This fanfic takes place on Mobius and has nothing to do with the anime or comic series.
DISCLAIMER: I do not own Sonic the Hedgehog or any related characters. The only characters in this story that are mine are those created solely by myself.
Chapter 1: Bitter Words and Heartbreak
Amy Rose hummed a happy tune as she put the finishing touches on the chocolate chip cookies she had made for Sonic. She knew Dr. Eggman had disappeared, and Sonic had been out all day searching for him, so she figured he would be tired and hungry. She also knew he would be on his way to visit Tails at his workshop soon, so she had to hurry. She packed them into a picnic basket and set off.
When she arrived, she found the young fox working on the Tornado. Tails finished tightening a bolt before running up to greet the pink hedgehog.
"Is Sonic here yet?" she asked enthusiastically.
"Not yet, Amy," replied the vulpine. "He should be here soon."
As if on cue, a blue hedgehog appeared in front of them.
"Hello, Sonic," said Amy. "Would you like some cookies? They're your favorite: chocolate chip!"
"No, thanks, not now," he replied bluntly, much to both Amy's and Tails' surprise. Tails merely presumed Sonic was stressed out from chasing Eggman all day, and would be better soon. But though he may have been correct about the reason for Sonic's rudeness, he was wrong about the results.
Amy frowned.
"Would either of you like anything to drink?" she asked politely.
"Sure, thanks," said Tails
"Not now, Amy," said Sonic, just as rude as before.
"Are you sure, Sonniku?" she asked, using her special term of endearment.
"I told you not to call me that," replied Sonic bluntly and rather rudely. "And I already said 'no'!"
Amy was a bit hurt at his words. Tails was also surprised at Sonic's conduct and he was a little concerned for his friend. Amy went to the kitchen to get two cups of coffee for Tails and herself. A tear came to her eye, and she dropped a mug, shattering it. She bent down to pick it up, but quickly recoiled, her finger bleeding. She wiped the tear away and got a Band-Aid as Sonic walked in to clean up the mess.A
Now's my chance! She thought.
"Sonic, why won't you go out with me?!" she asked.
"Oh, Amy, not now!" he cried, exasperated.
"Sonic, I-," she began, but was interrupted.
"No, you know what, Amy? Maybe it's because you're an annoying pest who won't go away! You're like the common cold! You always come back and there's no way to get rid of you! I don't love you, Amy! I never will! So, why don't you just leave me ALONE?"
Amy stared at him in shock and disbelief as his words sunk into her like needles in her flesh. She ran out of the workshop, knocking down the basket of cookies as she went, tears flooding her eyes. Sonic stood, breathing hard, not realizing the damage he had just caused.
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So how do you like it? Sorry if it sounds a little ripped off, it'll get more original.
Hmm... so far, I have to say it's OK...
The chapter was short, and I think Sonic was extremely out of character. He would only behave like that if something REALLY mad him off. But, maybe that's what happened. You're the writer. You create the fic.
However, Tails and Amy were both in character. Good job with that. I want to see how this fic will progress. Good luck!
Quote from: LightningSword on December 20, 2007, 09:15:52 PM
Hmm... so far, I have to say it's OK...
The chapter was short, and I think Sonic was extremely out of character. He would only behave like that if something REALLY mad him off. But, maybe that's what happened. You're the writer. You create the fic.
However, Tails and Amy were both in character. Good job with that. I want to see how this fic will progress. Good luck!
Yeah, I just thought of a way to actually give him a reason for being like that... Hmm... I'll just edit that reason in, and it will show importance later... Thanks...
Quote from: Triforce_Luigi on December 20, 2007, 09:26:13 PM
Quote from: LightningSword on December 20, 2007, 09:15:52 PM
Hmm... so far, I have to say it's OK...
The chapter was short, and I think Sonic was extremely out of character. He would only behave like that if something REALLY mad him off. But, maybe that's what happened. You're the writer. You create the fic.
However, Tails and Amy were both in character. Good job with that. I want to see how this fic will progress. Good luck!
Yeah, I just thought of a way to actually give him a reason for being like that... Hmm... I'll just edit that reason in, and it will show importance later... Thanks...
