talk into character....
Remember that...
Use their emotions, then. Detail the wrinkles that appear on their face when they grimace, the way they move, etc.
"Let's go." Kriby said.
That didn't sound very good, did it? Or, maybe it did sound good, but not great. Instead, do this:
The small, pink puffball jumped up and down with joy, and waved his stubby arms at the others to get their attention.
Characters are or aren't supposed to talk in video games for a reason. Use that to your advantage. ;) Also, might I reccommend the Fanfic of the Month contest, if you want to see how you fare against others?
Wow, sounds like you write alot of Fan-Fics! ;)
and where do you add the fanfics we PMd to you on the thread?
If you read my thread, then you'd know that I keep them until the 24th, and then I'll post all the entries. So far, you're the only one.
QuoteNext chapter soon? I all but abandoned my horrendous fanfic, so my anticipation for this runs high.
And I hope that you haven't forgotten that you are a judge in the contest. ;)
Fan fic of the month? Can I enter?
You can only enter one fic per month, but if you read the thread, then maybe you can enter a fic of yours...
I thought that this was really good, ;D great fanfic its cool!