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Title: I wrote a poem.
Post by: GreatGonzales106 on June 02, 2009, 09:32:20 PM

I had to write a poem for English class, so i thought I would share it with you guys.

The sky is like a vast work on canvas
Of ever-changing art
Splatters of color upon color upon color
Painted for all to see
By the hands of the everlasting universe
Every possible hue
Used expertly to create a masterpiece
Darkness and light
Combined to create ever-changing art
Sun and moon
Both have their time on display
But with
A loud crack of thunder and lightning
An eclipse
Or even a solitarily suspended cloud
The sky is
A vast work of ever-changing art

Tell me what you think. _{Just don't be too brutal. :'(}

Title: Re: I wrote a poem.
Post by: Zovistograt on June 03, 2009, 04:12:10 AM

I'm sure if you really applied yourself you could have expanded on this with more metaphor and double-meanings, but on the whole I think this poem has great contrast with the structure of long and short lines. The stanza itself is pleasing to the eye.

Title: Re: I wrote a poem.
Post by: GreatGonzales106 on June 03, 2009, 03:30:58 PM

Quote from: Zovistograt on June 03, 2009, 04:12:10 AM
I'm sure if you really applied yourself you could have expanded on this with more metaphor and double-meanings, but on the whole I think this poem has great contrast with the structure of long and short lines. The stanza itself is pleasing to the eye.

Thanks :)

I had to write the whole thing last night, so I tried not to think about it too much and when I had all the requirements I just put an ending on it.

NSFCD

Generally Speaking => Artistic Discussion => Topic started by: GreatGonzales106 on June 02, 2009, 09:32:20 PM