Good work/job!
Quote from: wiiboychris on December 21, 2007, 05:27:07 PM
Quote from: Triforce_Luigi on December 20, 2007, 09:26:13 PM
Quote from: LightningSword on December 20, 2007, 09:15:52 PM
Hmm... so far, I have to say it's OK...
The chapter was short, and I think Sonic was extremely out of character. He would only behave like that if something REALLY mad him off. But, maybe that's what happened. You're the writer. You create the fic.
However, Tails and Amy were both in character. Good job with that. I want to see how this fic will progress. Good luck!
Yeah, I just thought of a way to actually give him a reason for being like that... Hmm... I'll just edit that reason in, and it will show importance later... Thanks...
Good work/job!
Why the slash?
hmmm, what made sonic so mad....ususally hes ALWAYS in a good mood!
Quote from: thunderhero4 on December 22, 2007, 09:08:19 PM
hmmm, what made sonic so mad....ususally hes ALWAYS in a good mood!
Uhm... Well. You'll see. And some classic characters will make a return as well.
I could read this. The name kind of threw me off, but it isn't half-bad.
Quote from: Birdie of Aces on December 22, 2007, 09:53:08 PM
I could read this. The name kind of threw me off, but it isn't half-bad.
Well, I'm thinking about changing the title... It's either this, or "The Melancholy of Amy Rose."
I thought Rosy the Rascal was going to be a fan character XD. I think the second one sounds better.
Quote from: Birdie of Aces on December 22, 2007, 10:09:24 PM
I thought Rosy the Rascal was going to be a fan character XD. I think the second one sounds better.
Rosy the Rascal was Amy's nickname in Sonic the Fighters. And I think I'll change the title...
Quote from: Birdie of Aces on December 22, 2007, 09:53:08 PM
I could read this. The name kind of threw me off, but it isn't half-bad.
Yeah. Looking back on this, it's actually one of the better fics here. Not quite up there with "Your Memories are Not Enough", but it's still better than anything wiiboychris puts out, and most of the Smash Bros. fics here. Both of those are really annoying. The fics wiiboychris post are not even his!
You know they are his if they suck :P. But if they are even remotely funny, you know he copied and pasted (like that Hedgehog Encyclopedia thing).
Quote from: Birdie of Aces on December 24, 2007, 11:53:55 AM
You know they are his if they suck :P. But if they are even remotely funny, you know he copied and pasted (like that Hedgehog Encyclopedia thing).
lol. FINALLY someone agrees with me! :D :P
Quote from: LightningSword on December 24, 2007, 11:59:35 AM
Quote from: Birdie of Aces on December 24, 2007, 11:53:55 AM
You know they are his if they suck :P. But if they are even remotely funny, you know he copied and pasted (like that Hedgehog Encyclopedia thing).
lol. FINALLY someone agrees with me! :D :P
Wikipedia: Hedgehogs, you mean?
Quote from: wiiboychris on December 25, 2007, 03:20:14 PM
Quote from: LightningSword on December 24, 2007, 11:59:35 AM
Quote from: Birdie of Aces on December 24, 2007, 11:53:55 AM
You know they are his if they suck :P. But if they are even remotely funny, you know he copied and pasted (like that Hedgehog Encyclopedia thing).
lol. FINALLY someone agrees with me! :D :P
Wikipedia: Hedgehogs, you mean?
Obviously.
Chapter 2: Some Old Adversaries Return
Amy raced down the street to her apartment as fast as she could, tears flowing. She didn't understand Sonic's rage. All she'd ever wanted was for him to love her. To be his one and only. She knew she'd been a little clingy at times, but she'd always been kind and nice to Sonic.
Upon reaching her apartment, she flopped down on the frilly pink couch, sobbing into a pillow. After several minutes of waterworks, she got up and wiped her eyes. She got out her phonebook and flipped through it until she found the number she was looking for. She dialed the number on her shocking pink phone and tapped her foot impatiently as it rang.
"Who is it?" came a voice at last. It was a wheezy voice, as if its owner smoked quite a bit.
