kotor2: the brwal lords

[captainjacksparrow]

thanks to starwizerd for tile now for prolouge
Prologue
PROLOUGE: THE DEAL
everybody was enjoying a feast at the brawl mansion until,
(ZAPPPPP)
bowser: hey I was eating that turkey.
cjs: sorry but I needed to get your guys attention. I need you to be in my story.
Pacman: why?
(Shoots pacman which is why he won't be in brawl)
cjs: that's why. Now the story is kotor 2
pichu: i own that game
pikachu: arnt you a little young to own it
pichu: maybe.
cjs:ok ignoring the fact that pichu plays star wars games when he's 8...
pichu: im not 8 and you'll never find out my age
... ill tell you the cast. The exile will be played by peach. the exile is a young woman who is a strong leader and will become one of the strongest Jedi ever.
peach: COOL
cjs: you also start in a bikini.
peach: SAY WHAT?
cjs: now for kreia the old yet smart hag. She is the main antagonist at the end of the game. she will be played by mewtwo
mewtwo: if I must.
cjs:now for atton who is a male use to be sith soldier who helps the exile on her quest. you also fall in with the exile. you will be played by ike
males: SAY WHAT?
ike and peach in a quiet voice: sweet
cjs: ok now for t3-m4 a droid who is an astomich droid that helps the exile on his quest. it will be played by Kirby.
kirby: ok...i guess
cjs: bao-dur is a technician who has 1 robot arm. he served the exile during the war and has a remote. He will be played by........ ICE CLIMBERS.
iceclimbers: yea we actually have a role for once.
cjs: now for the handmaiden who isn't in the game on the female quest but im the director so I used a mod making her in. She's a hot echini woman who trains with the exile and joins the exile on her quest. You will be played by samus.
Samus: theirs something fishy about this.
cjs: yep you two train in bikinis while atton spies on you. you would be naked but I don't like porn. also because his has to keeps a t rating.
ike: SWEET MY PART CANT GET BETTER THEN THIS. (gets shot)
cloud: I can heal you ike.
cjs: this is why you are playing as the disciple the padawan to the exile who is the master at healing.
cloud: nice.
cjs: ok now we have Mira. a bounty hunter who accompanies the exile on her quest and saves the exile from goto a droid who was going to be in a story until I blew him up because he sucks. so tifa: your Mira
tifa: uh oh you aren't actually are going to make us do you know?
(cloud grins and cjs nods)
cjs: anyway we have a few characters left. Mandolore a guy who's all about honor who will be played by snake because he so wait a second where is he? WHAT THE (gets hit by grenade launcher)
snake: ha seems like we don't have to do this anymore.
cjs: you wish. I have three characters left. their people that didn't have major parts but because of mods I can put them in. Bastila Shan a Jedi who after the war left the order but helps the exile because reaven comes back and saves them from a attack from sion with the help from carth. bastila will be played by Zelda and carth will be played by link. Darth reaven will be played by me. now for those who were left out I have parts for but I won't tell who they are. anyway that's it see ya in game. opps I forgot hk-47 a trigger happy droid who will be played by sonic. now for those who are lazy enough not to read this here character list
exile: peach
kriea:mewtwo
atton:ike
t3-m4:kirby
bao-dur:ice climbers
handmadien:samus
disciple: cloud
mira:tifa
mandalore:snake
bastila:zelda
carth:link
reven:cjs
hk-47:sonic

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[captainjacksparrow]

Chapter 1:peruagus 2
peach:zzzzzz...zzzzz
(awaken)
peach:zzzzz.zzzzz
(I SAID DAM AWAKEN)
peach:what the....(hits floor)where am i?
(i dont know just come into my room)
peach slowly walked towred the room on the right where she found two people. She serched the remains of the male and found a weapon.
mewtwo:findwhat youve been lo-
peach:DIE ZOMBIE
mewtwo:in not-zap-A DANG-zzap-ZOMBIE
peach:oh sorry. now where am i. and why was i knocked out?
mt:i know the awnsers to neither question but i do know we need to leave quickly.
peach:why your book on how to speak in a cyiptic language avrived ha h-(force pushed)
mt:just get us out of here.
peach:alright.
after walking  for severl minuts she sensed somthing
p:what the...
mt:ah you can sense it yes? your force powers are slowing returning...
p:does that mean im as strong as yoda?
mt:whos yoda?
p:sorry wrong era.
after fighting through serverl primes peach finds a room
(door opens)
ike:hey betiful do you walk in a bikini all the time or did they change miner regulations?
p:who are you?
i:my name is ike. sorry i cant shake your hand but this force cage gives me burns on contact.
p:where are we and what happend to all the miners?
i:welcome to peragus 2 know for mining but is a mine field if you shoot at it in a fighter.the miners locked me up so i have no idea what happend.
p:are you a pilot?
i:yes and if you let me out ill help you get out of here.
p:ok
(the two then went to the controll panel)
i:ok it seems like that the door to the hanger is locked. and the only place miners might be is in the dormitory but the elevater to get their is locked.
p:let me see...... heres a comm ill try it
(turns on and calls kirby)
p:kirby i need you to unlock the elevator.
k:its locked but ill open the other way down
(after unlocking the elevator kirby is shot by charzard)
i:so.. it must be hard to be a jedi because you cant have family...
p:its no hared then you straring at my breasts
i:ok ok i be quiet...
(door opens)
p:ok theirs the door ill be right back to see if any one is alive
(after serching and finding all the miners were dead peach she takes the elevator up and sees mewtwo)
mt:hurry hes here.
p:who?
mt:ill tell you later
(they go and find ike)
i:ok i finaly hacked and gained accses to the harbringer which lead directly to the hanger.
charzard:not so fast.
p:who the hell are you.
c:im charzard and i was sent to kill you because theirs a bounty on your head.
(is shot by ike)
i:ok now thats over lets go.
after killing some polygons and getting the charts mewtwo sundenly stops.
mt:i have to stall him.
p:stall who and what didnt you tell me.
mt:darth pikachu my old apprentice is here. ill stall him you get to the ebon hawk.
i:sounds good to me.
peach and ike get to the ebon hawk while kriea fights sion and loses her hand. she then gets to the ebon hawk right when it takes off.the harbringer follows and misses and shoots a astroid destrying the harrbringer but the ebon hawk made a jump to hyperspace.
end of chapter

[Light]

Alright...

1) Learn to spell.
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[DededeCloneChris]

Alright...

1) Learn to spell.
2) Make spaces after each punctuation.
3) Very few good fics have been made in script format. I advise you to start in paragraph form. Also, using script is said to be lazy.

Follow this, and you're on your way to making a better fic.

I agree, separate the lines also.

[captainjacksparrow]

chapter 1 spell check. took about a half hour. :-X