"Is this Nack the Weasel?" asked Amy coldly.
"Nack the Weasel?" replied the voice. "Hah! You need to keep up with the times, girl. Yeah, it's him, but they call me Fang now. Fang the Sniper."
"Very well then, Fang," said Amy. "It's Amy Rose."
"Amy? Sonic's little fan girl?"
"Not anymore, Fang. I hear you've run out of business lately."
"Yeah, what's your point?"
"Well, I have a mission for you. You remember Sonic."
"Sonic?! That blue little pest! Yeah, I remember!"
"Good. I want him dead."
"What? I thought you loved him. Wanted to marry him or something. What happened?"
"None of your business," snapped Amy. "You'll find out soon enough, anyway. I'll meet you at a café by Station Square at seven to brief you on your assignment."
"Okay," replied Fang. "See you there, Amy."
Amy hung up the phone and reached for the phonebook. She flipped to the "R" section and ripped the page she needed out. She picked up the phone once more and dialed another number. This time, the answer was immediate.
"Hello," came a feminine voice. "Who is it?"
"Hey, Rouge, it's Amy. Could you meet me at the café by Station Square at around seven?"
"Huh? Um. Sure Amy, why not?"
"Oh, and, um, do you know where Shadow is?"
"Yeah, why?"
"Could you ask him to come too?"
"Okay," said Rouge reluctantly before hanging up.
Amy sat back down on the couch, an eager smile creeping on her face. She would have her revenge.
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Sorry this had so much dialogue, but this was the only way I could introduce Fang and Rogue and have it make sense.
Wow... sorry, but chapter two was an extreme let down. Amy was COMPLETELY out of character. She would never want Sonic to die. To be hurt painfully, sure. But not die. Still, you did an ok job with this chapter. The use of vocabulary was good, and no grammar or spelling errors. I've always found beginnings hard to write, lol.
Quote from: LightningSword on December 25, 2007, 06:29:51 PM
Wow... sorry, but chapter two was an extreme let down. Amy was COMPLETELY out of character. She would never want Sonic to die. To be hurt painfully, sure. But not die. Still, you did an ok job with this chapter. The use of vocabulary was good, and no grammar or spelling errors. I've always found beginnings hard to write, lol.
About Amy... You'll see... She's hurt... BAD.
EDIT: And to further elaborate on that, her minds kind of in shock. She's not thinking straight. And now that I think, I found a better way to introduce Fang. Oh, well.
Quote from: Triforce_Luigi on December 25, 2007, 06:36:16 PM
Quote from: LightningSword on December 25, 2007, 06:29:51 PM
Wow... sorry, but chapter two was an extreme let down. Amy was COMPLETELY out of character. She would never want Sonic to die. To be hurt painfully, sure. But not die. Still, you did an ok job with this chapter. The use of vocabulary was good, and no grammar or spelling errors. I've always found beginnings hard to write, lol.
About Amy... You'll see... She's hurt... BAD.
EDIT: And to further elaborate on that, her minds kind of in shock. She's not thinking straight. And now that I think, I found a better way to introduce Fang. Oh, well.
Ill bet the megabuddies peoples would like this chapter!
It is on Megabuddies already, Brandon. And you are correct.
Quote from: Triforce_Luigi on December 25, 2007, 10:21:40 PM
It is on Megabuddies already, Brandon. And you are correct.
Yeah, I saw! Im even on there now AND this one at the same time!! :O
Quote from: thunderhero4 on December 25, 2007, 10:57:47 PM
Quote from: Triforce_Luigi on December 25, 2007, 10:21:40 PM
It is on Megabuddies already, Brandon. And you are correct.
Yeah, I saw! Im even on there now AND this one at the same time!! :O
Two tabs FTW!!!
I don't see why Amy would want Sonic dead. I mean, he yells at her to go away all the time. I guess I'll have to wait and see if the reason is worth it or not... This chapter didn't live up to the first, but it was still good.
Well, you need to get back to work soon! :)
Quote from: thunderhero4 on December 28, 2007, 11:48:35 AM
Well, you need to get back to work soon! :)
I have lots of time.
This IS getting interesting.